Okay, I recently finished it and have read it again myself twice. It seems to move far to quickly and even I've picked out a few issues. However, and I have to stress this, I am somewhat at a loss. It's not writers block because, for the most part I can still write. So for those who haven't read it yet, and for those who have. Please do give it read, or re-read where it may concern and let me know where I might improve it.
If you think a part moved just a little too fast, I want to know. Let me know why you think it moved to fast.
If it wasn't clear enough then let me know. I want to clarify where needed.
If you see any problem what so ever, I want to hear about it. I want to hear your thoughts on said problem and I will go about fixing them.
Time Keeper by Knight of Disorder (me)
Rated - MA for Sexual Scenes. No YIMs please.