| ^,^ I liked this one. It was far from "total crap", it's very good. I liked how you had him analize the sudden changes and their relationship toward her. Also, how you smoothly went from him dis-liking love, to being curious about it. Nicely done.
stars (Chapter 6) - Mon 30 Mar 2009
| this was great please up data
Chelsea H. (Chapter 6) - Mon 30 Mar 2009
| This was not total crap! It was amusing to no end. And the thoughts Sesshomaru have behind it are funny and the fact that it leads him to wonder about love is amazing!! Have fun with your writing and great job on the story
| hey!
It was a very sweet chapter, I liked it a lot!
So.... Hm... Could you add a diary lemon??? I really like Sesshomaru's reactions!
Hope everything end well at your mid-terms
Best wishes
Amanda (Chapter 6) - Mon 30 Mar 2009
I LOVE IT!
Amazing new chapter (:
Keep it up!
This story is truly amazing! Can't wait to see the next update!
| ^__^ I love your story and this chapter! I can't wait to see where this goes!
| Loved that “Ah, that would be me.” comment of Sesshoumaru’s in the third chapter. I think you are a good writer, and you clearly have your own style. :) The idea of the story is interesting, can't wait to read Kagome's reaction when (or if) she finds out he's been reading her diary. And he really has some anger issues, doesn't he? :P
| Hey there!
I know each writer directs the plot in a trully personal way, but, I was wondering, why did you go back "in time" in the diary entry? I know it was important for Sesshomaru to know that Inuasha atempted to kill Kagome at first... And, also, you are doing a great job describing Sesshomaru's thoughts and changing emotions about Kagome..
But, and it's only my opinion, it sort of broke the line you were creating with the previous chapters.. You could've added that info later on, or maybe in another diary entry. It was a nice chapter, of course, I'm glad you updated, but it isn't following the previous ones.
Again, this is only my opinion, but, to sum it up, I think the diary should keep flowing as the manga (as you've been adding manga situations), not forth and back.. Just keep going.
Well, you have a great style and I'm still curious as to where you'll lead us fellow readers.
Hope to see some more soon!
Best wishes
stars (Chapter 5) - Fri 27 Mar 2009
| I love this chapter plaese updata and if you can, can you try too make it a little longer.
Great story. I don't think I've read anything similar to this and that's VERY refreshing.
I'm not sure how you'll pull it all together though since a large portion of the story is retelling things exactly how they happened in the series.
Hopefully you find the formula to keep this exciting... so far so good. :)
stars (Chapter 4) - Thu 26 Mar 2009
| please updata I love it
stomponfrogs (Chapter 1) - Tue 24 Mar 2009
Great story so far!! I noticed a couple of typos here and there, but they weren't bothersome enough to distract from the story. There's just one little thing that bothers me a bit, and that is the fact that your author's notes in the end and the story kind of run together at the bottom. It would be great if you would add a page break of some kind to separate the two. ^^; Anyways, keep up the good work, and I can't wait for the next chapter~.
Musamuri (Chapter 1) - Tue 24 Mar 2009
| I don't review often but i would just like to let you know that i have high expectations for this story. Not only is it well written but had i been the original author i would be a bit jealous by now. I look forward to the next update.
Diane (Chapter 1) - Mon 23 Mar 2009
I was so happy to see that you'd posted this here since AFF doesn't always load the whole chapter for some reason. When you posted chapter 2 there it only loaded half way each time I refreshed so I had a heck of a time getting it to load the whole thing so I could read it. Can hardly wait until the next chapter comes out to see what Sess does next.
Ha! Talk about service! I write a review and there's another chapter waiting for me! Actually, for a Japanese anthropology class, I had to read about halfway through Genji Monogatari, and Genji actually impregnants Fujitsubo, but everyone thinks that it is the Emperor's son, etc. etc... Phew! Hopefully your story won't drive me up the wall like that one did! :) For someone one who rarely shows any emotions, Sesshoumaru surely bounces around a lot in this story. Fursious one minute, sympathetic the next. I'm saying this as a netural comment, as we have yet to see how he will develop in your story. My only suggestion would be to try to be consistant with his lack or abundance of emotion. Kepp up the good work!
Already I like what you have done to the original story (which I liked too!). I like how the story starts after the fall of Naraku and not right in the middle of everything. I can't wait to see what you do with this story. I wonder if Sesshoumaru will ever taunt Inu with the knowledge that Kagome was the one that got Naraku, especially if he was defending Kagome! Good luck!
| I had read the other version of this story and I enjoyed it very much. I am very interested in seeing how your version is presented and thus far I like what I read. I will be looking forward to your updates and hope that you finish your story because I do not believe that the other author completed her story. Well written and your notes were very interesting. Keep up the great work. *hugs and smiles*
Talulabell (Chapter 1) - Mon 23 Mar 2009
i must admit i had little faith this would be good cuz of the summery i thought it was going to be super super cliche but its not. Ur story is very well written and i think thats what saves it from being cliche the idea is kinda what others have writtne but u wright so beautfully and by the end of the chapter i knew tha i have never reaed somthing like this before. i love how u incorprate kagomes diray adn how it doesnt just go into oh i love sesshomaru but he doesnt notice me. yea...i hoping this all made sense. ur storys not cliche and is wonderfully written. haha yea soooo keep writting please.
talulabell
| wow this first chapter was an interesting one :) as well as a funny one xD, when Sesshoumaru reads about Kagome's journey with Inuyasha and the gang and even more so about her dreams about him i had a good laugh when he realized that she was dreaming about him and not Inuyasha. I can't wait to see what will happen in the next chapter, I also wonder if Sesshoumaru and Kagome will meet again or is she back in her own time period :O guess ill just have to wait and find out when that time comes around.
cant wait to read the next update :D.
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