| nnnnnnnnnnniiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiicccccccccceeeeeeeeee!hurry and update!
clock-winder- Sat 17 Feb 2007
| UPDATE! UPDATE! PLEASE.......
rowdygirl- Sat 10 Feb 2007
| i like your story. it's a little choppy and you've made some grammatical errors, but it's a good start on the story and English grammar is illogical. i still have to recite all the little rules i learned at my mother's knee, like "I before E except after C." And then there's "too, two and to" and "their, there and they're." Don't forget "no and know" or, in American slang, "ho" for whore. i do a lot of proofing where i work and i am amazed at how even college graduates have trouble writing coherent sentences. CPAs are the worst. so get yourself a beta reader and pursue your storyline, i think this is a good start to a good story.
Megan Consoer- Thu 08 Feb 2007
| I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
arzu- Wed 07 Feb 2007
| It's alright......lacking alot in substance and plot though....
bluemoon_175- Wed 07 Feb 2007
| I can't wait to read more so I hope you update asap please. And keep up the job well done.
Kat101- Wed 07 Feb 2007
| Why did Kag's sound so MeAN!!! she's a model isnt she suppose to be pretty? And the guy seemed so srry.NOT ONE OF MY FAVES AT ALL tone donwn kag's a bit
Critic_At_Work- Tue 06 Feb 2007
| Well, in reply to Clover_babe: You tell this author to work on grammar, but yours isn't very good either. Back to the review, do you always call Kagome 'Mrs. Higurashi' when she's not married?
SpongeGirl101- Tue 06 Feb 2007
| Love it!
SpongeGirl101- Tue 06 Feb 2007
| Love it love it love it love it! Please UPDAATE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Lovely- Tue 06 Feb 2007
| i love this fic so far so please continue to update
Tricia- Tue 06 Feb 2007
| Good story so far you might wanna CYA by putting in a disclaimer for Victoria's Secret jutst to be on the safe side. Looking forward to reading the next chappy.
Sess's Gal- Tue 06 Feb 2007
| The story is awsome! Keep up the good work and your grammer is getting better too!
clover_babe- Mon 05 Feb 2007
like it!
i think Kagome as a model is totally awesum. Victoria Secret even better!
that only thing that you need to work on is your grammar.
but other than that good job!
clover_babe- Mon 05 Feb 2007
like it!
i think Kagome as a model is totally awesum. Victoria Secret even better!
that only thing that you need to work on is your grammar.
but other than that good job!
| I really like it please update soon!!
kinto- Mon 05 Feb 2007
| Hmm, not bad, but I can't really much...so that means you HAVE to update! But untill now the story is flowing along nicely, not many grammer mistakes....keep up with that!
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