I would like the mention ... the Japanese sentences were totally wrong. Didn't make sense at all, and using wrong words and no grammar. Please don't use a language when you have no idea about anything about that language? This is not meant as a flame, but a very serious suggestion. Otherwise, the story is actually written pretty well, though there is not much of a plot, and Inuyasha is entirely OOC. Also, please do you use "gay" in a derogatory sense. It offends some people (like me), because your ending obvious do not like other endings of the same gender. Why do you have the use that word to express something anyway? It doesn't express anything.

Iliked it....It was pretty sad though...almost made me want ot cry....I really wish it had been longer though., but all in all....WELL DONE!