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InuLuna of The Moon (Chapter 4) - Sun 09 Dec 2012

Another awsome chapter! Funny thing is that that name popped in my head as I was reading the description of him hatching. Then to actually read that you had named him that, nice. ^-^


Rachael (Chapter 4) - Sun 09 Dec 2012

Yea woo~ You scared me for a moment there. Little Nero's so cute! I can't wait for the next chapter. Thanks for the read~!


BirdHummingAlong (Chapter 1) - Tue 27 Nov 2012

Oh goodness, this story is so cute! I love the way you portray Kagome, she is absolutely true to character. It is been quite a while since i have been able to find an author with such wonderful characterization skills! Sweet, funnt, fearless, caring! Yeppers, that is our little fire-chracker Kagome-chan. lol. Any way, i love the plot, "How To Train A Dragon" was such a cute movie, and strangely relatable, i have some Viking blood in me yet! Anyways, i can see the humor and cuteness from that movie has run off into yours. So wonderful job, when i looked at your profile i was surprised to learn that english is not your native language, as i only noticed a few improperly conjucated verbs and such. Just very small things. I wonder what your original language is, perhaps french? Oh! And good job with the other characters, they are wonderfully portrayed as well, but Kagome really stood out to me. So...yeah, looking forward to another chapter!

-BirdHummingAlong


Inkasha Taisho (Chapter 3) - Tue 27 Nov 2012

This felt like such a tease T.T I wants more!! so selfish, but true!! I can't wait for more.


Rachael (Chapter 3) - Sun 25 Nov 2012

I adore this! Please update soon~

I bet it'll bond with Kagome, because she's special. Even the momma knew that :)


SessQueen (Chapter 3) - Sat 24 Nov 2012

exciting. please update soon.


Azumii (Chapter 3) - Sat 24 Nov 2012

MORE!!!!  I need more!  I love your story so far, I think you can do great things with it. :D
Damn Miroku for being so smart too. :P

xoxox


mangageek (Chapter 2) - Tue 13 Nov 2012

You got me hooked, I can't wait to read more!


DescendingFrost (Chapter 2) - Sat 10 Nov 2012

Aww I can't wait for more! Please update soon! :D


SessQueen (Chapter 2) - Sat 10 Nov 2012

you have a few grammatical errors. great chapter. i think the expression you were going for was  i'll do anything not i'll do everything.


Inkasha Taisho (Chapter 2) - Fri 09 Nov 2012

I'm so excited to see how this whole thing works out. Will it bond with Kagome or Sesshomaru? Will Kagome be able to hide it from her friends?? What this favor Sessho asks of Kagome?? Oh, so many variables and mysteries!!! I can't wait til you update.


InuLuna of The Moon (Chapter 2) - Fri 09 Nov 2012

AWSOME! I love your story so far. In ch. 1 there was a few errors and yoiu can add another sentence in some spots. Other than that the whole imagery your sending is good. Have you ever tried choosing a random paragraph in one of your chapters and turning it into 4? It's a good way to practice if your trying on working on your writting or just typing a lovely story that pops up.

Ex. of something missing from ch. 1: -in the middle of your chapter I added a letter that was missing and a comma

The woman looked from side to side, trying to find any way to escape. ‘Oh god, oh god, oh god,’ she chanted in her head.

-A little below it

“You’re okay,” she said, patting its head. The dragoness whined, moving wing from her body. Kagome gasped in shock. Her body was ripped apart, it was a miracle she was still breathing.

(For "You're okay," I'm not sure if you wanted it as a statement, or question of worry/inquary. Because, you put she said, with a comma after said and also after okay. Also I think your missing a word in between moving wing. You could put moving her wing or a wing. -shrugs- What ever you wish.)

Now, for chapter 2... There is just one thing that I'm concentrating on because it is sticking to my mind and is outward like. Plus I can't really do editing much. Not really sure if I would even get it done, you know? Okay, this one is a little above the middle of chapter 2. Which has quite a bit of small errors above and a little below.

“Maybe we can ask some miko if we come near the village,” said Shippou.

(I don't understand what he is asking. But, I do get the general point. Did you wish to type it like: "Maybe we can ask a miko in a nearby village?" or "Once were near a village we could probably ask a miko," There are several ways you can put it. Though, the second one would seem strange because it sounds a bit more grown up then how he looks. Did you know back then there was only one miko per village or larger village/town. lol forgot the word for the name of it. Sometimes even the smaller villages/hovels didn't have any.) Well, I wish you luck and await a return of another chapter. Again... Love your story! Thank you.

 


Midnight (Chapter 2) - Fri 09 Nov 2012

What does Kagome have to do in order for Sesshoumaru to help her raise a dragon? I hope to read more soon. I really like this story.


marci (Chapter 2) - Fri 09 Nov 2012

Can't wait to see how it goes, it's such a cute and funny story so far. 


REI-Angel (Chapter 1) - Fri 02 Nov 2012

Way to go Kagome! 

I love it! can't wait for the next chapter!^_^


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