Reviews for The Second Journey by Smortz

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lara (Chapter 19) - Tue 22 Mar 2011

so was the 'future man' or evil demon that convinced the holy dudes a giant naked mole rat or a manatee?? I'm so confused about what type of demon he is & I'm confused about how an elemental demon can manipulate both nature & human elements?? and would it be all nature elements or just one like air,water,earth or fire...cause it seemed as if this demon did not want to be on dry land for any reason so it would seem that because of his desperate desire to stay near or in the water that the only nature element he could manipulate was water..but I do have a question & that is what is a human element or does it just mean he can use illusions,spells or charms to confuse the humans into thinking he was human..I'm also worried that while Ryuichi was causing trouble he was really just trying to distract his allies that saved his ass & the egg,I mean Kagome literally personally saved him from deaths door ,he was so close to death by the time she got to him the egg or the hatchling wouldn't have saved him & the only thing that saved him was Kagome using her own energy to touch him & force her energy/power into him. If he was just stalling so while they were out fighting the other dragons could sneak into the castle & steal the hatchling I hope he realizes that while he was fighting Sessh saved him from getting killed cause he wasn't strong enough to take on the demon 'future man' & by causing his diversion, Kagome ,the one who risked her life for his quest,saved the egg his people lost,healed it, saved him from deaths door & with his fight with Sessh Kagome was left to watch their backs & had to fight the 'future man ' demon by herself & if he was too strong for one of them to kill then it's a miracle Kagome survived & by the time they get her to the castle god only knows what kind of condition she'll be in. I just hope that when he catches up to the ones who took the hatchling that he sees that the hatchling is sick & dying ,& the dragons who took the hatchling are  weak & dying & he'll remember when Kagome told him specifically that the goddess, Izanami told her she/Kagome was to care for the hatchling & if it was taken from her it would die & so would the dragons.

I can't wait for the next chapter

 


Ceysna (Chapter 19) - Mon 21 Mar 2011

*bug eyed* go Kagome.... Stupid Dragon butt... if he hadn't gotten in the way... *sighs* oh well... At least Kags can't die now! Good timing Goddess Lady!! Hope Teh Baby Won't throw a hissy now that mommy got hurt... O-o....

 

Great Update!!!


JeniNeji (Chapter 18) - Mon 21 Mar 2011

i love your story! Sorry for not reviewing earlier. I read this in my cell phone but he doesnt let me review :)

 

Keep up the good job!


CandIcane (Chapter 19) - Mon 21 Mar 2011

My word of the day fo your new chapter is STUPENDOUS! Had me laughing and smiling consantly! Can not wait for the next one.


Miss.Undo (Chapter 18) - Mon 21 Mar 2011
Amazing...Please up date!

Kimi Rain Matsu (Chapter 19) - Mon 21 Mar 2011

I almost fell over laughing.....naked mole rat?.......lol......I really like your story it is humorous and intriguing. Can't wait for an update.


AzulFire (Chapter 1) - Mon 21 Mar 2011

SQEEEE THEY FINALLY KISSED....even though sesshy was losing his mind at the time....WELL WHAT EVER and i dont think i like ryuichi anymore, what is he planning? GRRRR dawww and little shuppo giving kagz his blessing IM CONFUSED!!! HOW DID KAGOME REJECT SESSHY???? why was he angry I DONT GET IT i reread it over and over again but for the life of me i cannot figure out how kagome rejected him?!?!?!? also ive heard demons grow at an extremely fast pace normally being the equivalent of a 5 year old in the first few weeks so KEEP THIS IN MIND but idc its your story do whatever you wish with it just dont kill sesshy...GREAT STORY cant wait for more your awesome writer, :D MWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAA AZUL IS OUT PEACE, also one more thing...i wasnt confused about the gender of the egg baby *doenst have name?* it was perfecly clear to me that it was a girl...hmmm STRANGE *eye twitch*


lara (Chapter 18) - Mon 21 Mar 2011

I'm dying to know what Kagome will name the baby dragon..she sure is taking her time...is there a japanese word for hope,miracle or something similar...I was thinking something like one of those would make a perfect name for her, I mean she was within the egg for more than 1,000 yrs or so. I just hope she has a connection to Kagome so that they can find each other no matter how far from each other they are. I loved it when she got the egg ,wrapped a sweater around it , put the piece from her necklace on it & held it close to her & surrounded the egg with her power & then saw the fragment & all the small cracks & lines heal until the egg was perfect.....& then it suddenly started to shake & crack & she started yelling to Shippo that she broke it & Shippo tried to calm her down telling her it's not broken ..Its Hatching & then she really started to panic.Then when Sessh got there & killed the monk & they finished hatching the egg & Sessh then went to touch the staff & Kagome said don't touch the staff I'll get it in a second & then-

 Sesshoumaru turned around and was almost forced to get on his knees again.

It was almost like a painting. The way the sun broke through the trees and on to Kagome. Her black tresses shining in the light. Her amathyst eyes staring down at the baby she held in her eyes with a maternal smile on her face. She is the prophecy. She is maternal to all things, Sesshoumaru thought out instantly.

the sentence & the paragraph above were taken right from the story...& the part I don't understand is the part where Sessh thought in his head..."She is the prophecy. She is maternal to all things" what prophecy is he talking about here...it's not the one about carrying the egg. The prophecy regarding the one who could hold the egg was not so intense,& is probably why so many beings over time had been able to hold carry & watch over the egg. So the prophecy that Sessh is referring to must be something else...

It seemed,especially from his intense reaction as soon as he turned to her & his eyes had only just glanced upon her(....and was almost forced to get on his knees),that his instantaneous recognition of 'who she was & what she represented', that the prophecy he was referring to was very important & in an all encompassing way....it was as if he was in awe of who she really was.....

I can't wait to read the next chapter & I hope his god-mother goes to the castle & we find out more about his mom...I also hope Izanami talks more to Kagome ,Sessh (& maybe his mom & god mother) you know at least to Sessh...remind him of what he realized when he saw her with hatchling &  his inner demons importance in choosing a mate that will birth powerful heirs & remind him that Kagome more than a priestess with youkai & holy powers that is also immortal...but she also has the power of a Kami within her & basically tell him if thats not enough to convince him he should go for her than tell him to remember as her Guardian & her being immortal,she will be with him in the castle for a very long time...............& everyday that passes as you keep telling everyone you have no interest in her as a mate ,you must remember that each of the males that ask what your intentions towards her are & even the ones that don't ask but listen to your response , are only asking you to clarify that you have no interest in her & that means it is okay for any or all of them to go after her........she is beautiful,amazing & one of a kind & after being forgotten once,her fear of being alone forever............the males around you are not dumb & before they ask to court her or get to know her they will openly tell her they've spoken to you & you've already made it clear that you have no interest in her......& you know how hurt Kagome was over being forgotten & she's already aware that she's growing feelings for you & she feels you dislike her as it is & not wanting to get hurt again,she's already trying to talk herself into looking at you as an unavailable male & knows you will soon be looking for a Mate to have an heir, she'll start distancing herself from you very soon...I'm telling you this as a Kami & one who knows alot & I'm telling you that if you are okay with her,living here & finding a Mate that isn't you & seeing her with him & giving him a powerful heir than do what you choose.....but decide soon,she was left behind once & her 1st instinct now is to protect her heart & not end up alone............when I asked her about her feelings for you & mentioned you'd need a mate soon,she said that she understood & would start keeping a distance asap,then ran out to find Shippo,the hatchling & Ryuichi.


Nilee1 (Chapter 18) - Mon 21 Mar 2011

This is a great chapter--so much unresolved sexual tension.


crin_fausta (Chapter 18) - Mon 21 Mar 2011

" “What?” She asked. She hit the rewind button on her brain, then pressed play. Sesshoumaru was interested in her." One of the most original lines I ever read!

I can't wait to find out the baby's name!

The first kiss between K and S, then the way you explained how a full blooded youkai can be born..amazing.

I want if don't mind writingmore interactions with Sesshoumaru and the baby... *evil smile*...he first time he hold him you gave the impressions that he was holding a clock bomb not a child....


SmilingFool (Chapter 18) - Mon 21 Mar 2011

Wow that was a chapter finally a kiss from the mighty Sesshomaru hopefully the two get together before its too late.  Now I'm weary of what Ryuichi is going to do.  I know he'll plan to kidnap the baby dragon perhaps take Kagome along with him....   Can you imagine the fury of one girl let alone a possessive dog.   Hell that's one way to force Sesshomaru's bite....  LOL...  Sorry got carried away.  Anyways I love the fic it has everything a person can want danger, romance, action, adventure and so on.  Oh before I forget please don't take this as a flamer but some of the words are incomplete or mis-spelled is that even right?  I just wanted you to know.  Update soon.


soulNchantress (Chapter 18) - Mon 21 Mar 2011

Eeeee!  I just lurve smoochies!!!!

Another chapter that was an absolute pleasure to read!!!


Ceysna (Chapter 18) - Mon 21 Mar 2011

X^D OMG NEW CHAPY!!! FIRST KISS TOO!!!! They can't take the Baby though!!! >:^( they can't!!! Kags'll kick dragon booty! and sick some fine Sesshy butt on em too!!

 

Thanks for the update!! You are too amazing! And Lara too for helping you get back this chapt. Looking forward to the next one!

*Offers whole Fritos truck as bribe* please no deleting this time? *puppy eyes* please?


Brittany (Chapter 18) - Mon 21 Mar 2011

I wish it had gone just a little bit further but I know it will eventually happen. I'm looking forward to another update.


Miss.Undo (Chapter 17) - Sun 20 Mar 2011
<3 it!

Ceysna (Chapter 17) - Sun 20 Mar 2011

this has been the best chapter YET!!! Kags should make it her mission to attack his tail with affection now!! >-< I know I would!! just to find out how he would react >:^). But that is just me... And no matter HOW you write Ch 18, I'm possitive it will be AMAZING!!

Wonder what they will name the baby.... Omg I can't wait to find out!! please update soon-ish! *offers cookies as bribe*


Rin (Chapter 17) - Sun 20 Mar 2011

XD Sesshoumaru playing along with a game like that? unlikly.

Poor guy seems to be fooling himself over Kagome....But how long will it last I wonder?

The dragon Hanyou is a she. Is there going to be a significance to that?

At the end, Kagome only wanted to touch, He didnt need to be so snooty!

 

You managed to switch a few of your he/she him/her's and I wasnt always sure who you were reffering to a few times.

Looking forward to the next chapter. <3


thebookworm90 (Chapter 17) - Sat 19 Mar 2011

The baby went from being a him to a her then bak to a him? Some baby.

 

Poor Kagome not being allowed to touch his tail.


AzulFire (Chapter 17) - Sat 19 Mar 2011

 LOLZ sesshy is so funny heehee he made like 5 jokes in one day that i believe is a new record, i liked this chapter well mostly because of the baby, and sesshys reactions to it heehee kagome still amazes him ya think he would have gotten used to her suprises...BLAH! anywayz SESSHOMARU IS BEING SO CUTE GAAAAAHHHH IM GONNA DIE FROM THE CUTENESS, i especially like the last comment of the story kagome:can i touch your tail? sesshy: No. teehee so like sesshy to think he doesnt need a woman *sigh*  when will he learn *shakes head* WELL WHATEVER HE IS AWESOME MWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA AZUL IS OUT PEACE DAWGS


Shasta (Chapter 17) - Sat 19 Mar 2011

I'm glad they finally found the egg.  I do have a question though.  Is the baby a boy or girl?  You have made reference to both in this chapter and I'm curious.

Please keep up the good work!  I'm enjoying the frequent updates and the chapters are a good length.  You should be proud of what you've been able to do with this story.

 


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