Reviews for To be an Alpha by Natalia

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Deana (Chapter 7) - Tue 10 Oct 2017

Awesome story! I can't for the next chapter! I'm glad that you made Inuyasha more caring than the usual stories.


KShadeslady (Chapter 7) - Sun 08 Oct 2017

Lovely long chapter. Thanks so much this deliciously long chapter. Very sweet sad moments with Inuyasha. I like how you portray him here. Finally realizing her worth. Looking forward to the next chapters. 


Mutnodjmet (Chapter 7) - Sun 08 Oct 2017

Very nice and cute chapter. I think you did a great job in developing Inuyasha into a favorable character. Despite his past misdeeds, he may not tell Kagome about how he feels but he is trying to show her and make it up to her in his own way.

So it seems that Sessho made his decision to take on Inuyasha's pack and making Kagome his alpha female. Since he does not have any other canidates at this time for alpha beta, it would seem that position will temporarily go to Inuyasha. But Kagome's position puts her in a higher status over Inuyasha I believe. I guess Kagome will remain in that position until if or when Sessho takes a mate. Since this is an S/K story...lol

I just hope Kagome does not become pregnant with Inu's pup anytime soon or not at all. I am partial to Sessho, so I think that Kagome has pups for him and full blooded ones...hehehe. LOL

I look forward to future postings to this story but of course it takes a backseat to RL. :)

It made my day... :)

Hugs and cheers to you Nat


Mutnodjmet (Chapter 6) - Thu 28 Sep 2017

I am sorry. In my previous review I mentioned Myoga and for those that do not know who he is he Inuyasha's cowardly flea demon retainer. He has a wealth of information and he was the inu brothers father's retainer before the death of their father.


Mutnodjmet (Chapter 6) - Thu 28 Sep 2017

I don't know how I missed this story but it is very good. I just read all six chapters and I enjoyed it very much.

In chapter one when Inuyasha was formally submitting himself to Sesshomaru, I believed he should have addressed him as Lord Sesshomaru and then the rest of his titles.

Where did Inuyasha learn about pack dynamics and did he teach Kagome some of these behaviors? Although he had a little of his gruffness he sounded more intelligent when he spoke which was a bit out of character for him and he even sounded more mature. I am thinking it could have been Myoga that told him that Sessho was maybe looking to build himself a pack and that is one of the reasons he approached his half brother with his plan and I also think it was Myoga that may have taught him about pack behavior also.

This story is very well written. I look forward to more chapters and not to worry about word count. Take it from drabble to full length chapter story and take your time in updating because RL comes first. Excellent job!!!


Tiffany (Chapter 6) - Mon 25 Sep 2017

Hey, 

 

I don't review often but I felt your story warranted it. I love where you are going and am interested to read more from you. Keep up the writing and look forward to you posts. 

 

Tiffany

 

P.S. Don't worry about length. It's all about substance. :)


Mars (Chapter 6) - Sun 17 Sep 2017

Oh excellent! 

Will you next chapter be a time-skip? Will it be Inuyasha finally telling Kagome? 

I am so excite. 


Mars (Chapter 5) - Sun 17 Sep 2017

Oh this is fascinating! It reminds me a bit of Life after Loss by Chie, but with a very different start. 

I can't wait to see how you'll expand on this idea. 


JeniNeji (Chapter 5) - Sun 10 Sep 2017

LOL! Very good way to portray the scene. 


JeniNeji (Chapter 4) - Sun 10 Sep 2017

Keeps getting better.


JeniNeji (Chapter 3) - Sun 10 Sep 2017

Very interesting. The plot's base is very promising.


JeniNeji (Chapter 2) - Sun 10 Sep 2017

O_O

Oh uh...


JeniNeji (Chapter 1) - Sun 10 Sep 2017

O_o

Lol! This seems to be interesting.


KShadeslady (Chapter 5) - Sat 09 Sep 2017

Ahhhh...you have got to feel for Miroku. He got left with the clean up. This is going to be hard for them all. Very nice update. Thank you! 


Tana_san (Chapter 4) - Mon 04 Sep 2017

I'm impressed with this plot. I haven't read any other with this idea before. It makes alot of sense when you think about it. This is a much better ending for InuYasha then having him betray Kagome to keep a dead version of Kikyou as his lover/mate. Somehow that one never sits well with me. What hot blooded guy would want to put his "precious sword" in a cold, dead "sheath"? I don't care that she looks and sounds like his once love...she isn't truly human or alive!

InuYasha is a lot of things, insensitive and brash, he heads forward into danger with no planning wielding his father's sword around with no training but he does love Kagome. I like that you're showing him in a mature manner and planning for her and Shippou's protection. I like how you made him suck up every ounce of hurt, anger and resentment toward Sesshoumaru just to assure she is safe. It takes a lot of guts to put aside one's differences like that for another. That's real and true love...to give your life for another is the greatest gift one can give...and essentially this is what InuYasha is doing for her and Shippou. He knows he's dying and he concedes that his brother is the greatest chance for Kagome's survival.

I'm curious as to how both Sesshoumaru and Kagome will handle this. It seems Sesshoumaru is already trying to say no by asking to send her back to her "villiage" and family. Did InuYasha know that he was dying when he mated/married Kagome? If they mated like Inu, did his life forse bond with hers and extend her life? or can she die when he does unless she can take a stronger mate and live on?

Oh my, sooo many questions.....

As far as how the length of the chapters go, I'm not one to enjoy drabbles. My internet is quite slow and I easily get bored waiting for such small chapters...if one can actually call them that at all. I think you should write as the mood and time constraints strikes you. This way you haven't had to keep up with a word count. If you only have time and plot enough for a drabble, do it and perhaps next time add more or make a lengthy one.

You are the writer and it's admirable for you to please your readers but you for the most part you need to write to be pleased with yourself and feel comfortable in the way you're putting it out.

So far, you have a fan here. I am awaiting more to come.

JEN


M.J. (Chapter 4) - Mon 04 Sep 2017
 
I like your story, keep writing at your pace, but do not forget us.

KShadeslady (Chapter 4) - Mon 04 Sep 2017

Very nice Update. Thanks so much. Perhaps you should not try to cram this story into a constricting model. Just write what you have time to write when you can. No matter the length, we will accept that most gratefully. 


War (Chapter 4) - Sun 03 Sep 2017

P. S. Sorry for the errors... My phone has a mind of its own, lol!


War (Chapter 4) - Sun 03 Sep 2017

While I don't normally review... I read on my phone & it's a pain in the ass, lol! I really wanted to leave a note.

 

I love house this is going. You managed to do an amazing job keeping the characters true to their expected personalities. That's really hard to do for some writers with all the ideas & different types of stories or there.

 

You asked how readers prefer to get updates... Well the simple answer is always, constantly, endlessly, & you're never allowed to stop! Lmao! That's not realty doable for anyone with a life though.

 

Honestly this recent update still feels, & reads, like a short chapter or a long drabble. I'm not sure if you were going for a long or short chapter. I know you mentioned that it was a test.

 

I can happily read long, short, or a mix. You can update whenever is convenient for you. I'll keep coming back with every email update I get. I think many readers would agree: Just write how it works for you. Forcing yourself to try new things is great, but if it makes it so you have trouble writing or end up writing something you're not happy with then you are just pushing yourself to hard. Writing only happens when you're inspired, so you don't have to worry so much about "when" or "how long/short", just write when you can & follow your muse.

 

If longer chapters are easier updating less often,  then I'd say go for it. But if you want to stick to regular shorter chapters, there is no harm in doing so.

 

Either way, other readers & myself will keep reading.

 

Just know that what I've read so far is very good. Be proud! Keep up the great work, at a pace & work load you enjoy. Though if were really up to the readers (myself included) I'm sure a long chapter daily would be awesome (but a super challenge to do with real life getting in the way lol)!

 

Good luck, I hope you find your stride.

 

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KShadeslady (Chapter 3) - Thu 31 Aug 2017

Oh my...that should be Naraku...not your name. Darn auto correct!


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