| I appreciate the review for my story, and I have to say that yours is really good as well. Some suggestions for you though, space your thoughts and paragraphs better, it will read a lot easier, and try to write longer chapters every once and a while your readers will appreciate it, if you use a Japanese term not used often in fanfics then provide the definition bluntly at the end of the chapter, or give obvious context clues as to its meaning in the sentences or paragraphs following the word. Other than that I really like it and await the next chapter.
Megan Consoer- Sat 31 May 2008
| I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
Akiyome-dragon of darkness- Sat 31 May 2008
| I like it alot......the plots pretty good , but you need longer chapters..........ans Erica that was mean. This fanfic does make sense.
Erica- Sat 31 May 2008
| Great plot from wat I gathered in the summary its supposed to be pretty good. However, I started reading it and realized while the plot is good the story writing is really crappy. The chapters are hard to follow, short, and boring.
Megan Consoer- Thu 29 May 2008
| I really like this story a lot. Can you please write some more chapters?
Birdy- Thu 29 May 2008
| Wow. XD
Arcana Mortalitas- Thu 29 May 2008
| awwww Rin is so cute when she's evil. I'm glad they like each other now instead of developing feelings for each other later. I love your story.
MoniQ- Thu 29 May 2008
| that chapter was intersting, and quite good in the insults, NICe! Continue!
Albalannae- Sun 27 Apr 2008
| pretty good start, work on paragraphs though lol, each new 'thought' and every new line of dialogue need to have their own paragraph, it's pretty confusing to read it otherwise. ^^ keep going though! I wanna read more!
moniQ- Sat 26 Apr 2008
another chapter up, i liked this chapter, though i do suggest a few changes (not sure is you agree or not)
- try to be more elusive when giving note on what is currently happening in kagomes level of power.
-i would include some definitions down teh bottom, as i personally have no clue what the "hana' means in Shikon No Miko No Hana.
Also is there going to be INu bashing.......PLEAASE!!!!!
MoniQ
elvira- Sat 26 Apr 2008
pease!..pdate soon
and if possible..longer chapters!
Megan Consoer- Fri 25 Apr 2008
| I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
Arcana Mortalitas- Fri 25 Apr 2008
| NOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!! I was so happy to read a story like this and the chapter ends there. I'm going to be waiting anxiously until the story is updated. there are so many possible turns in this and it's only the first chapter. This is being put into my favourites now.
Queen of the Past- Thu 24 Apr 2008
| this is a great start and i hope to see another chapter up soon
Spitfiremiko- Thu 24 Apr 2008
| I love your story so far!!!! Totally amazing! :)
moniQ- Thu 24 Apr 2008
awww your so mean leaving us on a cliffy!, please continue,
MONI
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