Thank you for reformatting. The page looks so much better. I re-read the story and I actually enjoyed reading it because it did not hurt 'this ones old eyes' *wink and giggles*

Nice job. Update soon.

*hugs and smiles*

Thank you for reformatting. The page looks so much better. I re-read the story and I actually enjoyed reading it because it did not hurt 'this ones old eyes' *wink and giggles*

Nice job. Update soon.

*hugs and smiles*

The story seems like it might be interesting to read. The one problem I see is that the sentences and paragraphs are too close together. If you can, could you please put double spaces in between paragrahs and optionally put one and half spaces between sentences with indentation at the beginning of each paragraph. I think this would make it easier on the eyes for reading. Nice start otherwise.

I look forward to your updates soon.

*hugs and smiles*