i ask that those who read my story please review it. i spent a lot of time and sweat over it trying to get it over the 700 word limit. those who dont know it is the legend that severed fate. i don't care if you despise it, you want to see more action, just tell me. i can take all critcism. i am a big girl. i handle rejection well. it was just a background premise for my original character. and as such, from the description i issue a challenge to design the character.