Aha, the plot sure thickens around this mysterious kelpie! He's still so damnably hot though...it's ridiculous *huffs* Miroku realized a little too late that hell hath no fury than a woman scorned lol! He should be more careful in the future and learn from this lesson. I'm really curious to know what Yasuhiro is going to do now, hm....

Lovely chapter, angel! I enjoyed it a lot and can't wait for the next! keep up the good work ^_^

Looks like I need to go back & watch teh anime again, I halfway remember this episode or something similar. Just as an FYI when Kiyo-hime bites Miroku withering is something plants do when they die, to shrivel; fade; decay, the word you wanted was writhing, to twist, as in pain, struggle, or embarrassment.

Both chapters are great, keep it coming.

Ahhh, what a sexy new character you've added to the mix here. Yasuhiro really gives off sensuality in thick waves...I do envy Sango *chuckles* I can't wait to see what's his history and what you're planing to do with him next! I believe I've mentioned before that Naraku may be a sadistic bastard, but he definitely brings out this feeling of twisted pleasure...I'd love to see some hardcore lime with him *drools* Ignore that comment lol Miroku could sure use a taste of his own medicine! Make it extra bitter xD

Loved the chapter! I'm waiting anxiously to see what happens next ^^

My only wish is for a fantastically happy ending and to keep enjoying this my continuing to read :] 

OKaaay...I was expecting the whole lesbian thing, but not the Naraku thing. Wow.

I'm currently procrastinating going to sleep...I want to read more :D

Sounds like thsi is going to be good. I mean, if the prize in a game was Sesshomaru, I'd definitely want to win.

Keep it coming.

Looks like everyone is contemplating something. I wanna see what is next for Sango and Miroku! I love separate journeys that somehow all seem to come (back) together. I also really like Haru's story and hope we get some more of her and if she finally cracks, considers herself Kagome's friend, and therefore spills the beans on her status as mate. I can't wait to see what happens next :)

I love this story, please update soon :) Sesshomaru is so sexy in it!

Very well put!  

As someone said to me not too long ago: 'If a wrong conclusion can be reached, it will be reached'! Lol Poor Kagome, thinking she has become a dirty mistress...Thankfully, Sesshy finally cleared that misunderstanding up! Now, if only she could set aside her lingering feelings for Inu and realize the great opportunity that lies before her...

Great chapter!! I especially enjoyed the naughty lime! Well written, my friend, well written :)

I can't wait for the next exciting chapter! Don't think I have forgotten that you promised some drama for my delight!

such a great chapter though I'm nervous at how upset kagome is going to be at sess when she wakes up lol... so much tension from all coners. sai, sango& miroku.. Inuyasha and the fog... you have so many pots on the stove but you seem to be handling it well.. I hope the next update is soon!!! :)

Your beta missed a misused word:

"Torch"er\, n. One who gives light with a torch, or as if with a torch. [Obs.] --Shak.

"Torture" is the word you were going for.

I love the pace you've set the story to.  Too many writers try to rush everything.  I like all the little details that you bring out in the story.  That includes actions and thoughts of others, too.  I feel sorry for Sai but I still would not trust her.  She's eventually going to go completely psycho when she discovers the real Naraku and that he is merely using her.  Also, when she is faced with the truth that she can never have Kagome.  I don't see her keeping her sanity after she's confronted with those 2 discoveries.  I think she will feel betrayed by them both and try to kill them out of revenge.  Of course, if she does away with Naraku, that's OK.

Gah! One conversation would solve amuck of their angst, yet still leave plenty for the story! Talk, dammit you two! lol. Can't wait for her to find out that SHE is his intended mate, please let it happen soon!

Keep it coming, Happy New Year!

I read a story like this years ago. It was by MorningBird. It seems to be going well so far. My only suggestion would be to proof read. You've mixed up the tenses in the later half of this chapter. 

"In her shock at hearing the Lord of the West's name, she forgot to concentrate on her barrier and it wavered. Seeing her chance the demoness leaps at the girl. Throwing herself to the ground Kagome escapes the attack and quickly raises to her knees and points her arrow at the demoness as she came charging her again. With a bright flash of light her arrow was released and struck the demon in the chest killing her instantly."

It should be: "In her shock at hearing the Lord of the West's name, Kagome forgot to concentrate on her barrier and it wavered. Seeing her chance the demoness leapt at the girl. Throwing herself to the ground, the miko [narrowly] escaped the attack and quickly raised to her knees, pointing her arrow at the demoness as she came charging again. With a bright flash of light, the arrow was released and struck the demon in the chest killing her instantly."

Or you can just change "forgot" to "forgets". Either way would bring consistency. 

While you can switch between first and third person, you have to choose to write in either present or past tense. It can't be both. 

I'll continue reading now~ Hope you had a fantastic New Years day!

~Animefreak242

aka

Kawaii Girl

I read a story like this years ago. It was by MorningBird. It seems to be going well so far. My only suggestion would be to proof read. You've mixed up the tenses in the later half of this chapter. 

"In her shock at hearing the Lord of the West's name, she forgot to concentrate on her barrier and it wavered. Seeing her chance the demoness leaps at the girl. Throwing herself to the ground Kagome escapes the attack and quickly raises to her knees and points her arrow at the demoness as she came charging her again. With a bright flash of light her arrow was released and struck the demon in the chest killing her instantly."

It should be: "In her shock at hearing the Lord of the West's name, Kagome forgot to concentrate on her barrier and it wavered. Seeing her chance the demoness leapt at the girl. Throwing herself to the ground, the miko [narrowly] escaped the attack and quickly raise to her knees, pointing her arrow at the demoness as she came charging again. With a bright flash of light, the arrow was released and struck the demon in the chest killing her instantly."

While you can switch between first and third person, you have to choose to write in either present or past tense. It can't be both. 

I'll continue reading now~ Hope you had a fantastic New Years day!

~Animefreak242

aka

Kawaii Girl