I do not agree with who you placed as Kagome or Sesshomaru, but hey it's your story. If you ever think of re-editing your story, i suggest placing it in the past continuous tense. An example if this would be instead of using the statement "They are suspicious of her motives in keeping the boy alive. There are mikos who enslave youkai to do their bidding" you should have used They were suspicious of her motives in keeping the boy alive. There were mikos who would enslave youkai to do their bidding." It happened in the past although it was in the present as soon as the action occurs it is in the past. But I love the story so far.
Oh Kagome, why? That's gonna hurt him, he's a huge baby lover, can't blame him for wanting you safe. Ah well, I hope that this works out somehow, too bad i don't see lemons in the future, bring back the past! Loved this chapter, can't wait to see what happens next. However, could i suggest a pre-reader so that if there's anything wrong they can catch it and tell you? Not to be mean but i see alot of wrong past and present participle mix ups and it throws me off reading it because i have to pause before i go on. If you don't want to it's fine though.
Aaaawww!
Aha (Chapter 24) - Sat 05 Nov 2011
UGH! What a place to stop! This story just keeps getting better and better! Seems like it was a spoiler alert as well, but hey, I like the way you are transitioning from both times. It explains it better.
1CarinoInu (Chapter 23) - Mon 31 Oct 2011
I so love Miroku. I hope you keep his trademark hentai :)
I really am enjoying your story - although, I find with stories that go back and forth between past and present, you lose me. But that is just me. At some point I'll read what happened in present (in the future I guess) because I enjoy the continuing antics of Sesshomaru and Kouga at each other's throats.
Keep up the good work! I'm curious what happens now that she's the guardian of the Regent of the North....
Avidreader (Chapter 18) - Sat 08 Oct 2011
Well, writer's block or no, this chapter was fantastic! It was well worth the wait. Can't wait to see what happens next. Hopefully you have moved on past the writer's block and will update more frequently! **grins and giggles**
Say 'Hell yeah!', he wouldn't give up anyway but say yes, yes, yes! The last chapter confused me, did someone hurt her in the past that's going to hurt her in the future? Where's doctor who when you need him? Ah well, just have to wait a while longer than i guess.
Harrible (Chapter 17) - Wed 05 Oct 2011
Awwwww....kagome just has to say yes to Sesshoumaru...she just has to....
its soo cute and romatic.....
well the story so far is great i cant find nothing wrong with it adn i cant wait for the next chapter and see wat Kagome willl say..
bye bye til next time
Go Inuyasha!!
Loveyaa (Chapter 11) - Wed 31 Aug 2011
I made it through. I got worried a little bit in the middle but my interest has held. I think my confusion over Kagome has cleared up as well, but what was she doing with Kouga for those 8 months and why did she not try going home. I wonder if she will bring peace, maybe not friendship but at least a stop to the fighting, between Sesshoumaru and Kouga. I can also see her causing another rift as they fight over her. I guess we still have to figure out why she was brought back and what will happen next :)
Stell (Chapter 11) - Wed 31 Aug 2011
Oh no. Will he be strong enough to resist the temptation, what Rin is offering? If he doesn't, I can see some major drama happening because of it.
Please update soon!
Wow. I loved the ending to this chapter. It was put together as a brilliant crescendo. I'm very excited to see how things will play out from here!
Yuru (Chapter 9) - Tue 23 Aug 2011
As a practicioner and instructor of Aikido, I thoroughly enjoyed chapter eight. Love the excitement of chapter nine. Keep up the great work!
Man! You just had to get everything all hot and sweaty in this chapter and then just stop! Very very cruel. But Extremely well done. I'm going to be checking this site everyday now waiting for another brilliant chapter. You really are doing a wonderful job with this story.
hahahah!! sesshoumaru and canary all put together, absolutely wonderful! I love it so much. This was another wonderful chapter that really caught my attention :)
I love this story! You've given it the same spin off (girl falls into past via well) but if Kagome had been older with a job. I love it love, love it, love it!!!
~Sandreline
Stell (Chapter 6) - Tue 16 Aug 2011
Whooaa!
Last posted chapter: 6, last line = The excrement has just hit the fan.
I can imagine the temper and war that will occur over her, like Helen of Troy.
Please update!!! I'm on tenterhooks here!
Wow I just finished reading all six chapters you have posted so far. And let me just say this is an excellent plot! Not many stories are truly unique and original right now. You have fully succeeded and I am craving more! Please keep up the wonderful writing. I'm really looking forward to what will occur next.
Avidreader (Chapter 4) - Thu 11 Aug 2011
Ugh! These chapters are WAY too short!!!! Hope you will be posting another one soon!
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