I just wanted to add some examples that I thought could have been worded differently.
“Do not speak foolishness old tree.” - "Do not speak foolishness, old tree."
“Finish with that nonsense. -"Finish with this nonsense."
on a second thought - "...on second thought"
That’s why he had to find out how was it possible - "That's why he had to find out how it was possible..."
The goddess guided her on her ways - "The goddess guided her along the way/...guided her on her way...etc"
Her energy swirled around her as she forced her body to make leap into the man’s direction - "Her energy swirled around her as she forced her body to leap toward's the demon..."
the reptile’s body fell few feet away from the miko - "...the reptile fell a few feet away from the miko..."
Thanks for your time!
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