This was a magical and beautiful story. I loved each chapter and was pleased at the HEA. The elements of Bronte and Stoker were brilliant!. Well done.

Wow... as I read this story, the poesy, the fluency of tthe dialect and ohrasing had me spellbound. This is a very lovely story and while I terribly missed the smut, the quality of the writing and the depth of the characters made up for it. That and it would have probably ruin the innocence portray in this style

I really loved this fic! You writers astounding writer! I wish I were. Lol Keep it up, I will follow your stories! Great job! 

Wow!....I LOVED this. I stayed up way to late to finish, but I kept saying....just one more chapter....just one more. Sadly, as a result, my brain won't function properly to give the descriptive review I wish, but I want you to know that think this just may be one that I will have to come back to ....and again, lol.

Very nicely done and very interesting combination of ideas,. I'm only through chapter 5...(it is late and I must be at work early so I must go to sleep now, lol) But you have thoroughly grasped my attention and I look forward to making it back to my computer tomorrow so that I may see how this plays out.

Awwww..... such lovely story!!, you never disapoint me. Im looking forward to see more from you!!

Have you read The Eyre Affair by Jasper Fforde? I think is a must for any Jane Eyre fan, and I can totally tell you're one, cause you do the voice dead-on. And I'm glad you do the fortune telling scene, cause its like a major point in the story, but until you mentioned it I didn't notice they left it out in other stuff! I think its cause mostly I've watched the BBC version, which is pretty good at keeping things according to the book. Can't trust movies to get anything right. Haven't watched the last one with the chick from Tim Burton's Alice, cause like I said - can't trust movies to get anything right. But I did the Orson Welles version - which was actually good until they dumped like HALF THE BOOK from the story. The whole St. John Rivers thing -- gone. Just - really? Srsly? If I can watch that, anything else shouldn't bother me. Probly still will though. This is awesome-sauce though. Think only someone who really loves the book could write this. Awesome work.

I've been looking forward to this story, and though I should just say how wonderful it is -- and it is wonderful -- as someone who has been a lover of Jane Eyre since the age of 12 (and I am three times that age now), I cannot refrain from making a couple of suggestions.

First of all - kudos for making Jane Eyre actually fae. You would think it's frickin obvious, but in the aftermath of P&P&Z, they made Jane Slayre: Vampire Hunter, and completely ignored all hints of fae that are clearly in the story. I've dearly wished to see something done with it, and am very glad to see this. You've woven the English and Japanese very well (except with the idea that it is so easy to get from England to Japan in that time period, which it clearly isn't - but if you foreshadow it, I'll believe it).

My first sticking point is that when you set up a story, you need to set up your world. Pride and Prejudice and Zombies failed SO UTTERLY on this (I really really wanted to like it, but the sloppiness of the world building made that impossible, amongst many other things). You have done a much better job on this - especially having Inuyasha establish her Fae heritage and the youkai presence with such great subtlety.

One of the weak points of this story is the reason the marriage cannot take place. If you are going to create a world where the father's consent is comparable in any way to the bigamy of the original, you can cement that point much more by adding some foreshadowing for it. For instance, when Kagome is talking with Sess and Inu about folklore and other stories, you can throw in a couple about lovers ruined because their fathers would not consent - a'la Romeo and Juliet, but you can create an original example of that - you do such a great job of it with the red string and such stories, just throw a couple in there so you can show that to everyone livign in this story, in this world, it is a well known and established fact that not having the permission of parents is a horrible jarring thing, and you can then frolic in the playground you have built.

The second point that could use strengthening is the london part. Once you leave the world of Bronte's prose, the prose vages up. The plot is fine -  changing it from JE is fine since you built the differences between Jane and Kagome well. Kagome is a far freer spirit (not being brought up by the Reeds did her a world of good). But you have such a lovely tightness of prose and description in the beginning, and to go from that to the vagueness of London and the Ton is jarring. Kagome's Father is well described, and his house, and the flute, and Michael, but everthing else is a bit blurry. A more precise London section makes the U-turn back to Thornfield tighter, and that's such a major pivot-point in the story,

With that out of the way, on to the parts I adored so much. Which was most of it.

First of all - mimicking tone is an art -- so many of the now-popular mash-ups fail in this entirely, and Jane Slayre carried it through much less well than you did - you do an awesome job of that here, enough that its recognizable as Bronte, but you still make it your own. Second, though you kept Bronte's tone and description, you made the differences clear and in character, so I didn't see Kagome as an exact clone of Jane, and therefore justified the choices Kagome would make that Jane would not. Third - I love Inuyasha in this - he's such a refreshing adorable little boy, and I like him much more than I like Adele Varens, who too spoiled and unthinking to be anything than a cute pet. Fourth - Kagome's father is very well done - his motivations and limitations clear, he is a passionate being, and Kagome is easily his daughter. Fifth - love love the transition of Inuyasha's parentage to the Thornfield setting - I didn't doubt it for a minute, and its so much more shocking and awful in the sedate English countryside. You merge the fairy tale Japanese and the English moors so very well in this. Again, I do love Michael in this - even if I'm not sure what he's *for*.

Especially after the powerhouse of Shikon Miko and the long-awaited Jane Eyre/Fae mashup, I'm very looking forward to seeing more of your work. Please don't stop.

Best -- Des

Beautifully written! Jane Eyre is one of my favorite of all classics and to see her voice so lovingly echoed in your own work in my favorite fandom... just wonderful! I will certainly be watching to see your other works, but congratulations on a beautiful story!

Kousei

Thank you for letting us take this journey with you! I thoroughly enjoyed myself! :)

Love this ending!!!  It flowed so well, and I admit that I laughed to Sesshomaru's grumbling to the tall tales of what happened in the nuptial bedroom.  Fantastic story, I can't wait to see another :)

Kessa

The story was awesome, amazing and it had a beautiful ending! I can't wait to get more awesome stories from you!

One word: Awesomeness! I look forward to more of your works in the future!!!!

what a beautiful story, it's just like the stories of the old times, it was simply breathtaking, congratulations =)

wow, what a ride!  I liked that, thanks for a great ending!  I've really enjoyed reading your exercise in the old style of writing, and I think you'll do great when you settle down to write ...whatever it was this exercise was to prepare you for.  :)  Best of luck!

Fantastic, Kagome was brilliant going against her father.  And so now they will marry, and Sesshomaru heals due to Kagome, I rather like the idea  of using the grief stricken tears of a faerie maiden to heal a beloved.  

Looking forwards to the next bit. 

Kessa

Oh my! What a lovely story! I love it! Please as soon as you can update! You have such an incredible imagination I have never read story like this before! :-)

love the story! But a quick question: Where is Inuyasha?

Both of the stories you wrote are all different from any stories I read, and you definitely broke from all the stereotypes and clichés, and that's what's amazing about your stories! If I find any free historical resources online I'll let you know. I'll everything is all well with Sesshomaru, Kagome and her Father, on top of that I'm glad they will soon will married! Keep it coming.

Good for her! She isn't spineless against men like many women of her time period. As for whether to SMUTZ or not to SMUTZ....

I personally love smut....a little too much. I feel as though it could go either way depending on how it was added. It could either be a satisfying end piece with lovely language (which I forsee as your writing is flawless), or it could be rather random and unexpected but still delicious. 

I think it could work just because of the passion seen between the two would be nice to see finally consumated. But that's just me. I love smutz. I will be happier if it is added, but I will like the story no less if it is not. 

--Silver