Reviews for Who?! by Black Wings

black moon inu- Wed 14 Feb 2007
I'm a little confused but thats ok. keep up the writen and post soon.

karmen- Wed 14 Feb 2007
you should also put a disclaimer on the anime ur getting the whole story line from...Sukisyo/Sukisho
it's a cool story plot and i'd love to see how a kag/sess story would play out like that but really you can't take all the credit for the story plot if ur using the whole story lines from Sukisyo.

karmen- Wed 14 Feb 2007
you should also put a disclaimer on the anime ur getting the whole story line from...Sukisyo/Sukisho
it's a cool story plot and i'd love to see how a kag/sess story would play out like that but really you can't take all the credit for the story plot if ur using the whole story lines from Sukisyo.

Hazel- Tue 30 Jan 2007
I remember now. This is from the Anime show where this 2 gay dudes have 2 sides to them. Man but this is going to be better. It's a girl not a boy this time. ad soon!

KillingMeTenderly- Mon 29 Jan 2007
Ohhhhhhh, I know this anime!!! It's called Sukisyo, right. I'm in love with the opening song ^_^ Great gob I like the fanfic ceep writing!

ger- Sun 28 Jan 2007
I saw the show forgot what it is called but it works better with two boys and makes more since.(I can not speel!)

Sesshoummaru's Fiend- Sun 28 Jan 2007
oooh....multiple personality disorder, methinks...well it sounds like it...i only have one semester of physcolohy to go by on my diagnosis...i hope i'm on the right course...

great job with that chapter...

excellent spelling...

...i just have one piece of advice...you don't have to follow it...it just makes life slightly easier...

when you are changing who is talking, can you make it into a different paragraph so that we know who is speaking...

Example...

"Kagome? Who's Kagome? I thought her name was 'Ai'." Sesshoumaru asked, pure confusion danced across is godly face.

"Ai? Well, whatever! Let's hop to it!" Miroku cried joyfully and started to make huge gestures toward the door, emphasizing their lateness for class.

Like that...see?

Just a suggestion...

Keep up the great work and i hope you will update soon...

-Ashley

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