Very nice update. Thanks so much. You have to maintain what little bit might be there. I can only imagine how indignant he must be
Interesting premise, but really, it doesn't make sense for him to be more embarrassed of asking his mother for help versus a human, who would surely cause more issues while ruling in his stead. I'm curious to see why he needed her help specifically or if he was just desperate and figured she would do it with no questions asked.
The only criticism I have is too much dialog and the tone of the characters being a bit off. The dialog is too formal for every character, which makes them sound the same. I think that's fine for Miroku and Sesshoumaru, but Kaede has a distinct way of speaking while Kagome is more relaxed.
These last few chapters was better in terms of tone, though.
Well, I am all caught up and I’m looking forward to updates. Thanks so much for such an amusing story.
Ooh gosh! Don’t touch the hair! LMBO! Too funny!
I know others have told you already but I will add my voice. I hope you continue on with this charming tale. I think we are all having fun with it.
Poor Kagome. She’s not going to get away without some questions. And she’s a terrible liar.
Okay here’s a grammar thing. You wrote “Besides, Sesshoumaru-sama apparently requires forthwith my presence...”. Kagome is a modern young woman and probably is not going to use the word forthwith. It’s very archaic. She might have said that Sesshomaru requires my presence now or right now instead. What you wrote isn’t wrong but would she really use that term?
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