OH I LOVE IT!! HOW sad!! mean ol Kagome.

I do believe you should continue with this one. It's quite interesting, and I think it'd make nice for a chapter story instead of a one-shot.

But hey it's your choice!
I LOVE IT ANYWAY!!

Hope to read more brilliant stories from Miss Beautiful Deception (my fav writer yet!!) teehee

shhhh it's a secret..

this needs a part two,for redemption.
but it's entirely up to you.
very bittersweet,and disheartening.

Cool! The stroy is just fine how it is if not a little sad but I guess A sequel to the story wouldn't do anything bad to it!^^

anyways awesome one-shot

K_I_B

You need to continue this. Seriously. Because persistent Sesshoumaru is awesome.

stage "freight"?
Just one example of the numerous spellling and grammatical mistakes, but overall, it was fine. It could probably use some restructuring; the majority of your sentences start with "I", and a breakdown of the longer paragraphs would be wise. If you want someone to run through it with you, contact me.
Overall, well done. 3
-LW

NOOOOOOOOOOO you cant leave it like!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! thats about half as mean as the one-shot where he killed kagome. PLEASE write another ch. or trun it into a roundrobin.