Now, I love the concept and plot of it all. But it's very hard to follow. I know this may sound like a flame review but it's not, it's a helpful tip.
It seems as though you type way too fast and miss many spelling errors. I suggest getting Beta. They will catch the spelling and grammar errors you yourself have missed.
Maybe have italics on the characters thoughts, that way we can distinguish thoughts and actions. It'd be a easier read for us.
Again. Try looking over the chapters and fix the spelling/grammar errors in the story. It'd be much better.
Other than that it's a very interesting story.
serasvictoria666- Sun 01 Jul 2007
So good! I definitely liked it. XD
RIZ- Fri 22 Jun 2007
its nice pls. finish it....really really really nice
jance- Wed 06 Jun 2007
| please update soon
Arielle langley- Sat 26 May 2007
| Um how do i put this finish this story or else! Lol im just messin with u. Seriously though i love the story!;-)
Lady Selene- Thu 24 May 2007
| Awesome job on this story!!! Please keep writing more chapters! I don't know how many times I sucked in my breath thinking that Kags and Sesshoumaru would get caught, and now that her brother knows its going to be even more intersting on whats going to happen!!
| Wow I love this story you have to update asap. I love the way you describe everything and it looks like you put a lot of work and effort into it. hop to see more chapters asap. Can't wait.
Toshio- Fri 18 May 2007
| OMG!!!!! YOU CAN'T JUST LEAVE IT THERE NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! lol this is a great story so far I can't wait to read more so UPDATE SOON!!
| love this fanfic you should finish this.
inugirl31- Sun 15 Apr 2007
| I love your story and I cant wate to read another chapter soon. Plase make another one soon
Jkikki- Thu 12 Apr 2007
that story is really cool it be great if u wrote more
leaushinta- Tue 26 Dec 2006
well hello, iv'e found your fanfic really good
pls keep up the good work
i just want to ask if Sesshomaru will take kagome as his wife
thank you
chelsea- Thu 21 Dec 2006
| I love your story pleace update soon it is so good.
Jenna- Thu 21 Dec 2006
| Can't wait until you update again. So far the story is pretty good and I can't wait to find out what happens to Kagome and Sesshomaru. Keep up the great work!!
Kasonsama- Mon 18 Dec 2006
| OoO Holly SHIT!!!! i love this fucking story!!!! PLEASE Keep up the long chapters!!! i like them...=D
UPDARE soon! This is so cool! And you are right, girls like Kikyo r sluts. Sex can be a beautiful act of love or mutual feelings but to just do it like that! With so many guys is just sickening. This slut in my school had herpes on the lips [apart from down there from givign head] and she passed to all the other guys she kissed. It looked like this puss filled blister but she still kissed people! EWWWWW.....
That's why we must be careful of the guys we accept.
-Dani.
bob- Sun 17 Dec 2006
| Wow, you blow me away! I love it so much i decided to read again and again! Update please!
....- Sun 17 Dec 2006
It's DAVINCI! DAvinci. And I wouldn't be impressed if a high school student read the Davinci code because it's a startling piece of dreck. I'd be surprised if they were reading Marcel Proust or Franz Kafka. Because those books are actually HARD to read and in different languages.
If she was reading Proust in the original French, holy shit I'd be impressed. I'd just be saddened if she were reading the Davinci Code, which is not in any way considered an intellictual book by actual intellctuals.
OMG OMG OMG!!! Thank you sooooo much for updating...and 6 chapters at once. I love you. Lol. I haven't read them yet, but when I saw it up I flipped. *woot*
~Lady K
| Update soon?!
Dark- Tue 24 Oct 2006
| pretty good story i like it you should up date... though i did notice that some of your sentences seemed to be missing words....
| I'm so loving this story. Kagome must be so confused getting mixed messages and all from her teacher no less. Sesshomaru needs to step up and tell her how he feels. Well can't wait to see wat happens next, please update soon!
elsy- Tue 17 Oct 2006
| hey whats up i beg you to please update as soon as possible. I love the story and wow!!!!
Kumi- Sun 15 Oct 2006
| Good story, the grammar needs to be improved and the sentencing structure.
*eeeep* OMG!!! Your story is amazing!! Please update soon. And I really hope that you finish this story. I can't wait to see what's next!! I'm addicted!!
~Lady K
rawr- Sat 09 Sep 2006
| umm..Good Story! but the spelling is...umm..crappy?......oh no i REALLY like the story plot on this thingers. but yeah..spelling is baaaaaad... update! :P
| OMG! I wanna find out how this is going to turn out. Please please please update soon!!!!! ^.^ I was going to cry when i read the first chapter... So sad.... Thought I still wanna read more!!! It's really good. Can't wait to read more!!!!! =^.^=
becky bystrak- Sun 23 Jul 2006
| i love this story please do continue the story its good s far u need to add some more chapters and maybe a lemon seen between kagome and sesshomaru
| I love this Fanfic please keep going its a great story really I can't wait for you to put up the next chapter
Kags21- Fri 21 Jul 2006
| Ok I need to know who is Mr.Turner, please tell me
Kags21- Fri 21 Jul 2006
| Poor Kagome I feel so sorry for her , I hope Sess tells her how he feels soon
rhonda34- Fri 21 Jul 2006
| will they ever get to together i hope they do.please update soon asps
it is an awesome story! plz write more!
~DemonGirl14~
elly19- Sun 09 Jul 2006
| your stoy is so good. It's different from other teacher/student stories I read so far. It's so cute! Can't wait until the next chapter!!
darkest_b4_dawn- Sun 09 Jul 2006
| love the new chapter. update soon
Valire18- Sun 09 Jul 2006
I like your story. But I just need to know where did you get this line from. "You looked very beautiful tonight. Soon you’ll have boys lining up to be with youâ€Â
“Your just saying that, because you’re my teacher.†She told him “Actually I shouldn’t be saying it, because I am your teacher.†He told her.
I'm driving insane trying to finger out where I heard it from. Was it a movie or television show. Was it Dawson's Creek or Save by the bell. Please tell me cause i"ll be thinking about forever. But I love your story keep up the good work.
tricia- Sat 08 Jul 2006
| Man I was gonna review so many times to tell you how good your story is but life has been busy.....moving sux. Anywhom great chappy can't wait to read more
mitch- Sat 08 Jul 2006
| i lov the story,can't wait till the next ch.!!^.^keep writing!
rhonda34- Sat 08 Jul 2006
| please update soon. this is getting to good not to update
rhonda34- Sat 08 Jul 2006
| please update soon. this is getting to good not to update
| Loved it update soon.
Kanela- Tue 04 Jul 2006
| OH! Update plz! It's awesome!!
| This was very good. I can't wait for the next chapter update soon
| I really love your story. I love it and hope that you update soon and if you do please drop me line to let me know. There are spelling errors and you should look out for them.
unknown- Sun 02 Jul 2006
| Please update soon! I have quite an interest in this story of yours.
| I like this story alot plzz update soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
darkest_b4_dawn- Fri 30 Jun 2006
| Wow i loved the update. Still need a bit of work on the grammer stuff but everything else is wonderful. I would like to ask you not to let too much happen between kagome and Sesshomaru when he spends the night. The most I would want to happen was them sleeping in the same bed nothing more. love your story hope you update soon.
| Wow, this story is great. I can't wait for the next chapter. You just need to proof-read your work but besides that, it is great. Write more soon.
devious fox- Fri 30 Jun 2006
| WRITE MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! PLLLLLLLEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAASSSSSSSSSSSEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
gothic_xXx_moon- Fri 30 Jun 2006
| please do more chapters
kagsbigfan- Fri 30 Jun 2006
| i can't wait for the next chapterso update soon!
| Thisis really good, i love it, I can't wait to see how things turn out at the sleep over.
rhonda34- Fri 30 Jun 2006
| please update soon. i love to see what next
rhonda34- Fri 30 Jun 2006
| please update soon. i love to see what next
feisonna- Fri 30 Jun 2006
| This is looking really good so far. :) The only suggestion I would make is that you should be more carefull about spell checking. But it's great and I can't wait to read more!
rhonda34- Fri 30 Jun 2006
| please update soon. this story to good not to read
rhonda34- Fri 30 Jun 2006
| please update soon. this story to good not to read
| Nice! Keep up the good work. You might wann try proof reading before you post. *don't hit me* Good job on the bitch Kikyo. I hate her a lot. Cant wait for the next chapter.
led me down- Thu 29 Jun 2006
| cool fanfic! plz update soon.
rhonda34- Tue 27 Jun 2006
| please update soon. i got to see what going to happen
darkest_b4_dawn- Tue 27 Jun 2006
| oh my god I love this story. the character profiles are perfict and things arn't happening too fast. You have a few grammer errors but nothing a bata reader can't fix. I'd be more than happy to help.
bluemoon_175- Tue 27 Jun 2006
| Your story is really good, that I'm at lost for words. I hope you keep up the good work, hope you UPDATE ASAP PLEASE ! ! ! PLEASE ! ! ! PLEASE ! ! ! : ^ )
Midnight_Goddess- Tue 27 Jun 2006
| What can i say everything about this story struck me as wonderful. I can't wait untill you post the next chapter up. The plot line was wonderful I like how each character has a different personality. your a wonderful author and i look foward to reading more
unknown- Sun 25 Jun 2006
| hey I really like this please update pretty please very soon!
howling night- Fri 23 Jun 2006
| MORE!! MORE!! MORE!! MORE!! MORE!! MORE!! MORE!!! MORE!!!!!! PEASE!!!!!!!! PLEASE!!!!!!!!! PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! with a cherry on top!
Kags21- Thu 22 Jun 2006
| I like it, very good I hope tto read more chapters.
rhonda34- Thu 22 Jun 2006
| please update soon becuase love this story. i love the teacher and student story i just it get complete. i read some of theys never get complete
rhonda34- Thu 22 Jun 2006
| please update soon becuase love this story. i love the teacher and student story i just it get complete. i read some of theys never get complete
Sasha- Thu 22 Jun 2006
| I like it but you know what i think? I think you should let Sango Give/force Kagome to get a make-over but with the exception of make-up
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