Reading this chapter, it's like it took a massive nosedive in quality :( Half of it was run-on sentences, and was really, really confusing to read. Do you have a beta? Because after reading the previous chapters it's like you had a beta for chapters 1-8, then chapter 9 didn't have a beta edit it at all.
I'm really confused about how chapters 1-8 were so well-written and coherent but 9 was all-over the place and nearly impossible to understand/read 0.o Hopefully it was just a one-off thing...?
It's an interesting story, and I'll be awaiting follow, but my counsel, try to always separate notes author of the story, makes it less confusing.
Good to see you care also the spelling mistakes, otherwise could not read it because my translator not recognize it.
Sarah (Chapter 9) - Sat 14 Mar 2015
| Kikyo had been listening and choose to help Inuyasha she will let Naraku kill Inuyasha.
Is she going to help inuyasha or let naraku kill inuyasha?
Cheryl (Chapter 8) - Wed 11 Mar 2015
awesome story~! can't wait to read more! :) usually i find over sappy and kind sesshomaru's too out of character but you managed to do it well and not feel out of character~ nice :)
this is going to be a very hot story that i want to know all about
Sam (Chapter 3) - Mon 09 Mar 2015
I like this but I really hope Kagome doesn't become all submissive with Sesshomaru and letting him tell her what to do 24/7. Like when he punished her, I just idk I don't think its right. I'm still going to keep reading this because I really like it just not the alpha patriarch complex he has
no one is going to tell you inu and go sesshomaru i know you can do it
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