ok, this looks promising. Mild note: when you write "She accepted a job for an ambassador of the East Coast Yokai of America (ECYA for short)" it makes it sound like Kagome became the ambassador. I know from the next chapter that you meant she became the assistant, so maybe change this to something like: She accepted a job offer from the ambassador ...
Pep (Chapter 25) - Tue 18 Jul 2017
I cried. Yes sirree I cried my heart out.. like I wish kagome chewed him out more and made him feel like shiz for what he did to her. My heart literally broke for kagome over this chapter and I'm finding it very hard for myself to forgive him TT^TT
This is a correction to my previous review that auto-correct effed up
Pep (Chapter 25) - Tue 18 Jul 2017
I cried. Yes sirree I cried my heart out.. like I wish kagome chewed him out more and made him feel like shiz Dr what gender to her. My heart literally broke for labour over this chapter and I'm finding it very hard for myself to forgive him TT^TT
I am in love with this story. I wanted to review earlier but I was so captivated I couldn't resist going to the next chapter! XD I think my favourite chapter was when Sesshoumaru brought Kagome to the cave for the first time. >< And I died a little when the story ended... You're such a great writer! I love every character you wrote. Especially Sesshoumaru and Kagome. <3 This is definitely my all time favourite.. And will probably read it once more in future. Please keep writing!
Great story! If he ever does pull that shit again I think the pack might kill him... well if Kagome doesnt first...
I really enjoyed reading this!
Sesshomaru is a crappy Alpha.
I always enjoy this story until the last chapter, it's not so much that she forgives him instantly that is the problem...it's that Rin constantly questions her for me. She is the Alpha Bitch and although Sess is her father, she constantly tries to undermine her and make Gome feel bad. She should've beat the brakes off her...just saying
snow (Chapter 25) - Sat 30 Jul 2016
the story was awesome i loved it from start to finish kinda wish there was more :(
Loveyaa (Chapter 25) - Sun 05 Jun 2016
Wow! I feel like Kagome let Sesshoumaru off too early at the end, but quite lovely. Nothing like fighting for something that you believe in. The characters were very true to themselves and nothing like a happy ending (sorta). I can't wait to read your next story :)
this was by far the BEST fanfic about sesshoumaru and kagome i have read from you. the plot was different than what i was used to and that is why i liked it so much. i'm glad the conflict at the beginning didnt have to be about naraku. it's nice to see a storyline that deals with after she comes back through the well after making her wish. this was a timeline story that was well worth reading. i must say that you had some very well written lemon-y goodnes in this story. made me think I was mated to the "killing perfection". the story drew me in and made me think i was part of it, and that's hard to do while writing a story. keep up the great writing and i'll be sure to read more from you. c'ya'
I hate how she caved so easily. I'm actually very disappointed! I love this story and it just seems like you threw this together to finish it and get it out the way. Oh well...i suppose all in all it was a nice story. Thanks
Awwwwww! I love that he supports her so...they are just awesome together????????????
WoooooooooW! That was intense! My face turned red and I had to shut my bedroom door! Excellently done!
I LOVE YOURE WRITTING!!!!!! PLEASE KEEP GOING!!! I think I'll read all youre stuff but even then, I want more! Need a Beta? Or an idea-er to make up new plots stories? I'll help! Just please don't stop!!!
Amazing you conveyed all the emotions perfectly. i know understand why Jenn and David seemed to dominate the last chapter. Things got so real and deep in this chapter. Some parts are a bit lacking but good all the same
Things seem to be getting a bit off track. It feels like Jenn is almost the lead protagonist. It's starting to look like a teen fantasy story where the person is probably just touching Sesshomaru's wrist just because they want to touch him and has nothing to do with the pack thing. Its a little OOC calling him Maru and such. The last few paragraphs just seemed a little childish, not that I mean to offend it just seems strange. I found myself just ruahibg through it to avoid it. I am sorry if you are offended.
The reunion was a bit fast paced, I mean she did say after 3 months and no one showed she was basically heart broken right? I felt ot lacked a little. Was she in love with Yasha? Maybe you should have put in something saying she had already moved on from the Hanyou or something like that. Still a good chapter
Excellent chapter. Jenn and Samuel, I enjoy them. I feel like Jenn might somehow be Inuyasha's relative. Im just guessing n could be wrong. But when you made the little joke about them knowing each other in the pass life I got to thinking. Its good to make your readers think. It makes them want to read more
Hello Im Luna. Im kinda known as an honest reviewer around here. Lol got in problems a few times too because I typically tell the truth about people's writing. But I try to be as nice as possible. I just don't like lying to people who are trying to improve. Ok so here it goes. You are off to a good start. Your prologue was just that, an intro. You made it short n sweet, perfect! I love this theme, it is very different. I have read tons of these stories since I was 15 I am now 25 and I have never read something like this where the jewel is what restored balance. It would usually take Kagome becoming lady of the west. Or the world would already be set up like this, or demons would live in secret and she would find Sesshomaru by chance. Yep I have read it all, but this is a fresh new perspective and I love it. And this is your first one at that? Amazing! It makes me want to know ur age and maybe get some inside on how u thought about it. Anyway I will keep reading and reviewing. I look forward to it.
Wait that'sy it. NO arrival of the baby, no name, or no seeing how many children they have? Ahhhhh come on, please one more chapter at least. pleasssssse :-)
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