Good things first! I really thought the plot was interesting and wanted to see where this story went, but unfortunately I'm stopping here although I have skimmed through the last 2 chapters to see the ending. There are a few things that just prevented me from really getting into the story how I wanted to. In the beginning, it's said quite a few times that Kagome had cancer, but really she didn't. A benign tumor/growth is not cancer. Not to mention she would have underwent more than just surgery, i.e. chemo. Plus, any doctor that thought to take a scalpel and put it up my lady parts wouldn't make it within 10 ft of me. They wouldn't have got in through her vagina, they'd have gone through her abdomen. Sesshy is also annoying the hell out of me. I know if my fiance did that crap to me, he'd better damn well give up the bedroom on the island and not try to weasel me into sharing a bath or bed with him! One last thing, I know it's your style of writing, but I just couldn't get past the short, halting sentences and switching tenses: "And Inuyasha had shown her the truth. She didn't really blame him. Even human men wanted children. But if he had really loved her, it wouldn't have mattered. Children can be adopted. There are even demons who are willing to serve as surrogates if the child just had to be of his blood. There were ways."
Please don't get me wrong, this is not intended as a flame, just as insight to help you as a writer grow. I'm so happy others have loved this story, because as I said, it had a really great plot and tons of promise. I just personally couldn't get into it regardless of how hard I tried and for that I apologize. Keep writing and good luck!
This is by far one of the most longest stories I have ever read in a very long time; and one of the most interesting. I can't believe how long you stretched a modern story out so long. I've read almost 25 chapters at best, and the chapters were short. Your chapters, however, were very long and interesting. There were a few twists in the plot that I didn't expect either, and that kept me reading. Have you ever considered writing your own novels? It took me four days to read this whole fanfiction; I felt like I was living at my computer chair.
This story was great, and I hope to be reading more of your wonderful creations in the future. :)
What a wonderful story! A lot of the time if I read a story even close to this long I loose intrest or I feel it's been dragged on but this was fantastic! Thank you for sharing it!
Have a great week!
~~Mizuko~~
Avy (Chapter 1) - Wed 29 Jun 2011
Beautiful story! I read the first chapter the day you put it out and wasn't really intrigued. Then I got caught up on the last 78 chapters (took me 3 days!) Wow! Very entertaining! Sad it's over, but knew it had to end some time.
this was a really good story you did a wonderful job on this i would say i hope you do a sequel but that is up to you but as i said this was a great story and i loved every bit of it =D
Great ending, love the connection between Kagome thinking Sess dosen't know how to have fun and the last line where you see the idea of Sess fun, loved your work, hope to read more!
dayna (Chapter 79) - Sun 26 Jun 2011
Great Story!!! I throughly enjoyed every minute of it!!!!
And so it comes to an end. This was a fantastic story and I'm so sad to see it come to an end. But all good things must come to an end.
I hope to see you write more of this pairing in the near future.
His idea of fun is a little off but good for his personality i guess, lol. Sad now, this was an awesome story and it's over, crying, I lvoed it, please keep writing, i know i'd read it! Thanks for writing this and finishing it, i loved it to death.
So it finally comes to an end....and a beautiful end as well. Thank you for such a delightful, refreshing, love story. I can't wait for your next work!
Diane (Chapter 79) - Sat 25 Jun 2011
Really going to miss this. I have it saved to CD & blank documents waiting for new chapters up to 100, so I'll have to delete those. I guess I'll just have to wait for your next project or re-read this yet again.
OMG OMG Finally an update!! I've been lurking around here to see the next chaoter!! You really made my day, uhm night. Thanks you so much!!!
I love this story. It's really great!! Everything is here, love, drama, action, family, romance and more!! Perfect fanfiction!! I can't wait to read how Kagome will persuade Sess!! and meet their daughter!!!
I hope you'll update soon!!! Thanks, many many thanks for updating.
L-desu (Chapter 78) - Fri 29 Apr 2011
/dies laughing from the last lines.
kathryn (Chapter 78) - Mon 18 Apr 2011
it took me 3 days to read the story up to this point but i really enjoyed it look forward to more
I wonder if he's mad at all that Kagome kissed him or if he's madder at her for putting herself in danger. it was funny he threatened to shove it up his ass so far it became a permanent part of his anatom though, i guess he hasn't really threatened bodily harm in a whiile, lol.
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