I liked this poem - alot actually. It was a mix between bitter/sweet, and, something else.. He loves her, but cant say it..I like that.

The words and the meaning for this is very good but the structure of the poem itself is rough. I don't know exactly how to rate it but I'll do my best for you. Maybe instead of a poem you should make this a fic or a ficlet. It seems to me to have that potential. Sesshoumaru's problem with saying "I love you" out loud is a pretty good plot. Does he really love her and can't say the words or does he just want to posess her? Those three words mean everything to a human female but she doesn't want him to say it if he doesn't mean it and he's giving her that impression. And yeah, running away wouldn't stop him from finding her but staying there with him would only show him he can get away with not making that committment to her. So, either way, the premise is good. Jen