Reviews for Indelible by yukihime

Freya- Sat 19 Jul 2008
Awwwww! I cried! it was so good but she HAS to go back to him! Write another chapter......Pweeeeease?

Riku Ryuu- Wed 16 Jul 2008
oh my. The ending made me cry. I don't know why, but it was so sad. Thank you so much for writing this great story that could touch my heart so much!
I stopped crying,
Riku Ryuu

Ice_Angel- Sun 30 Mar 2008
Please...write more! I really want to know what happens next!

Rei- Sat 08 Mar 2008
Please don't stop with just one chapter. It is a very good tale and it would be nice if you didn't end it there.

helleboros- Sat 09 Feb 2008
Nicely written and entertaining. Sort of sad, though. I personally don't like angsty fics, but this was qutie sweet, nevertheless.

Destiny'sTears- Thu 07 Feb 2008
Wow, this had some really great parts to it! i know its supposed to be done but i'd like an epilogue or something. i just want to suggest though, a little bit more detail, but other than that, beautimus job!

Dragonfhain- Mon 04 Feb 2008
Very sweet, the lemon was brief but fit the tone of the story well and I liked the tragic aspect to the ending. Although, I am one of the ones waving around the flag chanting "Sequel!", LOL. Please follow up with more to the story!

FangedBeasty- Sun 03 Feb 2008
Nooooo! That isn't fair! You shouldn't end it here, it just isn't right! *pout* Good story, but I still think it is incomplete no matter what you say.

:)

-FangedBeasty

Kagehime- Sun 03 Feb 2008
I'm not sure about this.. there were errors in sentence structure that had me confused, and the plot was also confusing. The ending was a let down also, very anti-climactic - he goes back to the room, to remember? And she feels something is wrong but leaves anyway?

If it was indelible, then she would have remembered, no? The meaning of the word.. and no reason given for Himeko to poison her - just, she is poisoned, they sort of are intimate, nothing explained as to how or why Sesshoumaru is in love with her, and an ending that was sort of (I'm sorry) a bit awkward.

Please forgive this less than brilliant review.. I like other things you've written, there are places where punctuation could improve - commas needed and such - also giving a definition, instead of a link would be nice - when reading a story having a URL that isn't a clickable link - but just a plain URL, isn't the best way to provide translation.

Once again, I'm sorry for this review, the subjective aspects are solely my own opinion - other than a bit of editing, you write well and have written other good stories, keep writing and remember your fandom - people want to see S/K end up together.. especially with a title such as "Indelible" where the very title creates the strong suggestion of forever after, by it's definition.

Best of luck, and keep writing

Lilies for Mary- Sat 02 Feb 2008
I'm glad the old boy had some morals in this. The premise was a bit...silly (but to each his own). Some things-outside of the "mature scene"- could definitely use some fleshing out. Fair. I like the title.

Tainted Sins- Tue 29 Jan 2008
What..? Nonono, you have to end it so they get together! -Pleads- Add another chapter..! Make it so she remembers..
It was good, but.. Really, my heart just aches after reading it.

Scarlet- Mon 28 Jan 2008
This was so good, I know its suppose to be completed but please add another chapter. ^_^

Sadness- Mon 28 Jan 2008
Mrrrr.... :( They didn't get together...

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