So I love the play between Sesshomaru and Kagome. Thier relationship in interesting to watch and funny at moments. ^^
The battle scene was epic, and her dream was yummy.
I'm keeping this one short becouse i'm eager to get back to reading. >.> <.<
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I'm really loving how you did the flashback. sually, we get a flashback and I'm scream and yelling and all pissed off becouse it's no secret that I despise flashbacks almost as mch as I do Love Triangles.
This is not the case, you kept them short, sweet, and to the point while making them seemlessly flow with the chapter itself.
And plus I'm a big fan of all you sexy time stories so the >:3 flashback made me smile.
OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG
I'm loving this parallel world and the changes you made.
And Sesshomaru! OMG! I really really what to know what happened between them that Sess remembers and she doesn't. I sqeaked when I reolised her relationship with him was different too!
This is just so wildly interesting and I want to knooooooooooooooow.
First off, I love this; Great start!
I appreciate how you wrote the youki coming thogh the well as feral, I've seen too many stories where they are just 'la-de-da' like they belong there and I'd not realistic.
And YUUUUUUUUUUUUUUS! I hated the ending of inyasha and I love how you changed it, while keeping it Cannon; Its extremely interesting and I cant wait to see where you take it.
So far this is a delightful read, and you didn't make kagome unfailingly understanding or totally Bad A**, she seems normal and its a refreshing change.
*scampers off to read chapter 2*
*Searches for [>>] button...
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Well after reading the story – I have to review! Please excuse all misspellings maybe a little less choice of the right words as I am not an English mothertongler but I like to read not to write it. First I like stories with different time lines. Makes a lot of fun to figure out what is altered to the „nomal“ time schedule and gives a lot of opportunities for the author. Your story with different universes is fitting in this case.
First a question – within the chapter sacrilege in the dialog of Hoshiko explaining to Sesshormaru their relationsship she said: „So he made a request of your brother“ - Is this right shouldn't it be „ your father“ ? With the the „nearly three hundred years after when Takeshi and I met„ Sesshormaru's age should than be less than 560 years or was he already born? Why didn't he knew about the human mate of his uncle. A little „Father never told this Sesshormaru about it“, should solve the matter or you can have a little replay regarding some hints his father made and are now understandable.
Nevertheless the story is good. I would like to know a little bit more of the big evil's ally. Even I think I can imagine and I would like to have Kagome a little bit more sensible to Sesshormaru or she should try to make him understand her resoning – so suprise me and I hope to see Sango again in the near future.
Hope you knee will be better soon and good luck with the classes!
hola (Chapter 9) - Fri 07 Jan 2011
dun dun dun! the plot thickens! :O
hmmm. that hoshiko's got something up her billowing sleeve, i just know it.. gotta keep my eye on her! she's knows somethin, and she aint tellin (maybe a la 5 dollah bill will change your mind missy?...)
and i wish had 'extendable ears' (note to self: drop by weasley's..) to go drop some eaves on sesshy-kun and uncle.. *curious*
thanks for the update, luv!
p.s. glad your knee is ok! :)
Loveyaa (Chapter 9) - Thu 06 Jan 2011
and a wrench has been thrown in the plan. At least there is a plan. I think its interesting that she was pulled from a different time and place and really interesting that Sesshoumaru doesn't see the difference. I can't wait to see what happens next though and how things change.
Ashes (Chapter 9) - Thu 06 Jan 2011
Love love love it! This is my second most favorite fic on the site (the first being 4arrows: yes no maybe, check one).
You're super talented! Everything keeps me enthralled. The talking wasn't so bad, it was natural and a requirement to flesh out character, interaction, and a good transition for the story. I'm not really one for dialog either, so bask in the high praise you are recieving.
I look forward to the next chapter. Glad your knee is ok and good luck with your classes. If the fic is any indication I'm sure you're going to do very well.
katlady (Chapter 9) - Thu 06 Jan 2011
: stocks you so you update sooner:
yes I kn ow all to well that the ER docts some time do not know what they are doing I once had an inturn tell me I was pregnated and I was there for my toren tendon funny huh?
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THANK YOU FOR UPDATING SO FAST!!
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Nothing but love for yah
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awesome so far! Can't wait for more!
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