Oh my God, heartbreaking... and interesting, although not surprising, that Jak's grief is manifested in his clothing. His apparel is an extension of himself, and it's painful to see him wear the color of mourning because it reflects what's inside. I can see this leading to an even closer relationship with the new pack he's formed, and these feelings further separating him from Bankotsu (although I don't think Bank would purposefully reject him, more like Jak would preempt it by refusing to confront Bank). Do I detect an attraction from Ken? That might also be a good reprieve...to build a completely new relationship.
I don't think all OCs are bad, especially when they're written well. They can do much to facilitate a fic. Yours seem solid already, and I totally trust your mad skillz regardless, so I look forward to more.
And with the "old Inutaisho" mask... I'm assuming you mean Inu-jiji, right? Not Sess and Inu's daddeh?
Between this and the last few chappies, it's been one hell of a rollercoaster, woman! Great stuff, as always!
{GASP} Jaks' face is ruined? Oh my....he seemed so listless and despondent..it hurt my heart. Great chapter...awesome.
Secret...Agenct Man! Secret...Agent Man! That song is on loop in my head now. Thanks knifethrower, now I have to find another dorky song to replace it! Anyway, good chapter. Kangome's being dorky again. Where is Jak?
Very , Very nice...excellent work. Sessh found a way to keep his mate from danger[ as wel as from Big Daddy] , even if it is with Koga and his pack. He is comfortable in his mating and doesn't mind if others desire her - awww...
Still , he should hev reprimanded the wolf for trying to look down her kimono...the nerve of him. Keep it coming girl!!!
wow...that's messed up. So he's the evil?! Dang.
LOL I'm still working to catch up, But I loved the Sango and Inutashio chapter. The ending let me very amused. :P
WHOA....
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did I read that right?
Sesshoumaru has NO INTENTION of having children with Kagome, because he doesn't want the world infested with any more hanyou FILTH? Oh sweet dear lord baby Jebus...
He does not understand Kagome AT ALL. And frankly, THAT PISSES ME OFF.
Ya know what? It's shit like this that turns me Team-Kouga. Seriously. If there's anyone in this damned story (I so do not mean that as an insult!) who even remotely gets Kagome, it's him, at least more than any other guy around. Oh hell, I want Kagome to hook up with SANGO! At least there's somebody who gives an honest damn about her feelings! For realz that MADE ME SO ANGRY!!! ARGGG!!!! HIEHFAITGAHYAO!!!!!!!!!!
I'm betting Sesshoumaru doesn't even KNOW he's not pure-bred. Will that be a weapon his father uses? "Howdy Son! Did you know your mother is a shapeshifting alien creature? She's not even a real youkai?! OH SNAP!!"
Sweet damn, I'm so mad!! Where are you, Kouga?? Come get your woman!
Hahahaha! Why does picturing Sess quoting Prince make me laugh?! Great job once again. So, does Sess not know his mother's history? He did not want to pup Kagome because there would be more "hanyou filth", yet it seems he does not know all about himself either. Wow, that revelation will knock him silly.
One more thing, if Sess' Mom cannot remember what she was, is it possible she was never human to begin with? And why does Amaya not know this? She said human princess, but from earlier, his Mom had been trapped so long she was not sure herself. What is she? Could she be a Kami also?
Ok, tell the truth....Amaya really is an egg short of a dozen, right? When is Jak coming back? I miss him!
GASP!!! Sesshou is NOT pure demon???? By the Kamis...too damned intriguing. Please, go on...I need more insight. Sooo addictive, it's sinful.
Wow... I don't know why, but this chapter was particularly thrilling. I think a lot of it has to do with Sango. The quiet, dutiful ones are always the kinkiest, aren't they? So titillating and refreshing to hear Kagome's not the only one who easily succumbs to a demon man's charms. And my oh my... dirty thoughts of Inuyasha, eh? He probably would've taken Sango up on those if he'd known...the bastard... literally.
And then there's Bankotsu. I can't quite tell if you hinted he and Jak were more than comrades, thus insinuating he wouldn't be interested in Sango even if she put a boot to his balls, or if he just holds Jak in high esteem. He is so sinfully sexy, and so underrated. I've always thought he and Sango would make a captivating couple; the tension, the athleticism, the rivalry, the mutual appreciation, strengthening and yes, even respect. If it works with the plot, I wouldn't mind these two at least hooking up. Holla!
But ya know what, it's not just your "scenery" that's the smex. It's the subterfuge. Your insight into charm as a weapon was... well, for lack of a better word... hot. Just hot, like seductively hot. Everyone is double-crossing each other, and it kinda turns me on. I don't know what I mean, really, but the scene by the fire, combined with Sango's budding arousal, made ME want to jump Bank's "kotsu"s, hey hey hey. I hope she screws duty just this once, and screws Bank, too!
Great chap, as always! (BTW, "kotsu" means "bones" just in case you're thinking I'm crazier than normal!)
Ikaru (Chapter 73) - Mon 02 Mar 2009
oohhhh evil evil cliffies!!! But i got to say i really like the way this story is going....so many questions to be answered.....hhmmmm...oh well can't wait to see what comes next!! later :)
wawa (Chapter 73) - Mon 02 Mar 2009
What a fantastic story! I love the idea of Inu Tashiou being a bad guy. It took me forever to read ALL seventy-three chapters, but it was worth every second! Can't wait to read more. See you next time!
Hmmmm...Is Amaya there to stop InuTaisho, or trying to get rid of Kagome who she sees as competition? What is her point?
Am I understanding this right ? The advancements in Fudo that had Sessh so [ dare I say it ?] worried were brought on by his father who is gearing up to wage war on his son and take back the title of Lord Of The West ? And he was the one who commissioned the service of the Band? Oh man, this is gettin' sooo good. Hurry and post more , the anticipation is killing me girl!!! I adore this fic!!!!!
The number 1 thing I realised in your story is....everyone needs a Jak in their lives. Hey, with everything going on, just enjoy the other stories and don't push yourself too hard to update. Like I said before, your friends and fans will be here.
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