| i like the second fic it was nice also you cant delete in here if you made a mistake you made one so when you make the next chapter just upload it on the 1st mistake and also do you have a beta cause if you dont a beta can help you out even more so you dont have to stress about fixing it
       
Artemis13- Fri 18 Jul 2008 
| u need ta add more chapters...i think it can become something great if u put in  tha effort.
       
danny- Wed 16 Jul 2008 
| its funny i like it though short but still cool cant wait for the next
       
										
									
									
																										
								
								
								
																								
															
													
					
				
								
				
				
			
				
				
		
				
	
			
			
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