Very good work. I like the plot line very creative... Your Shessy is very good not ooc... ;)
This was a great story. I wish I had more profound comments to make, but seeing as I've procrastinated... many assignments... to read your story, I feel like this hsould e enough, right?
Anyway, great job. I loved it. Sesshomaru is honestly such a jerk at times, but he's an adorable jerk.
One thing I wished to see was Kagome being strong. Not just emotionally strong, but physically strong too. What's the purpose of making her someone with great miko powers if she doesn't even get to use them? As they are, her spiritual powers are only a burden.
Such a great story
Interesting! Original too!
Wow! I have to say that was an amazing story. I haven't had to physically stop myself from reading a story to go to bed or eat for the longest time. At first, I was unsure if I wanted to read this- I was just looking for a good story but the darkness in it didn't appeal to me. And then, as I finished the first chapter, I just kept reading and couldn't stop till I finished. I love how you took the setting and explained it to us- not so much through descriptions as you did through words, dialogue, and so on. It was beautiful. I honestly feared for Kagome every time she croseed the bridge and I cried when I read that letter hoping beyond hope that it was fake. Honestly, the only problem I had with it was the part about Miroku getting kidnapped. Maybe it was an oversight on my part, but I wish we had more details about it- how close was he to accosting the supervisor and what happened while he was kidnapped (beyong the part where Sato finds out about it). But really wow! And you were realistic- I mean yeah, I get super happy when I read stories where Kagome survives pregnancies through all sorts of tasks but really, a modern city girl would have reprucissions from bullet wounds. So really, amazing story! I honestly enjoy your writing- Her Christmas Wish- being one of my all time favs and look forward to reading more of your work. As it is, I know I'm going to be visiting this again and again!
Long time lurker on the site here, just wanted to commend you on the fantastic job you did on writing this fic. A week ago, I was bored and figured I'll search around for something good and long; and boy did I find a jem. I powered through this like butter and it still took me a week to finish, which is saying something due to my ravenous appetite for good reads. There were so many twist and turns in the plot that I was on the edge of my seat and occasionally taken back by some surprising revelations. There were only a couple things that truly bothered me or kept expecting something more: the lack of a name for the superviser or background story and I kind of hope that Totosai would have a bigger role in the plot than the brief appearance. All and all, great story and I can't believe I missed this one when you first posted it.
Whitney (Chapter 82) - Wed 28 Nov 2012
Absolutely one of the best fics I have ever read. I enjoyed it so mch. The demon's being under human oppression and the intracacy of the department were astounding. I loved how Sesshoumaru and Kagome's relationship developed and I jsut adored how you wrote Inuyasha. I also loved that you didn't end with the demon liberation! It leaves ther eader wandering how it happened and how wonderful it will be for them. One of the best fics, I love you for writing this lol
Angiux (Chapter 82) - Sun 14 Oct 2012
I must say you have ruined me. I can no longer read any fanfic without comparing them to this wonderfully written work.
The only thing I will say is that there were a couple of things that were not finalized, at least for me. Miroku and Sango, it was just hinted that they might try it out but nothing definite, Miroku's final role in the organization and thus his relationship with Sessh and Kagome, also Mikaru and Rikka, I know he was a traitor, but your description showed a great deal of turmoil in his mind, his hand was obviously forced and I just wanted to have closure on that character.
Other than that this story was great! Thank you very much for your hard work and I will look out for more stories by you becuase as I said before, you have ruined me. :)
So it took me a while to finish this story but I have to say yes, it was worth it. ;) I absolutely loved every bit of it--the pace, the story line, the way you portrayed the characters and interactions, your writing style, and mos of all Sesshoumaru and Kagome's relationship. Your writing was absolutely enthralling and I am so glad I came across this unbelievable story. You did a marvelous job and I am so happy you wrote this from start to finish.
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Anonymous (Chapter 1) - Wed 08 Feb 2012
Hey, just finishyou reading this and ... Wow. I really enjoyed reading this. There were a few grammarspelling and continuity errors, etc. Other than that I really enjoyed the story. The plot was really well thought out (other than a few moments I would have changed) and the character really brought the story to life. Unfortunately there was some ooc, but hey, it's a fanfiction for a reason. Overall: really well done, keep it up!
hkyadte (Chapter 1) - Sun 06 Nov 2011
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I loved this story! I wish I had read it when it first came out. Everything about it was well done, it had an amazing flow and the development of the characters and story was well written. I truly enjoyed reading the story, I was so into reading it I stayed up till 3am and it was well worth it. You are an amazing writer.
the end of this chapter had me rolling. i'm hooked on this story
i know this is complete and an older story, but i just got to it and I LOVE THE PREMISE!!! Never read anything like this, amazing! *favorites* can't wait to read the rest
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