Reviews for Melancholy by Alon

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projectionandreflection (Chapter 15) - Thu 22 Oct 2015

Once again, you have written a great storyline, done a fantastic job portraying the characters, and it's obviously very compelling given the intensity of your readers' emotions. Am I happy with where this chapter seems to be going on a personal level? No, but can I objectionably say that as a writer you've done well? Yes! I'm still going to read to see how it all plays out. Even if it doesn't turn out how I would like to see it go that doesn't mean you haven't written a superb piece of literature. It's your story and I respect your artistic license. Thank you for taking all of our reviews into consideration. 


kagomesirene (Chapter 15) - Thu 22 Oct 2015

Well that's life...you make a decision, have live with it and often regret it...and sometimes you have the courage to change your fate, or to right your wrongs...if you have the chance, why not...who says you have to stay with someone you don't love (anymore)...some people keep enduring, some people get a devorce and start their life anew....and this story may be fiction but sure as hell no lovydovy fairytale...Sesshou is going to suffer for sure, might loose his job or parts of his company, might not get full custody for his son and will have to work very hard to get Kagome back...but that's life!

and personally i'm eager to follow Sesshou ons his way and hope to read more soon  :3


Sanu Wolff (Chapter 15) - Thu 22 Oct 2015

.0. *megagasp*


hey, anonymous. (Chapter 15) - Thu 22 Oct 2015

Hi, alon! Thank you very much for the fast updates. I really appreciate them. Even though I'm disappointed that it's Sesshomaru, I will still read your wonderful story and see it to the end. As for my wish for Sesshomaru to leave, it's just from personal experience. It's hard or even toxic to be with someone who discarded you for another in the first place. If one continues or pursues a relationship with that kind of person, there is always that lingering doubt in your mind that will always question if he or she is going to be enough. And sometimes, the relationship just becomes a prolonged and painful goodbye.

 

That is just my side. I hope you aren't frustrated by my reviews. In the end, this is your story and I'm just a reader who is totally absorbed with it and its characters. 

 

Thank you!


Glxydragon (Chapter 15) - Thu 22 Oct 2015

I doubt kagome will be happy when she sobers up. I can't see her wanting to be the catalyst the splits two parents apart from their child. The guilt would eat at her. Good chapter though.  I can't wait for the next update.


Jcdbunny (Chapter 15) - Thu 22 Oct 2015

Poor kagome, kinda hating sesshomaru right now 


Jennn (Chapter 15) - Thu 22 Oct 2015

I am glad it's Sesshomaru!! I loved this chapter! 


Debra (Chapter 15) - Thu 22 Oct 2015

Good chapter, but still don't like him. I mean even if he left the wife now it just seems too little too late. I just feel bad for Kagome for not being able to move on. How can she really trust him? He already got everything he wanted out of his relationship with his wife, more power and a son. Now he's willing to leave her and go back to Kagome. It just takes away from any future relationship they start, since he hasn't had to watch her marry or have a kid with someone else. Even if you count his wife interfering with keeping his phone, he still made the choice, and he didn't call her earlier. He also didn't call of the wedding which probably would have gotten lots of media attention, and gotten Kagome back to him. He chose, and now if he gets her back so easy it's seems like he's got his cake and gets to eat it too. Though some women seem doomed to let men get away with hurting them or choosing them second. Poor Kagome. 

Anyway i hope you update soon.


hana sora (Chapter 14) - Thu 22 Oct 2015

Keep it coming!


Kyo (Chapter 14) - Wed 21 Oct 2015

Oh my gosh! Thank you! Thank you! Thank you! Thank you! I'm so happy she did not leave!!!!! Yeah men. (dancing around the room)!!!


Mona (Chapter 14) - Wed 21 Oct 2015

Great update, I'm interested to read what happens next, maybe she curses Sesshoumaru out in her drunken state.

please update again soon.


missmirandax3 (Chapter 2) - Wed 21 Oct 2015

Really good! Keep it comimg! I love and appreciate the daily updates :) 


pennyforyourthoughts (Chapter 1) - Wed 21 Oct 2015

This is your story and you've done remarkably well with it but like everyone else I will throw in my two cents. I peesonally don't want to see Kagome end up with Sesshomaru. He lowered her to a mistress position and he has a child with this woman, a constant reminder of how devalued Kagome was to Sesshomaru. Plus, the wife has some sort of feelings for Sesshomaru and he would be basically destroying the family he chose (even if it wasn't for the right reasons) because of regret and even if he doesn't love his wife Kagome would be allowing him to degrade everyone in the situation and I just can't see her doing that. If she wasn't willing to be a mistress I don't see how she would be any more willing to be a home wrecker, and that is essentially what she would become. Even if Sesshomaru and his wife have a dysfunctional marriage, they both knew what they were doing when they married and to be fair his wife has never been allowed to obtain his affection because of Sesshomaru playing the two women against each other in essence. Sometimes in the adult world you don't get to set mistakes right, sometimes you have to live with the consequences and regret of them. Sesshomaru knew what he was getting in to. It also kind of defeats the purpose in my eyes to have him choose this other woman and have a family with her just to eventually turn around and get Kagome too; I know there is such a thing as character growth but Sesshomaru hasn't had anything at this point to cause that - and like I said there is still always going to be his child as a reminder so I don't think character growth would even justify a relationship happening between the two. Sesshomaru made his decision, it wasn't Kagome. That doesn't mean Kagome can't pick herself, not in a bitter, "I will never love anyone because I'm still in love with him or my love for anyone else will never compare so I must be alone in order to never hurt anyone how he hurt me", sort of way but I hope she makes peace with what happened, let's go of her feelings for Sesshomaru and moves on. It would be great to see her with someone, although I think that while certain aspect of Hiro's personality would help balance Kagome out Kagome has taken on a nurturing role with both him and Maki and so she can't really develop feelings beyond platonic affection because of the circumstance. I also think having her with Hiro just to have them not work out later down the line, especially after the whole Bankotsu thing, is sending the message that there is inherently something wrong with or not good enough to love within Kagome. I think if you put her in the situation where she has been broken up with by all her love interests than she becomes a weak character, especially if she ends up getting back with Sesshomaru. As I said, it would be nice to see her with someone new who she doesn't feel compelled to compare to Sesshomaru but I almost feel like this Bankotsu arc has kind of cut off any potential for that since it would almost be like having her jump from guy to guy. She deserves love but a certain standard of love and if isn't possible to write a new love interest that will actually work out and not just be a segway back to Sesshomaru than there is nothing wrong with her being her own choice. 


Debra (Chapter 14) - Wed 21 Oct 2015

I feel bad for Kagome, but it makes sense that they ended it. Although I'm positive you have Sesshoumaru showing up at the end, and I honestly don't like it. As much as i love him and Kagome in most stories he really hasn't done anything for me to think better of him in this story. If anything I honestly think I dislike him a little more now then at the begaining. I mean it kind of seems he is using his son to make her spend more time with him. Using his wife's son on his ex. It just seems so wrong and makes me dislike him more. 


Blommie8 (Chapter 14) - Wed 21 Oct 2015

Jcdbunny (Chapter 14) - Wed 21 Oct 2015

Poor kagome, i bet its sesshomaru that opened the door, hate cliff hangers (sadness) amazing chapter can't wait for the next one


Haven (Chapter 14) - Wed 21 Oct 2015

:O who could it be? Possibly Sesshomaru? :3


Hey, anonymous. (Chapter 14) - Wed 21 Oct 2015

please don't let that be sesshomaru. Please don't let that be sesshomaru.. X infinity. Still couldn't stomach the thought of going back to man who initially decided that you weren't enough and even had the gall to suggest for you to become his mistress. Would've kick the man's nuts if someone offered that to me.

 

thank you for the fast update


Blommie8 (Chapter 13) - Wed 21 Oct 2015

Blommie8 (Chapter 13) - Wed 21 Oct 2015

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