Interesting story it seems to be going well so far. My critique would be that there are lots of spelling and grammar errors. Characterization is also iffy. But the plot and storyline is great. If you need a Beta I'd be happy to help! xD
As for Panpan she was...the most interesting of all and yes she was very..annoying. If you haven't decided what to do with her yet then I would suggest that she not be in the story the entire time. She's a funny comical character in an annoying way and it's good if she appears once in a while but i feel like if she were to be there the entire time it will annoy most readers and perhaps take away the enjoyment of the story. Well that's only how I feel what's most important is how you want your story to be. xD Anyways it's a verrrry intersting story so please continue updating and writing!

Nice going! Need a Beta? Write me an e-mail.

i can be your beta if you dont have one.

I say PUSH KIKYO OFF A CLIFF!!!

Bo yea

~zen