Very nice chapter. Looking forward to more updates. Good job!
| It is a nice beginning to what could be a good story. The word boarder is misspelled, it should be spelled border. Looking forward to future updates. You should consider getting a beta for your story.    
 | Interesting start so far.  One thing: it's "throne" not "thrown."  Thrown = verb, throne = noun.    
   Page 2 of 2 
 
										 |  |