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Well, I'm stupid sometimes. I didn't get this story until just now, after the several other times that I read it. Anyway, I can't wait for the sequel!!! I love fics where a secret relationship is revealed to the world at large, they always prove VERY entertaining. You did quite well my friend, great job!

That was hot. oh and by the way I son't think you can fill those in untill you post another chapter in their place. Well post soon.

hugs and puppies

hello the story was good. So when are you going to add more to it? Please email me and let me know. The email is Silver_Wolf_16@webtv.net hope to hear from you.

Hey, what gives? It failed to put in my first review. The second one was about InuYasha smelling Sess on Kag. Here goes again. I'll try to remember what I said the first time. I wanted to encourage you to continue this story and to add a long backflash maybe by having Kagome lying in her bed thinking back about how it all began with Sess joining the group and them secretly becoming mates. It would add the crowning touch to the story. Anyway, whatever you decide. Don't give up on the story.

I just thought of something else. Is Kag using a sealing spell on her and Sess to conceal their scent from InuYasha? Otherwise, he'd be smelling them on each other. Or do you have some other method of distracting InuYasha's nose?

it was nice, really nice.

please update soon!!!

This story was hot!!! Please Please continue with it! It'll be interesting to see what will happen with Kags and Sess!!!

I hope you continue with this story!

WOW!!! I think I need a cold shower! For your first lemon, you did a really great job!
I would like to read more from this story, for sure! Please continue!
Until we meet again.

SOOOOOOOOOOO juicy good job update!!!

Hey your lemons are great!! I say keep going! Love the story update soon!

very good, you should continue

Me Likes ... That Was Actually A Good Lemon For It To Be Your Very First One ... Well I Cant Wait To See Whats Going To Happen Next!

Keep going ^_^

well first off i have to say that i'm suprised that this was your first lemon because it was so good! But i do have a bit of advice, ok first i think you should have more kissing because it would show that they really do love each other cause if you notice when a person writes about them having sex and they are not in love they sometimes will have them not kiss because its too personal. Second i think your lemon was to short don't get me wrong it was good. But to make it better you could make the actual act a bit longer more discriptive if you will and the same goes for the foreplay but you don't have to if you don't want cause its really good any way and your writing is smooth and thats a good quality for a writer. Ok i very much would like you to continue with the story and i do have an idea of ware you could take it but i have already written too much so just e-mail me back and i'll send my idea to ya JA NE!

Well that was pretty good for your first ever lemon and I like the story so I'll be happy when you update and I can read more ^_^

Wow, talk about playing ^_^

It's great and I would love to read the next chapter ^_^ Keep it up and update soon!!

This is a REALLY Good Story But....How did this little "Game" Get started anyway?

I love it, plz update soon. Poor sesshomaru, he was going to let her rest, but she just had to take a peek. Well afterward, when sesshomaru is back to his normal self, is he going to take her as his mate, or let her go or what? And then to keep the tension up, you can always have sesshomaru fighting with kagome. You know, givin him a couple of blasts of energy, though she might not have much energy.

I would say you need to backtrack and give more info into how they came to be "hunting" and why she wants them away from the group. Did something happen to them--injured, etc... or is she playing a game w/Sess and the gang thinks she's gone home? It's a good story so far and since you wanted feedback direction for where to go after 'lemon' or this could be flashbacks before the 'lemon' and/or both. Just some thoughts...

Hee, hee. Can't wait to find out what Sess has planned, though, can take a rought "guess".

Please update again when you can! I can't wait to read more of your story!

wonderful!! ~,~ hmmm, ideas about after. maybe you could focus on what kagome might do after. would she return to inuyasha or go with sesshoumaru? or go to her own time? hope it helps.

omg...> -finds an error made by her- I should not edit things when I'm so tired. lol I'm sowwie.

But I'm loving it, and I hope you update soon!

wow this is awesome the whole chase and all.

When the lemons over have Inuyasha and kikyo come in and see them after a total ( I can't believe I'm writeing this ) Make out session. And then Inuyasha gets jealous with kikyo there and starts to fight while the girls fight one another for no reason and when they figure that out stop fighting and try to get the guys to stop ...
You go ong from there and your story is really good

it was great! i love how short the chapters are. ^^ i can't wait for more...please!

Well hope you get better. Write more soon I want to know if he catches her and ravishes her or not.

hugs and puppies

Wicked! Can't wait to see what you come up with next!

Ooo I would love to read more. You did a great job!

-River

oh my god please continue

Great story!

you should add more. This is really good.

Please write again Soon we'll All be waiting

Oh wow your doing great so far!!! Take your time and have fun with it. First off get your self better!! Can't wait till the next chapter!! Update when you feel better, cause we can wait^_^

if you want help brainstorming an outline drop me a line but so far so good on your story i prefer longer ch's but whatever you get out is good

please please please update soon. please

I like this....hey, just make it a "quickie" haha if your just playing around with this idea.

i like it and think you should go on from there.

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Oh this sounds like it would be a great story! I always love a good cat and mouse chase hee hee I agree with one of your other readers, it would be nice to see how all of this came to be. All in all this story really sounds promising and has my full attention and yes you must continue on. It really would be quite cruel of you to leave us hanging on the edge of our seats as the chase heats up^_^

this sounds sooo HOT and i want read more of it. so please keep on writing this fic.

It was great don't stop I want to know how this one goes.

hugs and puppies

Please do!

I would LOVE to see more! This seems like it's a really good basis for a story...why don't you sort of go back in time and describe what led up to the chase; how she got seperated from the group, why she's aroused etc.

PS: If you do write more, could you put me on a mailing list for this? :)

Sounds like the beginning of a great story. How did she get into such a situation?

Ohhhhhhhhh you so got to continue you this story. I was mad that it stopped where it did. I hate taste, I like a full meal. "P I hope more chapters are to follow.

i think that you should continue. It's a little short, but bsides that, its good.

i think that you should continue. It's a little short, but bsides that, its good.

i love it so far! cant wait for ye to update! i rain smiles apon u! he he sorry... smiles brea

I think it has great potential. I can't wait for the rest of it.

totally continue!
This sounds really good. Just please make kagome a strong character in this fic. Dont make her submit. Make her show sesshy who is boss!

You should so keep going I can tell this is going to be good.

woah......I think I will be mad if you don't continue......no....I KNOW I WILL BE MAD!!!!!

after he mates her she should go through the well{and may be somehow bring her friends} and stay in the future but Sess should be looking for her in the future and mad.....reallyreallymad

meanwhile while her friends adjust to the modern era she should start college and find out she's pregnant......

I don't know why but I always love the stories where Kag runs from Sess and he's looking for her in the modern era......yes...I KNOW I"M WIERD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

please update soon!!!!!!!!!!!

heck yes! continue wthe fic. you got my interest peaked!

interesting......lets see where it goes...

this story has SO much potential!! juss the beginning was AMAZING!! im dying to know the rest!! it wud be a shame for you to not continue..so pwez...CONTINUE!! =)

P.S. can not WAIT for the lemons =)...yes, i noe, im a hentai

YES, HELL YES. Please pretty please continue.

It was great though I dont have any ideas for the next chapter sorry but I just hope its a little longer than this one I would really appreciate it !

Continue it

I love this. I'm excited to see where it is going! Update soon!

Sounds pretty good. I would like to know what happens next.

-River

The concept is intriguing, and I hope you decide to go with it. I've put it on my list of WIPs to watch.

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Hell yes! I really would like to read more! Don't suppose you could email me when you update again, hmm?

Thank you and ... what a hell of a good start!