That was a beautiful story from start to finish. It was very worth it ~^_^~

hey love the story hope to see more from you and hope to see even more pic and was just wondering if you have ever tried to draw any pics based on this story and if you haven't that is ok purely a curious question

You seem to have problems with homophones. For example, in your summary, you used "their" when the correct form should have been "they're." The first thing you should do is fix that. To me, grammatical and spelling errors in summaries suggest that a story is poorly written, which yours is not, and is a deterrent against reading. Others that I caught in the first chapter alone included manor/manner, to/too, passed/past. I think as a writer, you follow Sesshoumaru's perspective too much compared to Kagome's. There were so many paragraphs with physical descriptions of Kagome but really only one of Sesshoumaru. There were more descriptions of Sesshoumaru's actions and pleasure than of Kagome's reactions. Your detailing is alright although in some places, it just seemed like too much and you could have focused on other things. For example, in the lemon scene, you had many different places where Sesshoumaru noted Kagome's scent change (Is it really possible to smell anger?), you could have focused more on how Kagome felt and what she thought of the situation.

Oh man. That was good. I loved the part about him realizing how he felt about her.

YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! An awesome ending to an awesome story. One down, a few more to go. Now get back to work! *cracks fanfic whip* :lol: Can't wait for your other work!

Absolutely adored and loved your work RoO!!! It's on my favorites!

update soon plz

Im to lazy to give you a explanation of how good you are so ill just say Great job and please update XoXoX

note to readers: eh I'm waiting on my beta, she's got 3 different chapters for 3 different stories out...er or least 2, I'm not sure how many i've sent her at this point, ANYWAY, ^_^ patience please and i swear things will be update within the week. She's in school after all and i cant be THAT much of a slave driver!

Alright, this is a bit unfair now, i am waiting on now 3 of your stories to be updated... thats it i cant read any more of you stories, you just make them too good and get me hooked. Anyways, like i had said a few times, i know your busy, but update soon

please up date

please up date

heyy!! omggg!!! i luv ur storyyy.. please update soonn!!! i cnt wait to read the restt :D

update soon!!

You have an awesome imagination. Your picture was vivid and as bright as the color that you used. With that being said, you asked for honesty and I'll do that for you. Minus a few grammar errors "baring" instead of "bearing," I thought you did pretty good. I'm not anal about such things, though. I'll power through a great story and this has that potential. The only real issues I had with the story is one, the paragraphs made the read difficult and hard to follow along on a computer screen, and I've never been comfortable with rape and the rape scenes were very drawn out and painful to read. Some rapes can be written effectively with just a few words with the emotions of the victim shining through and you felt for them and felt vested in their well being but you did a rape overkill. When I got to the end and then realized you were starting another, I cringed and a few lines into it, I just kept scrolling. It was kinda creepy. I'm glad you put up the warnings because some wouldn't bother. Other than that, your imagination is so boss...

i luv this fic it is so the bomb. the plot development is gradual and tasteful, not rushed. i hope u update soon i luved every minute of reading this.

This is getting freakin fab! I love it! update soon!!!

I liked the first chapter most, cant wait to see how they meet up again ^_^

ooo you started it to be story instead a one shot I love it keep them coming