omg this is def shorter than the other chapters but i liked it i cant wait to find out what happened with miroku and sango its just tragic so please update soon

The shortness of the chapter was fine...I viewed it like a tie over while you prepare the main dish. I loved it! Where do you live by the way to have that information? Just wanted to know. Thank you for updating. I come back to the site daily to look for your story and a few others and was glad to see you updated. You have me on serious pins and needles contemplating the Miroku/Sango thing. I'm being patient and waiting, but at the same time I'm like, I want to read it now...

Only misspell I noticed:

he gave her a peck on the check(cheek)

Thank you!

OMG what happened with sango and miroku i hope everything works out fine and whats going to happen with kagome and sesshomaru all this foreshadowing is getting me on edge and i cant wait update soon

Besides a few errors, the latter chapters are indeed far better than the beginning! You are making leaps and bounds in writing quality in each chapter! Great job on the improvement :)

This story, while quite common, is still unique in a few ways, which is refreshing.

However, it would be easier to keep up with if you could go back over and fix some of the grammatical errors, puncutiation errors and the run on sentences. I don't want to come off as mean, but trying to read a story is very difficult if I am stopping every few lines to retrace and figure out where sentences end and when new people start talking.

Overall though, you are writing well, the smaller details are just lacking right now.

Great job so far!

That was another great chapter. It left me wanting to know what really went on between Sango and Miroku and how he could be angry enough to leave. What shit could be hitting the fan that would make Sango have to grow up? Is Kag's ex coming back? I can't wait!

OMG!! This was such a wonderful chapter. It flowed so nicely from one scene to the next. You are truly talented girl! I'm still on pins and needles to know what the fight was about 8 days ago and why Sango never said anything. I can't wait to find out the truth.

I'm glad you had fun at the wedding and with your sister. Your story was definitely missed!

Okay, first and foremost...Have fun in Vegas Lady!!! I hope you have a wonderful time. Secondly, are you sure you havent written anything before? Each and every chapter just get better and better and reads so amazingly smoothly from one to the next. I am so in love with this story! And you wrote the bar scene so descriptively that I could see the scene play out in my head. Miroku, drunk, at the bar? I would've never guessed that. See, now I'm in quite the quandary. I know you're leaving but am anticipating the next update. I sooo cant wait. Oh, well, this is just forcing me to go work on my story since you requested that i update. LOL! Again, another wonderful chapter. Keep up the great work and have fun on your trip!

An old saying about tequila:  "You know when someone starts drinking tequila, they are implicitly stating that they REALLY DON'T WANT TO BE HERE WITH YOU right now."  NOT my romantic drink of choice, esp. when used as a chaser for beer.   

I like the way you have introduced a playfully humorous twist in the way you portray Sesshomaru, poking fun at his pompous tendencies, without being disrespectful to him.  It amused me that Sesshomaru and Kagome were in a bar, drinking beer and tequila, dancing to Miley Cyrus, and he told her he could waltz with her sometime.  It points out just how socially awkward someone like Sesshomaru would be in the cultural scene most of us find normal.  It's cute and touching that he's trying so hard, because he finds Kagome so attractive...  Maybe it is this mis-match that eventually leads to their downfall.  I can't wait to find out...

Good job showing a growing sense of undefined unease in this chapter.  Not much seems to happen, but underneath, something is brewing...

That was a wonderful chapter. I cannot wait to see what storm is brewing on the horizon for her. Each chapter you write just gets better and better. I really love this story.

Ok, you are doing great! since you don't want to get them together too quickly, you can continue the flirting, but have it develop their friendship. From there, then go to the admitting attraction and getting serious. If you want to try a lemon, go ahead....just make it later once the attraction grows. your formatting is fine, just be careful of things such as repeating words like in this section:

Her house was the one they gathered at most so she kept it stocked it stocked

also, be careful of when the sentence jumps before you finish it, such as:

God I am an idiot, what is with me today? It’s like I have become this nervous jittery person that doesn’t know what to

 say

out of her mouth but can’t seem to shut up, she thought wanting to hit herself in the head.

When it should be:

God I am an idiot, what is with me today? It’s like I have become this nervous jittery person that doesn’t know what to say

out of her mouth but can’t seem to shut up, she thought wanting to hit herself in the head.

Outside of that, you are doing wonderfully and I encourage you to please continue!

Usually, I don't like it at all when a writer goes over the same territory under another point-of-view.  But when you did it in this chapter, I think you went well beyond the usual effort, and told us a whole lot about Sesshomaru, in a nicely subtle way.  He is from a wealthy background, but wants to make his own place in the world.  He is detail oriented and precise.  He doesn't mind working for someone else, in spite of his nobility, but he isn't willing to compromise.  He is in demand because he is good at his job.  He is vain about his appearance and self-worth, but at the same time, he knows he isn't used to socializing, and wants to make a good impression.  You told us a lot about the character!  I can't wait to see how he pursues Kagome.

I loved this chapter! You captured how conceited Sess can be perfectly. He is truly the definition of vain. Wonderful chapter dear. The whole time I was reading it, my thoughts were " Damn, is he not conceited?" I loved it. Keep up the great work!

Sorry...Sorry. Have been busy. Wonderful chapter love. I am glad that you wrote Kagome having that needed confrontation with Sango. That was wrong just to invite a guy like that, truly. The chapter flowed really well all the way to the end. You are doing great! Keep it up!

People like Sango annoy me to no end. I´m really close to my siblings but not once did they interfere with anything I did but they are always there when I need them. That´s why I never like Sango in fanfics, she´s always the overbearing and bossy "sister" of the weak little Kagome who needs her protection; try to break out of these cliché roles. These fics are like sand on the coast.

I like it! :) Please update soon!

Excellent Job yet again. The spacing definitely makes it easier to read, and good job on usin g the italics for internal thoughts. Keep going along with how well you are doing. I cant wait to read more!

ooooh! *heart skips a beat* who is it??!!! holy fucking cow! leave it on a bloody cliffy im on the edge of my frikking seat wanting to know!!!!!!!!

PLEASE UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Ah, Sango. Sometimes leaving things as they are is the best option. And meddling with your best friend's lovelife is NEVER a good thing. Poor Kagome. I can't wait to see how this story turns out, and if the first chapter was the last, or just a prelude to the end. Sango will blame herself when Kags' heart is broken a second time!

Please update soonish!