please write more please

you are mean why did you finish it there? well it is good so far!

Jane, vamp

you got to review tell me when you will reply to darkbaby46@sbcglobal.net plz

WHY DID U LEFT US CLINGING???????

i like this story. the grammar needs some work but i like where its going. its strange reading about naraku and him not being a bad guy. and kagome being a spider demon, nice touch. i thought their dad was dead though. oh well, is sesshoumaru gonna stay faithful or is he gonna slip?? maybe inuyasha is gonna trick him or something good like that. cant wait to find out. please remember that constructive critisism is a writers best friend. we just want to help. please continue with this.
tilayha

i thought there dad was dead

Yes, I'm only into the 2nd or maybe this is the 3rd ch., I'm not really sure right now ^__^. Anyways I felt that this really needed to be addressed and I hope that I don't upset you, for that is not my desire.

Truly I like this story but I'm sorry it just has no spice to it, no verity in the sentence structure. try starting the sentence with other words other then a 'name', 'he' or 'she'. The only sentences that did not start that way, were the once that the characters talked. It just doesn't make for eloquent reading. you can mix it up, the noun doesn't always have to come 1st in a sentence. If you always start a sentence the same way it makes the story so blaze.

To make a story more interesting, is to find different ways of stating or expressing an ordinary idea. The difference between a good writer and some hack off the street is they're vocabulary.and, as my good friend would say, their grammar. Which your grammar is good, it just needs tweaking to be more charismatic.

I hope this didn't seam to harsh, I'm not telling you to stop writing because I am enjoy your story. I just really wanted to give you some pointers on how to write with a little more finesse. You have good ideas and a nice story line going on, it just needs a little seasoning.

Go for the gold and NEVER give up!
Leira ^.~

P. S.
A writer's best friends are a Dictionary and a Thesaurus. The site at the bottom of the page has both. I love it when I'm writing a paper for school! It helps me a lot!

different ways to say, said = told, verbalized, announced, spoke, uttered, voiced, stated.
Using a wider vocabulary is half the battle.

Dictionary.com

or copy and past : http://dictionary.reference.com/

lmao I found the ending, 'Reacquainted' really funny. It tickled me so. As always wonderful chapter! ^__^

-KB

PLZ write a yummy lemon in the next chapter......?!!!!!!!

WOW!! U HAVEN'T UPDATED IN A LONG WHILE!!

soooo good :) please update again soon :) i really loved this :) thanks for updating :)

Awesome story and for once Naraku isn't the bad guy. That sometimes doesn't seem like such a bad thing

Can Kagome PLZ have MORE THAN ONE baby at once?!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! OH and can she plz be pregnant NOW?!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Nice chapter. I'm glad you had updated. Update soon k?

-River

I vote that the reason her eye's changed........... was because she was going into heat.............

more more more i love it so wonderfull is there more to this cant wait till the sequel comes out

Great story! I think Kags is pregnant already and dosen't know it yet. ;) Update gain soon.
Thank you.

hmmm... that was kinda short but good :) maybe Kagome is a demoness! her eyes did go red after all.... no wait! she is.... silly me lol she's a spider demoness lol need some help with the next chapter?.... just reply and i'll help :) i'm very good at coming up with ideas just ask me k?

I Love The Stori ... Its Hella Funny How Everybody Sleeps With Everybody And How Surprized They R Wen They Find Out These Things.

Update soon please! I like this side of Sesshy...Naraku sounds sweet tho he's a player.

-Dani,

lol rofl!!!!!
lets say that your brother's were sisters’, they would be considered whores wouldn’t they?" Inutashio told Rin.
"I'm not like them." Rin told him.
"I know that, now answer the question." Inutashio told her.
"Ok fine. My sister's are whores." Rin told him.

lol sooooooooo funny :D lol

wow :) like all your story's this is great :) i hope you haven't forgotten!!!1!! its been a long time! well update soon k?

Great story so far. I just started reading this and found you haven't updated sine 10/14/06. I'm heart broken. :( Will you ever update or finish the story? It is hilarious and different. Please update soon. :)

This is good when is the next one coming?

Wow!! Sesshoamru gets good deals! lol

Tis cahpter was great, kepp up the hood work.
Update ASAP!!
Later,
Kambri_Jade

Awesome chappie!!! PLZ update soon!!!!!

ooooooo i like this story to i can't wait to see if he stay's in love with her or not :) i can't wait :) till u update :)

I love this fic and i cant wait till the next chapter comes out. please email me when it does i want to read it right away.

Laura

Great chapter! update soon!

love your story i hope you update soon.

Great chapter!! Sesshomaru finally told kagome that he loved her. How cute, i've been waiting for that. Any ways I'm lovin it! keep it up and update ASAP!!
Later,
Kambri_Jade

Lemon! Lemon! Lemon! Please update the lemon soon!!!!! XD XD XD

hi-
very very good chapter...I was laughing when everyone was declaring that sesshy and Inuyasha couldn't get pregnant....I mean that's like a given.....and kikyo a virgin???? '.........'

please update soon.

silk_worm

Sesshomaru thought about that for a minute, "You can have your drugs." He told her.
Raine: “I knew that you would see it my way.” Kagome said to him with a smile on her face.

Q: Who is Raine?????This is S/K fic plss adment it

Another great chapter! Sesshomaru is so cute ,in a very over pretective brother type way, towards Rin. ( I cant wait till Kagome gets pregnant! ) Anyways Love it! Update ASAP!!
Later,
Kambri_Jade

sooo goood, UPDATE ALREADY!!!

very very very very very very very very very very very very cool!!!!!!!
i love it!!!! =)

Wow. Just wow. That's a really good start for the story. I can't wait to see what happens. ^_^ I hope they both get a happy ending. Update soon!! I'm addicted!!

~Lady K

OH soooo AWESOME [duh!]

Great fanfic!!! Can't wait for the next chappie!!!! :D

ha-ha!! over protective Sesshomaru!! so cute..... please update soon, this fic is great!!

ja!!

Silk_worm

Amazing...he said he loved her, and I wonder if this means he won't let her go? He didn't have to stop datign but he did, so does this mean he sees her as more than just a lay?

alexa

Oh my!!! This is amazing!! I want you to keep updating please.
Uff....do you happen to know where can I get a friend like Sesshoumaru? -hahaha-

;P

-Kanz

hi- totally love your story you must update soon!!

ja!

Silk_worm

Love your story can't wait to read more, so I hope you UPDATE as SOON as you can.

OMG! You have to update ASAP! i like the whole protctiveness of it all, between naraku and Sesshomaru, its cute! so yea, UPDATE!!,
Kambri_Jade

Does that means she wants a baby? Her behavior is kind of whorey. Update soon!

*chuckles**giggles**full out cackle*
I WAS RIGHT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
*insane laughter follows*

PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I love the plot. I can't wait for an update.

Ja ne

What's the problem....she wants a kid before she turns 27 and she knows that Sess will be a good father??
That would be very interesting.
Please UPDATE THIS STORY VERY VERY VERY SOON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

hmm sweet revenge for kagome she gets sake (alcohol) and sess gets drunk and confess's his love to her but she doesn't no how to take it so her mind shuts down lol naraku finds out and the ball gets rolling i'd bet if it went that way and you had many cliffies u'd be on top with a really good fic in the palm of u'r hands lol i no who i'm voting for 2007 ^^ u keep up the good work k!!

not a bad start. this could be interesting. write more then I shall decide =)

Your story sounds really fantastic and I can't wait to read more so I hope you UPDATE ASAP PLEASE. :^)