Interesting concept, but the contract between Kagome and Sesshoumaru is too ambiguous. It raises issues of consent, liability, and obligation. All of which fall heaviest on Kagome to produce an heir, ensure her own fidelity, and commitment to her contract. All of which is signed without her having a lawyer while Sesshoumaru does. How can she therefore understand what's required of her if she's not aware of her own legal protections, if any that she has?
She knows what can happen to her if she breaks the contract.
She can die.
What if Sesshoumaru and Inuyasha break the contract?
The repercussions are not clear on Kagome's part.
It seems that she has zero legal protections contractually.
To make such a decision, especially for a lifetime contract, seems to be flippantly told in-story, as if Kagome signing that contract isn't important or significant, considering what she's just signed on for. She's willingly given herself over to become a surrogate for someone else. Do her children have any protections? Are they still hers, or are they Sesshoumaru's? Will she be their mother or nothing at all?
It's not clear if the contract is like a marriage, or is it a surrogacy arrangement, or something akin to a farmer choosing a broodmare for his prized stallion.
The issue of consent is huge if Kagome is a minor, and nor only newly 18, and making such a decision without legal advice and guidance.
Conditions for a contract would always be negotiated before signing between two or more parties before everything is set in stone. After that it's legally binding. And in Kagome's case that's doubly true.
For me these factors both break the plotline and leave it on shaky ground.
Without that stable base, I can't believe in it enough, to be curious enough to read more.
I think it was a very nice ending. Sorry it is over and I loved every bit of it. I will be looking for more stories from you in the future if RL allows it.
Excellent writing.
Awe I'm so sad it's over!!
DevaG (Chapter 20) - Wed 07 Dec 2016
You can't tell me that it's ending right now, It's just getting started :( *Crying.. I loved this story and thank you for sharing this world with me. I hope that you will come up with something as fascinating as this story. -DevaG
Great story, and I am glad to see it come to fruition. Keep up the wonderful writing for future stories!
Update? This story is too good to leave it hanging at what seems like close to the end.
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