its a little different but COOL!!!!!!!!!!!

its so cool!!

so far so good. please update soon.

You need to check your spelling....ALOT. Also longer chapters would be nice

Looks interesting but there is one thing that would make it even better......NOT HAVING A BLOCK THAT"S AN EXCUSE FOR A PARAGRAPH!!!!!!!!!!!

Trust me that turns alot of people off of reading a story.....I mean you keep having to find what sentence you last read and everything.....

But please update soon!!!!!!! especially if the next chappy is spaced out more....