That was really well done - thank you for such a great update.
I liked the interaction between Rin and Kagome, how she draws the little girl out and leaves the rest to their own devices. She's not afraid to go and do her own thing, and it draws more attention to her, even though it's not her intention. She doesn't let the situation drive her to act unlike herself. Little does she know, she is drawing attention to herself, isn't she? *wink, wink, nudge, nudge*
Obviously, she's passed his tests with flying colors, even though she's not even trying.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Oh, and yes, the dialogue. While I love interchange between characters, sometimes a story doesn't need as much as others. Half the time you spend more effort on trying to get things across in conversation that could be done without and you lose a lot in translation. But that's only my opinion. I love what you've done with this story and the quantity of dialogue you have used is just right!
Foxistoolazytologin (Chapter 9) - Sat 04 Sep 2010
Awesome chapter! Much better on the dialogue and the homophones. Nice progression, and lovely interaction with Rin! I can't wait to read more! <33333
Foxistoolazytologin (Chapter 8) - Sat 04 Sep 2010
FWEEEEE LOVE THIS CHAPTER! You write so wellll this plot is coming along nicely. I can picture Kagome giving the smackdown to a few of those girls...
There are a few misplaced words I noticed, though. Like 'digging in heals' instead of 'heels' or 'grate honor' instead of 'great honor'. The only reason I mention it is because it's a peeve of mine, sorry! But AWESOME story and I will definitely continue to read!
Alpine (Chapter 8) - Mon 30 Aug 2010
Spectacular story.. It's very interesting and I look forward to seeing how it progresses... Thanks for the great read
Hugs
Alpine ^_^
LavenderBreeze (Chapter 8) - Sat 28 Aug 2010
Oooh! Its awesome! But so far there's been very little dialog! I'm guessing that as the story progresses more and the setting is fully explained there will be talking throughout the challenges and such! Keep writing!
I found your story through the nominations and instantly fav. it. I am glad your updating again.
KitKat (Chapter 4) - Thu 26 Aug 2010
This story is beautifully written! Keep updating as soon as possible!!!
Oh Yay, an update! So Sesshoumaru is keeping Kagome around just for fun, so he can push her buttons and see what happens. I have a feeling Kagome will match him and one up him. I like how it's subtle right now. Is it going to get messy?
L-desu (Chapter 8) - Thu 26 Aug 2010
and the plot thickens! i can't wait to see what you pull out next. loving every moment!
Patricia (Chapter 7) - Sun 08 Aug 2010
they finaly meet! im so excited!!!!! i cant wait to see all the ways she stands out. keep up the good work.
Addy (Chapter 7) - Sun 01 Aug 2010
| Wow, this was for sure worth the read, and has my vote in the nominations of the various stories. I tihnk that far too few newer stories are getting attention in the voting, and a story like this is very refreshing. I do hope that you can post soon, as I know first, or second hand how stressful and time consuming babies are. Congrats on being prego though!
I hope that you manage to post soon, and I honestly hope you can nail this down to weekly posting, because the story is such a good one. I'm more than willing to BETA for you, especially if you can post more often. My internet access for the next week is erratic at best, but after that I should have regular access to the internet. Maybe I can even help bounce ideas off of you. :3
You're amazing! XD
The thought of Sesshoumaru having more than one wife is kinda disturbing but I LOVE your work~!
Though there were certain parts in Kagome that made me think of Kikyo, I think you made a great job in building her personality that is lovable and sooo adorable XD Oooohhh InuYasha's having a crush on our little miko, eh? XD
Can't wait for the next update!
L-desu (Chapter 7) - Wed 21 Jul 2010
despite your penchant for commas, your writing style is exquisite and your story flows very well. i love the angle of this piece, and can't wait to see more from you. well done on your first fanfic!
dayna (Chapter 7) - Tue 20 Jul 2010
I have to say that I really love this story. I like the way you paint Kagome as a strong and confident young woman. Its more in character to me. I read all the chapters today because it was just that good, even though my computer was acting up(had to turn it on and off like 5 times) but thats ok because coming back to this story is worth it. Cant wait for another update. Keep up the great work.
RC (Chapter 7) - Mon 19 Jul 2010
That was, by far, the best intro-description of Sesshoumaru! Please keep up this wonderful work :D
The 'fateful meeting' was delightful! Great descriptions, and I liked the Inuyasha and Kagome were too busy fighting to notice Sesshomaru's approach.
Keep it up!
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