A badass and possibly certifiably crazy? If I were the rest of the tachi, I'd stay far away from her. More!
You are very close to writing perfectly, you just have to take care of those hanging, and sometimes confusing, sentences. There's parts were you leave out commas and you have a habit of using "to" when you mean to use "too". Interesting story by the way, even if you're using Rin incorrectly like everyone tends to do so in fan fiction. She doesn't speak that way in the anime nor the manga.
Ladyfifi (Chapter 6) - Fri 09 Mar 2012
Erm... okay so I do like the story, truly... but this Kagome really kinda creeps me out. Is that the whole intent? I'm sure there is something that you haven't revealed about her yet, but man...its almost like she's 'gone feral' She reminds me of the character in the French movie, He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not with the actress Audrey Tautou. Anyhow, its definitely not a criticism, just kind of an observation. :) Keep up the good work.
0o0o0o0o0o0o i love this slightly twisted dareker but sweet kagome and you have inu, you have :3
TKE (Chapter 6) - Fri 09 Mar 2012
wow....possessive much...lol!!
This is going to be fun. I can't wait to see Kagome in Sesshomaru's palace. And yep, even Kagome knows that Inuyasha has lost her. Oh well, hopefully he finds someone else, if he's still in one piece. More!
Venita (Chapter 6) - Fri 09 Mar 2012
Great chapter, please update soon.
Venita (Chapter 5) - Thu 08 Mar 2012
Keep it coming.
Brittany (Chapter 5) - Thu 08 Mar 2012
This si getting good. Update soon please.
TKE (Chapter 5) - Thu 08 Mar 2012
getting very interesting, i hope she ends up kicking some major butt!!
*giggles like a silyl fool :3 i do so hope there's more tongiht ^_^ wonder update! HAZZAH FOR BAMF KAGOME!
WAHOO! Go Kagome! Beat that puppet! More please!
Update! I like the relationship that is building between Kagome and Sesshomaru. Its fun and light if that is the right word. I'm looking forward to what happens next.
This is pretty good, I can't wait to see how their relationship continues to develope. Though I'm surprised he allows her to call him Fluffy, lol, though I guess with their agreement, he can't do anythign to her now. *laughs* Though maybe she should call him Fluffy-sama do be on the safe side. :P hehe
TKE (Chapter 4) - Mon 05 Mar 2012
I love how she speaks to him...lol. It's funny...
I was just wondering why Sesshy doesn't get mad at Kagome for calling him fluffy
:3 *grins* i like the idea that kagome may have always been this way! best foot forward until you can be yourself! :3
This is interesting. Want to see more.
Venita (Chapter 3) - Mon 05 Mar 2012
Keep it coming.
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