Reviews for What hurts the most by Killing Perfection
FallenAngelKagome- Thu 30 Nov 2006
I love it I love it I apsolutely love it
MS Cascata- Sun 20 Aug 2006
It's a good start...
Next time try adding more story around the song. What you ultimately lacked was atmosphere.
A one-shot, especially a song fic one-shot, is based primarily around emotion - which turns the song into a sort of explanitory essence.
The goal is to create a scene based solely on emotion, build physical motion around it, and spread a song sparsely throughout it to walk the reader through the emotional rollercoaster.
You have a very nice idea, and you did portray it well. Just, add the atmosphere next time.
Else, this was an excellent one-shot.
Mata, ne
Next time try adding more story around the song. What you ultimately lacked was atmosphere.
A one-shot, especially a song fic one-shot, is based primarily around emotion - which turns the song into a sort of explanitory essence.
The goal is to create a scene based solely on emotion, build physical motion around it, and spread a song sparsely throughout it to walk the reader through the emotional rollercoaster.
You have a very nice idea, and you did portray it well. Just, add the atmosphere next time.
Else, this was an excellent one-shot.
Mata, ne
Silk_Worm- Sat 19 Aug 2006
great one-shot!! kinda short... I almost thought that he was going to leave her!!!!
Ja!
Silk_worm
Ja!
Silk_worm