luv ur story!!!!!hurryhuryhury plz plz plz write more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ps:peace+luv+respect=happieness

I REALLY LIKE YOUR STORY. I MUST SAY THAT THIS STORY INTRIGUES MY INTEREST. PLEASE CONTINUE TO WRITE. YOU ARE VERY MUCH ON YOUR WAY TO WRITING A GREAT STORY. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK. I WILL AWAIT YOUR NEXT UPDATE. THANK YOU FOR A MOST ENJOYABLE READING EXPERIENCE. MAHALO FOR NOW.

Hey Danny!

Your sentence structure is getting much better and you're learning to utilize the upload feature so your story looks better so kudos to you! Just work out the minor details about your story structure in terms of conversational speech and you're on your way.

Good job!

I like the opening so far, I wonder how things will go when she makes a friend.... Though a bit too short. update soon.....