Love it!!! You my dear are a very talented author and should keep up the good work!
There are a few continuity issues here. You said much earlier in the story that Kagura was a bridesmaid, but now say that she's Sesshoumaru's ex with whom he had a child? You mentioned Rin being in the wedding in the third or fourth chapter, but now Kagome is asking to mert her? I also don't get the jokes (the random cult and drug bits). It seems very immature/middle school for a group that's supposed to be ranging from twenty-eight to thirty-five.
I wonder how Kagome can.claim that she thinks she loves Sesshoumaru, and how Sesshoumaru could have such strong feelings for Kagome, when they haven't really spent any time together. They barely know anything about one another. It feels like the story was written at three different times...
I thought they were married not mated????
Darn! Did it again! I quit! Loved the story!
Sorry, I hate it when I mess up a preview.
Very nice finish! Everyone is happy and Karma ad her way with the bad guys. I see now that you had worked on this over a long period of time, which would explain some of the disjointedness. Nice story and one day, when your muse is pelting you with plunnies, maybe you can do a littlebre- editing. Cheers!
Yeah! Here comes the Calvary!
HAHAHA! In laws to be can be so much fun!
Oh that is evil! I'm really hoping that karma gets her chance.
Very nice chapter and the brothers are in agreement on disowning their ditzy dad! LOL!
Well, well, well...why isn't that POS in jail awaiting trail. Nice to have a rich daddy to bail you out. Great twist.
What a hardhead! Jumps right to the wrong conclusion.
Hmmm...HELLO...Just say something... Duh!
Still really liking this story! Ugh! Hojo broke into her house. Creepy stalker! Okay on the last chapter she gets this great emerald necklace from Kikyo but never says Thank You or mentions it later when they are together. It's like it got thrown in and then forgotten. Sometimes this story seems like you want to rush and get all the good bits out there but they don't fit all the time or the timeline can be a bit confusing. Your other stories don't seem to flow like that. Is this an earlier one? It could use a bit of polishing up. Still enjoying it though.
Such s fun chapter. Everyone from a crazy sweet Inupapa to all her conniving friends.
this was a good story. i liked how kikyo and kagome got along in this one. the way you wrote them was a good change of pace for me. i like it when they are written this way. these two dont always have to be enemies. i hope you can take the time to finish your others stories. i would like to read them. making hojo the bad guy was diffent too. i found him to be a bit creepy in the anime as well. keep up the great writing. c'ya'
Ok everything seems to be changing. Kagome's eyes were light brown now they are blue. inupapa's name has change from Inutaishio to Toga, and neither can be his last name since u already said it was Tenshi. Kahome already met Nakuru but in a later chapter it seemed like the office was their first meeting. Kagura was suppose to be a brides at the wedding but later when you put her as Sesshomaru's ex wife. Rin is their daughter and in the beginning you made her seem like she was kikiyo family cause kagome seemed to know her despite only meeting her way later. There are many other discrepancies but to be honest I LIKE THEM!! but the story isnt consistent maybe u should change a few thing in the earlier chapters to match the later ones
Good Story so far. However most of it is redundant. There is no need to tell us the story twice or three times. All you needed to do was say Kagome reiterated the tale to Sango then tell us her response. It get annoying after a while when you repeat so much. Im not trying to be mean or I would say it is a bad story. I am just giving advice
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