Love it!!! You my dear are a very talented author and should keep up the good work!
There are a few continuity issues here. You said much earlier in the story that Kagura was a bridesmaid, but now say that she's Sesshoumaru's ex with whom he had a child? You mentioned Rin being in the wedding in the third or fourth chapter, but now Kagome is asking to mert her? I also don't get the jokes (the random cult and drug bits). It seems very immature/middle school for a group that's supposed to be ranging from twenty-eight to thirty-five.
I wonder how Kagome can.claim that she thinks she loves Sesshoumaru, and how Sesshoumaru could have such strong feelings for Kagome, when they haven't really spent any time together. They barely know anything about one another. It feels like the story was written at three different times...
I thought they were married not mated????
Darn! Did it again! I quit! Loved the story!
Sorry, I hate it when I mess up a preview.
Very nice finish! Everyone is happy and Karma ad her way with the bad guys. I see now that you had worked on this over a long period of time, which would explain some of the disjointedness. Nice story and one day, when your muse is pelting you with plunnies, maybe you can do a littlebre- editing. Cheers!
Yeah! Here comes the Calvary!
HAHAHA! In laws to be can be so much fun!
Oh that is evil! I'm really hoping that karma gets her chance.
Very nice chapter and the brothers are in agreement on disowning their ditzy dad! LOL!
Well, well, well...why isn't that POS in jail awaiting trail. Nice to have a rich daddy to bail you out. Great twist.
What a hardhead! Jumps right to the wrong conclusion.
Hmmm...HELLO...Just say something... Duh!
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