I created a new fanfiction but I am afraid that no one appreciates. And I really want people to enjoy what I am writing so I would like to ask for your time to read my story and give me some constructive criticism about the story I'm currently writing..

When I said constructive criticism, it should be able to help me out with all my mistakes, not antagonize me or something. I mean, I do not need rude people, you could always say things in a nice way, right?

So, please, please, help me out.

Here is the link:

www.dokuga.com/fanfiction/story/7922/1

Please check it out and just give me few advice for my new story.

**ADMIN NOTE**

Story is rated MA - NO YIMs!!