It was a likable short piece.

But I hope you don't mind if I point out a couple of things. One being that you seem to favour commas a great deal where a period/full stop would have been more effective, not to mention grammatically correct. Also, considering that you're trying to give an old-fashioned feel where the language is concerned, the use of 'kinetic' doesn't really fit in.

Otherwise, it was a sweet piece.^_^

~ fantaskie

It was a likable short piece.

But I hope you don't mind if I point out a couple of things. One being that you seem to favour commas a great deal where a period/full stop would have been more effective, not to mention grammatically correct. Also, considering that you're trying to give an old-fashioned feel where the language is concerned, the use of 'kinetic' doesn't really fit in.

Otherwise, it was a sweet piece.^_^

~ fantaskie