Reviews for A Whole New World! by Sarah

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Mutnodjmet (Chapter 9) - Wed 09 Aug 2017

Loved this chapter. Very tender moments and promises of the future. Looking forward to more chapters to come I hope. Great job!!!


Deana (Chapter 9) - Wed 09 Aug 2017

Awesome story! Yes there are typos and so on but don't let that deter you. More Please!


Buttercream (Chapter 8) - Wed 09 Aug 2017

It is good that Kagome told Sesshomaru what was troubling her.  They both need to know about each other. I can not wait until Kagome reaches the western palace.  Will Sesshomaru mother like her? What about the court?

 


Mutnodjmet (Chapter 8) - Wed 09 Aug 2017

This is a very nice chapter and nicely written also. I like how you brought out Kagome's fears and emotions about her humanity involving her aging and not being able to see her children grow and flourish; not being able to be by Sessho's side to raise their pups and being the proper lady to rule the lands. Most of all not being able to see her family in the future ever again.

Bringing out Sessho's compassion to ease her fears by trying to explain what it means to be mated and bonded, which she seemed be having a hard time wrapping her head around the concept that it will expand her life to match his. It was funny how she got upset and bent out of shape because the pups were not named at the moment of their birth. She has a lot to learn about living in an inuyoukai and demon society.

Looking forward to more updates because there is still more to add on to this story before you get to the end. Please keep it going. I love it.


Natalia (Chapter 8) - Wed 09 Aug 2017

What a beautiful chapter! And I can't help but notice that the grammar is uch better!

Can't wait to see them bonded finally!

Thx for updating!


Natalia (Chapter 7) - Tue 08 Aug 2017

much better! i get it that your autocorrect is messing up the story, thx for taking time to rectify it! don't delete the story its very good!


Erica Lederer aka MEOWMARU~!!!! (Chapter 7) - Tue 08 Aug 2017

Is anyone else excited to see how the Lady Mother will react to being a grandma. :3 

I find myself unable to stop imaging all the different scenario's~!! 

 

Looking forward to more and please ignore all those flamers, I for one think you are doing an awesome job. Keeo it up and keep yourself happy!


Anna Grey (Chapter 7) - Tue 08 Aug 2017

much better, really, thanks god you didn't delete the story :) I'm looking for your next update, love


cassandra (Chapter 7) - Tue 08 Aug 2017

Don't delete your whole story, it's a good one!  Even if you make some mistakes, that's ok it's still an excellent story in my opinion! 


Bylee (Chapter 7) - Sun 06 Aug 2017

Please PLEASE!!!! I BEG of you! Spell check, a beta and grammarly, not necessarily in that order but will do wonders for your work. I love the concept of your story and I'm not flaming but the constant spelling  and grammatical errors make me want to cry. English is not my native tongue, so getting things out the way I want in my writing rarely ever happens, which is why I'm recommending you get a beta. I can't help but feel like the pace of the story is too quick! And I'm a little bothered by how Kagome has not had a single problem with the entire debacle, it's a little incredulous how everything just fell into place with no struggle, It makes the story hard to relate to. But great work ! Keep updating please, I'd like to see where this goes.


Ree-san (Chapter 7) - Sun 06 Aug 2017

You meat Alpha. You should probably fix that sense it's an important concept. 


Anna Grey (Chapter 7) - Sun 06 Aug 2017

I really enjoy your story, from chapter 1 to 6, but I think the 7th chapter is, to be honest, badly written.All the grammar, spelling errors, the plot here is...funny and the characters? I really don't know. Maybe this chapter is a little bit rush?? Hope you improve your writing in the following chapters. Sorry if I sound too rude.


Delcena (Chapter 1) - Sun 06 Aug 2017

You have a good storyline going here, and always leave me on edge. Unfortunately, the errors are a bit though to get by and diminishes understanding of your story sometimes. You should try getting a beta to assist you. It will make your story that much better.


Natalia (Chapter 7) - Sun 06 Aug 2017

Ha kagome is strong! Go kagome! 

One thing rubs me, green eyes? Since when does kagome have green eyes? In the anime her eyes are dark brown and blue in manga no? Maybe it changes because of something?

Anyway thx a lot for updating! I enjoyed the chapter!


Mutnodjmet (Chapter 7) - Sun 06 Aug 2017

I knew that Kagome was going to fight and argue with Sessho on moving away from the village but after the attack on her and her babies she finally sees the reasoning behind Sessho's demand on moving them to the palace where they will be safer behind palace walls and not out in the open village.

But now Kagome is probably going to have to fight for own life being a human and lady of the west regardless that she gave birth to three powerful full blood heirs. If Sessho's mother is still alive, I wonder how she will feel about the whole situation?

Now names for the pups and introduction to the demon court of the west and society. I bet the other lords will probably try to match up babes for future mating when they become of mating age for political gain. They will especially try for the girl first since she is a rare breed and beautiful. We know Kagome will not tolerate that and not allow it and I bet she gets her way too (laughing).

I hope Sessho softens up and begins to fall in love with Kagome and vice versa. Make that mating mark permanent LoL :)

Nice writing and a good chapter. Looking forward to more updates soon.


Saiya (Chapter 6) - Sun 06 Aug 2017

Awsome


cassandra (Chapter 7) - Sun 06 Aug 2017

I feel bad for the two of them. Now that the word is out about the babies, they're gonna have all kinds of problems. I just hope that by leaving kagome and the babies will be safe. 


Buttercream (Chapter 6) - Sat 05 Aug 2017

Wow. I am glad that Kagome and the pups are fine. I am glad that everything is out in the open.

 Please update soon.


Mutnodjmet (Chapter 6) - Sat 05 Aug 2017

Excellent. You surprised us with not one but three little full demon pups, one being a girl to boot and a rare one a that...Now the fun really begins. 

Kagome is going to fight Sessho on not wanting to leave her precious village and of course he is not going to want to leave them there.  Why did Sesshomaru's beast not bonded or permanently mate Kagome?

Nicely written chapter. I've been waiting for this one and glad I did not have to wait long. Looking for the next update. Great job!!!


Natalia (Chapter 6) - Sat 05 Aug 2017

Wow finally! I am so happy for them. Three! Curious what will happen now, in the shiro?  Update soon please!  The for the chapter! 


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