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Stopping Time Just to Prevent a Heartbreak

Hey this is my first story so please be supportive. Flames are not accepted but constructive critism is. Enjoy.





Don't waste your touch, you won't feel anything or were you sent to save me?


I've thought too much, you won't find anything...


Worthy of redeeming


Yo he estado aqui muchas veces antes y regreso


Leave...

Get out...

Don't touch me...




Time seems to have stopped, and I seem to be having an out of body experience, I can tell because I can see us. We're frozen, stuck in place. I look at the pretty picture we make. I'm splayed out across the green tiled floor wearing your favorite outfit of mines, you know, the one you said you loved... the once beautiful turquoise halter dress now stained with smudged mascara and tears. My head is turned away from you, my brown eyes bloodshot and swollen from crying, my once straight hair now in a disheveled manner. You're standing over me your stoic and empty golden eyes are set upon me. Your jacket now discarded on the floor, your strong arms reaching out to embrace me. You're dressed as sharp as ever, in your expensive name brand jeans, your once straight white button down shirt now wrinkled and undone revealing your undershirt.



Is this what we've been reduced to? Is this what I get for loving you?



To... break down, and cease all feeling


Burn now, what once was breathing


Reach out, and you may take my heart away



I've broken down, but the feelings don't stop running throughout my core. There's this feeling. This feeling inside when I look at you. It's not an ache, it's not sore or a throb...it's more of a burn, not even a fire. It's just there slowly simmering, threatening to burn a whole through the cavity surrounding this aching heart. And maybe if you wait long enough you can finally take this aching heart of mines away.




Imperfect cry, and scream in ecstasy


so what befalls the flawless?


Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully


Now watch as it destroys me


Y regreso aqui otra vez y comienzo



I tried... I tried to be perfect or at least perfect enough to please you. I tried to be perfect for you but no matter how hard I tried every one can see these flaws. And everyone knows I'm a far cry from perfection. I built you a love, one not made of sticks or straw or bone but one made of bricks and stones. A love I thought could withstand all your cruel words but it wasn't strong enough, and that love has crashed down and burned, and I'm stuck under the wreckage screaming your name. I don't care if someone perfect wouldn't have screamed, I don't care if she wouldn't have gotten herself in the same situation that has befallen me. All I care about is you, so I scream and shout till my throat is sore and till I can't scream anymore... but you don't come...but I don't give up I still hold hope that you'll save me. I see a figure... and I automatically know it's you. I call out your name and reach my hand out so you can grab it but you don't... you just watch as I and the love I built for you are destroyed.




To... break down, and cease all feeling

Burn now, what once was breathing

Reach out, and you may take my heart away




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