HI, I LOVE THIS FANFIC.... CAN'T WAIT FOR THE SEQUAL TO START UP....HOPE SHE HAS 4 PUPS 2 BOYS, 2GIRLS...OR 3 BOYS AND 1 GIRL.....I HOPE IF IT'S 2 BOYS AND 2 GIRLS THAT IT'S 2 SETS IDENTICLE TWINS....IF IT'S THREE BOYS AND 1 GIRL ...I HOPE AT LEAST 1 PUP HAS BLUE EYES AND SILVER HAIR... I THINK BLUE AND SILVER WOULD LOOK BEAUTIFUL TOGETHER.....I HOPE THEY WIND UP WITH AT LEAST 15 PUPS...MAYBE 20 BY THE TIME THEY REACH KAGOMES TIME...I HOPE THEY ALL HAVE BOTH PARENTS POWERS...WITH SOME OTHER UNIQUE POWERS ...LIKE SEER POWER (*CAN SEE PAST,PRESENT,AND FUTURE),,,TELEPATHY(* WITH PEOPLE AND ANIMALS ,,,TELEKENESIS(*MOVE STUFF WITH YOUR MIND),,,TELEP0RTATION(*ABLE TO TELEPORT ANTWHERE INSTANTLY),,,IMMUNE TO SPIRITUAL POWER AND ALL POISONS,,,CREATE BARRIERS,,,KOTADOMA NECLACES LIKE INUYASHA'S,,,CREATE SUTRA'S AND OFUDA LIKE A MIKO AND MONK,,,CREATE WHIP FOR EACH HAND LIKE SESSHOUMARU(USING POISON OR SPIRITUAL POWER,,,DO SPELLS,,,ENCHANTMENTS,,,MAKE ANY POTIONS,,,HEALING POWER(ABLE TO HEAL ANYTHING INCLUDING GROWING BACK LIMBS),,,MAKE AND BREAK ANY TYPE OF SEAL,,,EACH ONE TO HAVE A ELEMENTAL POWER OF 2 OR MORE DIFFERENT ELEMENTS,,,, ELEMENTS(*FIRE,WATER,WIND,EARTH,LIGHTNING,ICE,SHADOW,LIGHT,TIME,VOID,ELECTRICITY,METAL,ROCK,SOUND,SPIRIT,CHI(LIFE), BLOOD,SPACE, CONTRLO WEATHER,PSIONICS),,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,TDAN
Krisan (Chapter 15) - Sun 14 Jul 2019
Wow, do you plan on a sequel? That’d be wonderfu! I really want to know how the pups will be born.
Krisan (Chapter 8) - Sun 14 Jul 2019
I thank you for making this awesome work happens
Toni (Chapter 15) - Wed 10 Jul 2019
love this story can't wait till you post the next one
Age (Chapter 15) - Mon 08 Jul 2019
Love this story! Can't wait till part 2!
I have noticed that you have several tense jumps as well as some misplaced words the story is good and I cant wait to read more
First time lemon, you did pretty awesome.
Alison (Chapter 12) - Mon 13 May 2019
why r the chapters getting shorter!?
REDWOLF (Chapter 12) - Wed 01 May 2019
Wonderful, wonderful story. Inuyasha is so brash and I just wish he would be descent. Love the ways you've just brought the characters to the forefront. Can't wait for your next update.
I am glad you picked this one back up can't wait to find out all about what happens
Thank you for picking this back up it's really good
This was such a tease of a chapter!!! I’m looking forward to the ceremony.
HI, I LOVE THE STORY SON FAR .... I HOPE YOU WILL UPDATE THE STORY OFTEN....I LOOK FORWARD TO READING MORE CHAPTERS SOON.........GREAT BEGINNING.... LOOKING FORWARD TO SEEING HOW SESS AND KAGS RELATIONSHIP PROGRESSES.....I HOPE SHE HAS TRIPLETS WITH THE FIRST BIRTH.....1MALE AND 2 FEMALES.... I HOPE THE MALE LOOKS LIKE SESS ...AND I HOPE THE FEMALES LOOK LIKE SESS WITH SILVER HAIR BUT BLUE EYES AND BLUE MARKINGS.....I HOPE KAGOME TAKES ON INUYOUKAI ATTRABUTES AFTER SHE MATES SESS.....I WOULD LIKE TO SEE HER WITH.... POINTED EARS , CLAWS LIKE SESS'S , SILVER STREAKS IN HER HAIR , AND BLUE EYES AND MARKINGS ON WRIST,CHEEKS,HIPS,AND THIGHS TO HER ANKLES ALL IN BLUE. SHE SHOULD HAVE HER OWN MARKING OF THE SHIKON ON HER FORHEAD BECAUSE MIDORIKO HAD HER OWN MARKING ,HERS WAS LIKE A FLOWER 4 PETALS AND A CIRCLE IN THE CENTER.... SO WITH KAGS BEING THE TRUE SHIKON MIKO WHO COMPLETED THE KAMI'S DESTINY FOR HER LIFE AND COMPLETED HER QUEST.....SHE IS ALSO SUPPOSE TO BE IMMORTAL ....IN THE FANFIC KAGUYA SAID HER LIFE LINE HAD NO ENDING....MEANING SHE WOULD NOT DIE ,SHE WAS IMMORTAL....PROBABLY BECAUSE OF HAVING THE SHIKON IN HER BODY SINCE BIRTH ,,,SO I BELIEVE THE KAMI INTENDED HER TO BE IMMORTAL AND TO BE SESSHOUMARU'S MATE AND NOT INUYASHA'S . THAT'S PROBABLY THE REASON WHY SHE WAS GIVIN THE ABILITY TO BIRTH FULL DEMON PUPS ...AND THEY WILL MORE THAN LIKELY BE IMMUNE TO MIKO POWERS AS WELL. MAYBE KAGS IS SESS'S SOUL MATE I WOULD NOT BE SURPRISED THAT WAS THE INUNOTAISHO'S REASON FOR GIVING TENSEIGA TO SESS INSTEAD OF TETSAIGA...BECAUSE HE NEW SESS WOULD GET A BETTER SWORD IN THE SWORD BAKUSAIGA WHICH IS SESS'S SWORD THAT CAME FROM SESS'S OWN BODY . WHICH IS A SWORD EVEN BETTER THAN TETSAIGA....................................CAN'T WAIT TO READ THE NEW CHAPTERS...HOPE ITS REALLY SOON.........................................................................................................TDAN
I'm enjoying it very much. Can't wait for the next chapter. Would like to see wgsst happens when Kagome and inuyasha meet again. And what Sesshoumaru does it inuyasha makes her upset.
What did she see? Cant wait hopefully you get more inspiration breaks =D
I know you didn't want this review but it will help in the long run for you as a writer, and it will make writing more enjoyable as your readers will enjoy it more too.
Following basic grammar rules will get you so, so far!
Saw:
noun (thing, this is what you were referring to)
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1.
a hand tool for cutting wood or other materials, typically with a long, thin serrated steel blade and operated using a backward and forward movement.
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cut (something, especially wood or a tree) using a saw.
"the top of each post is sawed off at railing height"
Verb: (the proper use in the context provided in your story)
Saw is the PAST TENSE of the verb see, and usually comes immediately after NOUNS (InuYasha saw, Kagome saw, etc) and PRONOUNS (I, you, she, he, they, etc). SEEN is the PAST PARTICIPLE of the VERB see. Generally, seen is used alongside have, has, had, was or were in a sentence to make COMPOUND VERBS. (EX kagome had seen; I have seen)
USAGE: saw : This word is a stand-alone VERB. "I saw InuYasha with Kikyo!"
These corrections are not put down your story but to help you improve on grammar and clarity. Your preference in saw vs seen can easily be remedied with Kagome saying "I've seen them!". However as a writer, your goal is to express your view or take on a concept (your story) for others to enjoy. Making sure it is grammatically correct, sans typos etc., will be clearer for your readers and more enjoyable overall.
You're doing well, but keep pushing yourself and you'll do great in no time! I hope you take this constructively and hope it helps!
Hakujo (Chapter 10) - Fri 28 Dec 2018
Noooo why stop now..are planning to update soon..please don't abandon the story...
Hakujo (Chapter 10) - Fri 28 Dec 2018
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