Although I liked this chapter and the emotion it brings, you have not included Shippo. You had him call her mother and her call him son in previous chapters. I think chapter 32 and maybe a small spot in 36 is the last I recall their relationship being referred to. And I have always felt they had a mother/son relationship. Yet, in this chapter he is left out of the family dynamic, that they are a family of 3 becoming 4, when it should be 5. I have enjoyed reading this story though. I just felt it needs a little clarifying on whether he is considered her son and part of their family or not and if he, is than a little of his reaction to Kagome and Maru's news. I'm looking forward to reading new chapters!! ????
Natalia (Chapter 43) - Sat 05 Aug 2017
Congratulations! Take care of yourself, and write at your own pacing.
The for updating. It was nice seeing the full story of satori.
Leticia (Chapter 43) - Sat 05 Aug 2017
Congratulations on the pregnancy and I hope you start to feel better the further along you get. I'll wait patiently for the next update.
I really loved this last chapter, as you said, it did seem a little forced but still as good as the rest of the story. However I can't help but ask, what about Kagome's other adopted son (Shippo)? Wouldn't the inclusion of Shippo make the now family of 4 into the soon to be family of 5? Unless Kagome no longer sees Shippo as her son? I guess I'm a little confused on that.... What turmoil & punishment awai Inuyasha? Will it be at the hands of Sesshomaru? Kagome? Or one you wouldn't expect, like maybe Guinevere? Or Daichi? Hope these questions & suggestions help unblock you from your writers block.......
~Saphira17
I think the chapters are great, I know you think they are forced but it seems good and appropriate for the flow of the story I look forward to the other stories!
Natalia (Chapter 41) - Sun 18 Jun 2017
The chapter was awesome despite your writer block! I can see improvement in your writing and fighting scenes! I am curious what will happen next! One question though, why guinevere? Why this name I.mean is she from.england? This is somehow unclear to me. The a lot for updating!
AHH, so excited that you updated! I'm so glad sesshomaru made the right choice and not bed the first female he saw. Please update soon!
dotti (Chapter 39) - Sat 10 Jun 2017
Welcome back!!!!!!! Please stay encouraged!!!
I thought you'd updated & was thrilled until I saw that same 1st word error & realized you'd thankfully come back & edited the lines issue. Take the h out of the 1st word in the chapter & it'll be pretty much perfect.
I thought having Kagome meet the concubines first was very clever of him knowing that his mother will try using them against Kagome to make her jealous and turning against Sessho. Now that she knows and have basically met them she will know doubt make friends with them and everything else will be moot.
Satori is trully a bitchy controlling bitch of a dog demon. The chapter was nice but the formatting was way off making reading it kind of difficult.
I thought her meeting the concubines was funny. Can't wait to see what the lady mother tries. May not be worth keeping her around for the war.
Oh gosh I can feel the drama coming and I'm all caught up! :) Oh I can't wait to see her reaction when she sees that they are mated! XD
I get hiccups like twice a day! Omg it is so annoying lol!
Yay! So happy for those guys! I can't wait to see how his mom reacts!
snow (Chapter 37) - Sat 24 Dec 2016
this is getting to good! can't wait to see what happens.
Oh snippy snap! We got two matings on the horizon! What are you Kags!? I can't wait to find out :)
I'm totally finew with Inuyasha and Guinevere. I think it's cute! I wonder why he wants to kill her though..hmmm~! Also brother bonding yay!
Yes Kagome! They messed with the wrong Miko!
Yay group hug ftw! Sango is back to smack some pervs!
Omg I had tears in my eyes at in this chapter! The feels!
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