I think this chapter was very subtle and nice. And it flowed smoothly to where it locked into place. From the moment you began writing this till now their characters have clashed quite well also. Nice work!
See, like I said, secrets have their way of coming out and usually at the wrong time...
Don't worry, hon, this wasn't as rushed as you may think. That's usually how secrets get told; very un-intentionally. I'm sure Shippou didn't mean to spill the coffee so to speak. (spill the beans?!?) I think he just got over excited about Kagome accepting Sesshoumaru's proposal to court him AND her getting the promotion she dreamed of, plus the fact that her promotion means they (he and Souton) get to work together with her more often. Shippou's original character has always been one of being overly excitable and honest to a fault, even when he should be quiet. He wouldn't have gotten hit by InuYasha so much if he just stayed quiet.
Keep it up, you're doing great. JEN
p.s. I like how she got InuYasha to bend to her will. Way to go!
Oh snap Sesshomaru is in the dog house lolz I can't wait to see what the next chapter has
Kouu (Chapter 13) - Wed 19 Dec 2012
While reading chapter 13 Hot N' Cold came on, I bursted into laughter so quick at the timing. Also in the small timing of me finding this story and reading I've fallen in complete love with it! Keep on doing your amazing thing! Lots of love from a happy reader~ <3
Uh oh! I hope when they tell her what was going on that things don't go sour for Sesshomaru and Kagome!
Great story, keep it coming. Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year!
oh snap! drama!! I'm excited (:
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