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1912 (Chapter 20) - Sun 26 Jul 2009
i really love this story ... more update please

ClanCrusher (Chapter 20) - Thu 23 Jul 2009
I can't...fathom this. Talk about an incredible about face from the last chapter. It seems like she doesn't remember anything about her emotional state before the lemon scene. I know that you have a partner who helps with the writing process but really, it didn't even seem like you read the last chapter. Let's be honest here. In chapter 19, Kagome was in a fragile emotional state, in tears from the fact that a child was being forced upon her like a job, and now she's giggling and laughing an hour latter like it's all some kind of joke. It doesn't add up. Anyways, the last thing I want to point out is your lemon scene in general. How many sentences did you star with the word "He"? Well over twenty from what I counted. And that's not counting the variations of "Then he..." and "His". It doesn't seem wrong with the way it's read, but think of it this way. What if you used that same style to discuss something else...say a fight scene. Version A: He blocked two punches and a kick. He also blocked the follow-up leg sweep. He waited for the right moment before catching the next blow, and then he delivered a crushing blow to his opponents chest. END It get's repetitve after a while and detracts from the overall scene. Here's the same scene from before without beginning any sentence with he. Version B: Two punches and a kick were all successfully blocked, as well as the follow-up leg sweep. Waiting for the right moment, he caught the next blow, moving instantly inside his guard to deliver a crushing blow to the opponents chest. END I'm not saying your scene was as bad as Version A up there, but I think you get the idea. Anyways, I hope this review is helpful to you. I'll be putting this up on fanfiction dot net as well under a signed review if you wish to contact me.

Wynter89 (Chapter 20) - Mon 20 Jul 2009
Guten Tag

Long-time-no-review.

Great chapters! I loved reading them!

Poor Kagome, being told that she has no choice in the matter of becoming a Breeder. Sure she enjoyed the physical, but being told she HAD to do it.
Sesshoumaru just doesnt get it. I think he had a better chance of taking her as his mate then a Breeder.

About the Review Whore situation, I am like that as well, lol... After I post a story, I stalk the reviews... lol!!!

Inkasha Taisho (Chapter 20) - Mon 20 Jul 2009
And it's wonderful!! Absolutely Delicious!!And just a bit unexpected.

Jazz (Chapter 20) - Mon 20 Jul 2009
That was interesting.

Akay (Chapter 20) - Sun 19 Jul 2009
Hello, I've been reading this story since it had like only 11 chapters or so. I find it really interesting and different and I apologize for being a silent reader for so long. I will honestly try to review more. I just tend to get side-tracked. Ok on to my review. I've been enjoying the story so far. It's amusing with a strong Kagome and a Sesshoumaru that was amusing in his own way. This latest chapter threw me off a bit for a few reasons. I mean I understand that Kagome was sad and down in the dumps about the situation but clothing herself in four layers of clothes and a robe? Did she really had to go that far? *shrugs* I dunno. Second thing. Sesshoumaru laughed. A serious tear-slipping laugh. I found myself staring at the screen and cautiously looking from side to side waiting for something to blow up - namely my head. After the shock wore off though I got a chuckle out of it. I mean its not everyday you read someone have Sesshoumaru really laugh. Thirdly (and I hope I don't come off as offensive or a jerk or anything) but I kinda agree with one of your previous reviews. I mean I understand what you saying about Kagome adapting to her situation but something about her in this chapter unnerved me. After seeing her fight so much and argue with him so much it would seem like she wouldn't take this situation lying down. I thought she would put up more of a fight when he came in the room. And she eventually did seem like she was enjoying it, but hey she was all caught up in the heat of the moment and a nude Sesshoumaru, who wouldn't foam at the mouth but still... it just seemed odd. Her morning after reaction seems like she deeply regrets it and maybe an argument would happen but by then it would be too late. What's done is done. I'm curious to see how this will turn out so I'm gonna coninue to read and hopefully I can review more often. You and RowdyJaner writes really well together. Akay

Gothic Lust (Chapter 20) - Sun 19 Jul 2009
Oh wow. Great chapter. I hope that Kagome doesn't go into recluse or something. Please update soon. I'm so glad I read the chapter here than on Fanfiction, you need to read all of what goes on to get an understanding. Please update soon. --Gothic Lust

BeautifulMorningSun (Chapter 20) - Sun 19 Jul 2009
(Hangs head and sighs) Oh Sesshomaru. When his mother told him those things, she wasn't talking about a breeder for god's sakes! She was talking about a mate! He's so dense it makes me mad! (Laugh) Of course Kagome's upset, anyone would be! Please update as soon as you can, I can't wait to see how Kagome reacts now that her status has changed! Beautiful Morning Sun

Breezy (Chapter 20) - Sun 19 Jul 2009
Oh gosh this story is just so fantastic. At first I was a little worried about how Kagome seemed to give in a little too quickly to Sesshoumaru. But the words that are shared between them the morning after was definitely enough to remind me that Kagome had not truly given in. I sense a fight in the future.

Silver1 (Chapter 20) - Sun 19 Jul 2009
okay -I may have ranted a little too much in my earlier review. I just re-read it and I sound a little overwrought. I do enjoy this story very much, and am very disappointed that Kagome just took it!.Given her character and all, I was exepecting fireworks and got... blah. About taking oneself out, no, I am not advocating it, but she wouldn't be human if, in a extremely depressed state, the thought didn't at least cross her mind, or was just touched upon, even if only for a second( been there, done that...in very extreme circumstances).I am not sure if I want to see where this story goes anymore. I will wait and see what you do with the next chapter. You are an excellent author; this chapter really bothered me. I hope there is an explanation as to why Sess is all of sudden being a major "BLEEP" to her and not caring how she feels. And why she is behaving so meekly. I mean earlier in the story she was fighting tooth and nail, even when they were trying to decide her value to pay off her folks. Sorry - I personally have a problem with women who are strong but act weak or just decide to be weak.

Ava 365 (Chapter 1) - Sun 19 Jul 2009
Hey there! Up until now I've been a silent reader (I know, I know, My bad!). But I MUST tell you I absolutely LOVE this story!!! I totally agree with you, solid relationships grow slowly. Stupid Sesshomaru, I hope he changes his mind soon about Kagome, and I hope she gives him some cold shoulder from now on... or something to make him realise his mistake. I must admit that at first I didn't like the idea of Kagome being made into a property, but I can see where it is going and I absolutely like it!!! Keep up the awesome work!!!

TruGemini (Chapter 20) - Sun 19 Jul 2009
When is he going to learn that he is just going to have to open up and say what he really feels? Makes for less confusion and hurt feelings. Beautiful chapter by the way.

Couldntbekeener3 (Chapter 20) - Sun 19 Jul 2009
God I Love This Story!!!! I wish you would update everyday!!!!

~krazy4fluffy~ (Chapter 20) - Sun 19 Jul 2009
:( ... that's it? Why so short? ... :'( Oh well, better something than nothing n_n That was kinda sweet btw... Not so angst and dramatic as I expected. Does it count as raping? 'Cause she wasn't willing, was she? But she definitely enjoyed it... n_n' Hmmm... Anyways, please update soon. I love this story!

Lucy (Chapter 20) - Sun 19 Jul 2009
I've been following this story for a while and I have to say that I love it. The concept of Kagome being a foreigner, even if just half, allows us non-japanese readers to empathize with her situation. I look foward to what's next.

Dani (Chapter 20) - Sun 19 Jul 2009
Very good read! Of course, i feel bad for poor Kagome. She is not a happy little camper right now. I just hope Sess continues to treat her right and try to figure what is wrong with her. Oh, and I hope she doesn't get preggo the first time, they need to get so comfortable with each other that they won't want to stop even when she is.

Silver1 (Chapter 20) - Sun 19 Jul 2009
Ok... I have been reading this whole story and I was looking forward to see what would happen after chapter 19. I was enoying this story up till now, and find this last chapter ..or should I say Kagome's actions in this last chapter really disappointing and somewhat ooc. I can see how you developed her character after being initially marked as she was adapting. . that makes sense and made a good story. This last chapter doesn't, not to me. I mean, she just gave in...!!!! I feel, that no matter how well she has adapted, she should have done something else, anything else. She didn't do anything after pleading with Sess not to do it. Why didn't she fight? If she sees being a breeder as such a degradation, why didn't she consider suicide if she hates it so much? Granted, not the most stable of responses, but still a valid feeling. Or why didn't she use her power to protect herself. Sess gave her permission to do so if she felt herself or her virtue threatened. That would have made an interesting interaction with her telling him that she was following his orders to protect herself from unwanted advances. BTW what was that bit with the pajamas? Wrapping herself up like a mummy wouldn't help. I think she should tell Sess that he is no better than his father, that she will never trust him again. I am also disturbed by the fact that she appeared to be enjoying the act. Yes I know the body responds to outside stimulus, etc, but she didn't want this and now appears to be enjoying it. Well, she didn't want to have sex as property( I mean naked Sesshomaru? Helloo!Yum!),. Sess seems to think that he can have the mating releationship that his Mother and her mate have, but he seems to have forgotten two things... He didn't ask Kags to be his mate and he didn't make her his mate. I can only say this - I have enjoyed the story up till this chapter, and am very disappointed in what has happened.

kagomesirene (Chapter 20) - Sun 19 Jul 2009
*cry* >.< *cry* ...argh..there you have it sesshoumaru..i did warn you :P and now you had your pleasure and kagome is hurt *cry* noooooooooooo i cannot take this drama -__-* why oh why *cry* i demand you update this story within the next 48 hours!!pretty PLEASEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE (kinda sounds not so much like a demand anymore..more like begging -__-* )

~krazy4fluffy~ (Chapter 19) - Fri 17 Jul 2009
Please update soon :( I beg you....

~krazy4fluffy~ (Chapter 18) - Fri 17 Jul 2009
Ohhh... Okay, not exactly what I wanted... BETTER! :D And about reviewing a little more... Can I review again and again the same chapter? I can babble on and on about how much I love this fic!!! Truly original and realistic in its ways :D:D !!!!! Some damn right down to earth truths and some damn oh-so-good moments that make my heart want to sweep out of its place and go flying like Kagome's :P Goshhh... please updateeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee I don't want to be caught up IN THE NEXXT CHAPTER... which, by the way, kinda seems like torturing myself >_< I can't wait :(

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