Erynn- Sat 29 Mar 2008
This is a very interesting story. I enjoyed reading it for the plot. However, the various spelling and grammar errors distracted me sometimes from the wonderful plot. I think you've got wonderful potential and if you do write a sequel, which I see you have done (congratulations by the way on doing one!), I strongly recommend a beta reader to help bring your stories to their utmost potential. You really do have awesome story ideas. :)

Hope to read more from you.
~E

Silarial- Sun 10 Feb 2008
SEQUAL, SEQUAL, SEQUAL!!!!!

adriana magalhaes- Sat 17 Nov 2007
that person who sent you that is a relly mis. la 'bicht'!!!!! that is what everybody callls a sub at my school she is horrible!!!!!! ja ne!!!!!!!!!!!!!

KagomeHime- Mon 22 Oct 2007
i wanna sequel pls.
^_^

Denisse- Mon 22 Oct 2007
hi well i actually want to tell u i finished reading your story and i really like it but i really want to know what happens between S&K and i whant to encourage u to write a sequel because i really like your stories and i love ur storys i hope u keep writing

Megan Consoer- Thu 13 Sep 2007
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters? Please write a sequel to this story please?

Alissa- Tue 04 Sep 2007
Please, please, please write a sequal, even if its just a one-shot sequal! I loved the story.

annie- Thu 19 Jul 2007
can you please make a sequal??

Magz- Sun 15 Jul 2007
i love this story so much!! please write a sequel!!

lover- Thu 24 May 2007
wow i can not whate till you wright the sequle to it there will be a sequel to the stroy right?? please you have to wright a sequal i whant to know if kas and sess get together

inugirl31- Wed 16 May 2007
I love this story and I really would like you to write a sequal on your story.

Li- Wed 09 May 2007
Aha, i knew you were filipino!! yay, may kilala akong pinoy na writter sa single spark!! heheh, from which part of the philippines, if you don't mind me askin'?

oops, heheh, sowi, forgot this was a review, luv the story, but it kinda ended as a cliffy of some sort, and would really, really, really appreciate it if you would write a sequel, and from the reviews i've read, so will most of your readers ^_^

i'm sorry to hear about your family, i can relate to your stress and hope everything works out ok and stays that way!

if not, well, if your somewhere in the U.S, preferably New Jersey, look me up and we'll think of something to lift your spirits ^_^

i also read what yukino said and i think that maybe she just wants to help you but hasn't gained enough good manners or sense to put it politely,,, that's just insensitively bitchy

sigh, as we say in the phil, kahanginan n lang yan! i hope you don't take offense in what i said and support your work to the fullest!

hope that you can write a sequel soon ^_^ take care!!!

inugirl31- Sun 06 May 2007
I love this story and I really think that you ned to write a sequal so that we really know how the story will end.

Megan Consoer- Mon 30 Apr 2007
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters? Or can you write a sequel to this story please?

STARTER RIDE- Sat 21 Apr 2007
whoever flamed you should come meet my fist...its all shiny with knuckelbusters and allll these spiky rings *blinks innocently* lol i love your story


Tsuykomi- Fri 16 Feb 2007
SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Never-Here-4-Me- Sat 27 Jan 2007
You should definetly do a sequel. It would so fit!

Sesskag4evr- Sun 21 Jan 2007
Please write a sequel!! This chapter was great!

Priah- Fri 19 Jan 2007
OMG, I loved it. yeah there were spelling mistakes but who cares with a story like that. I SO WANT A SEQUEL!!!!! Please? Please? Please? I want to know if kagome and Sessho get back together. Please?

Mizu- Mon 15 Jan 2007
PLEASE RIGHT A SEQUAL!!!! I NEED A SEQUAL!!!!! I HAVE TO KNOW IF THEY GET BACK TOGETHER!!!!! I WANT TO SEE KAGURA GETTING HER ASS BEAT BY KAGOME!!!!!!!! SO PLEASE MAKE ANOTHER ONE!!!!!!!!!!!!

Thanks,
Mizu

Cuddles 4 Sesshomaru- Mon 08 Jan 2007
OMG I WANT A SEQUEL!!!!! DAMNIT I WANT ONE!!!!!!!!!

SesshomaruCrazy- Mon 08 Jan 2007
OMG.. What an ending..
You have to write a sequel plz plz..
I would like to see them get together or at least have Sesshomaru have a look at his children..
Oh well thats my thoughts..
But it was a great story to read i enjoyed it and can't wait to read more..
Take Care
Mari

Brandie- Mon 08 Jan 2007
I really liked this story and would like to have a sequal to find out if sesshomaru and kagome meet again and if they get together.

Karen- Sat 06 Jan 2007
OMG I WANT MORE SHE HAS GOT TO GET BACK WITH SESSHY OMFG PLEASE IM BEGGING YOU SHE HAS TO GET BACK WITH HIM I MEAN THATS THE WHOLE POINT OF THE STORY RIGHT? TO END UP TOGETHER????? WELL THEY AINT TOGETHER SO THE STORY ISNT OVER SO PUT MORE UP GOD DAMN IT JA-NE

Moonlight Goddess- Sat 06 Jan 2007
COOL

U should definatley write a sequel. I'm positive it would be most welcome amoung the ASS fans! Like I said before, MORE KAGURA ASS-KICKING!!!!! Can't Wait!!!!!

Ja-ne!!

Moonlight Goddess

Misfortune'sGoddess- Sat 06 Jan 2007
very nice i enjoyed this story very much i hope you write a sequle i came upon it when I was on fanfiction.net and now I have an account here good bye

~Misfortune'sGoddess

Ashely Peoples- Fri 05 Jan 2007
U need to keep going

kagsesskyo- Fri 05 Jan 2007
That was an awesome ending! Please write a sequel, I want to find ot why InuTashio is at Kagome's office!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Raka- Fri 05 Jan 2007
BEst fanfic ever .... Please sequal, You write good

becky bystrak- Fri 05 Jan 2007
i would luv for you to write a sequal, the story was good.also i would luv to know if sess and kags get back together

Rong Rong- Fri 05 Jan 2007
I love your fanfic you have a wonderful style of writing da'ling
P.S. If you write a sequel we, your fans, can't wait^^

REDWOLF- Fri 05 Jan 2007
I hope U decide to write a sequel because so much is unanswer and another thing I can't believe Sesshoumaru gave up that easy after finding out she was pregnant, I guess he must not of really loved her..sad!
REDWOLF

BitterSweet- Fri 05 Jan 2007
I am truly glad that you finished this story. yeah I would be one of the people that would like you to continue with a sequel but I don't ususally read sequels that continue with their kids. Anyhow I hope things look up for you. Take care and Blessed Be

Jacques- Fri 05 Jan 2007
I would be very pleased if you were to write a sequal,and if you didnt very unsure and questionable.

swtdrm01- Fri 05 Jan 2007
Yes, please write a sequel. I loved your story and I believe there's lots room for a sequel.

bluemoon_175- Fri 05 Jan 2007
This story was so fantastic you have just got to write a sequal, I really hope you start on it soon. Well can't wait to read more of your stories.

Lady Of The Night- Fri 05 Jan 2007
U MUST WRITE A SEQUEL ... KAGOME AND SESSHOMARU ARENT REALLY TOGETHER YET!

Anonymous- Fri 05 Jan 2007
liked the story but it has a crappy epilogue. epilogues are suppossed to be good. if you're gonna write a sequel, i hope you have someone to help you.

Anonymous- Fri 05 Jan 2007
liked the story but it has a crappy epilogue. epilogues are suppossed to be good. if you're gonna write a sequel, i hope you have someone to help you.

Anonymous- Fri 05 Jan 2007
liked the story but it has a crappy epilogue. epilogues are suppossed to be good. if you're gonna write a sequel, i hope you have someone to help you.

Sesshy's angel18- Fri 05 Jan 2007
This story was great you should write a seqeul.

Sesshoumaru's Fiend- Wed 03 Jan 2007
Stupid me reviewed ur A/N and not the chapter...DUH!!..

awww...this is so sad!!!!!!!!

i wanted Sesshoumaru and Kagome to be together...but...o well.....

its still a great story!!

whatever you chose to write will be fine....

please post the epilogue soon!!!

thanks!!

-Luvs,
Ashley!

Sesshoumaru's Fiend- Wed 03 Jan 2007
WooT!

You Rock!

You have more friggin balls than anyone I know right now! power to you!

i don't know if i listed anything with ur story (i really like this story, so i don't think so)......if i did...i'm sorry...

DUDE! You know what!? we should totally make a little club thing!!....hmmm...a name...we need a name......*paces*....how about......

....

hmmm....

well my creative light bulb is burnt out but i'll think of one later....

i know what you mean (not exactly to the note but i get your frustration) .... for me...its more demands really than flames....but it does get irritating to be told that you have typos...i no i do people! trust me....

i have this weird memory thing where i forget to send things to my beta...ya....it sucks...o well!!....

please update again as soon as you can! this story kicks friggin ass!!!

Sayonara! and keep on writing!!

-Luvs,
Ashley!

Megan Consoer- Sat 30 Dec 2006
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters? Does he found out he got her pregnet?

FlyingDamnSquirel- Sat 30 Dec 2006
i'm really glad that you decided to finish up your story. i'm not going to say i pity you or understand what your feeling and going through(problems) because i don't, but i hope, coming from a fan, that you feel better.... ^-^

Moonlight Goddess- Sat 30 Dec 2006
WTF????

Is tis the end????? i wanted to see some more Kagura ass-kicking!! Wat bout the pup??? u no, u should write a sequel. FF ends kinda weird. aniiway, cant wait for the epilogue !!!!

Moonlight Goddess

Moonlight Goddess- Sat 30 Dec 2006
WTF????

frozen_angel- Sat 30 Dec 2006
I'ts over! *cries* You should make a sequel! But only if you want to! *hopes you do* I really enjpyed reading your storie I hope you keep writing!

peace love and dog food!
fa

Brandi- Sat 30 Dec 2006
im glad to that you found me to be 'respectful'...i looked through ur reviews and i saw what that other girl had written to you...i dont know if it was my sick and VERY twisted sense of humor or what...but i honestly found it hilarious!!!! that someone could be so blatently rude and do it more then once...its laughable!!! i also wanted to comment on the way u ended ur fanfic...as im sure many reviewers will agree....it was much to sudden. one minute they are having great sex and the next minute they arent speaking??? i think u need to explian more about why sesshoumaru is so in love with kagura...i also think u need more detail about the group. Sesshoumaru also cried!!!! WHAT!!!! he doesnt even have tear ducts...we all know this!!! IF AND ONLY IF u feel the need to make sesshoumaru cry there is only 2 times he may do so...NUMBER ONE -----> when rin dies
NUMBER TWO ---------------> when ur story is REALLY freakin long and u develop sesshoumarus complex charater the point where if he stripped naked and ran around tokyo....it would make sense(yes there are a few of these stories....)
its just way way to OOC for him, esp this early in the story....as far as im concerned ur story was just beg.!!!!
please reconsider this being the end of ur story.
-brandi

Kimmy-chan- Fri 29 Dec 2006
Hi, my name's KImberly. Kimmy-chan's a nickname. I loved your fanfic! It pulled my emotion strings. I kept thinking "Baka Sesshoumaru!" I almost cried at the end. Your a/n I totally get how pissed off you are. Family. Caring yet annoying. I get what your going through. But believe me I know worse. I hope everything gets better and you write the last chapter. And hope you write another fanfic. ;-)

gymweedl- Fri 29 Dec 2006
omg very good i cried myself this story is hellping me caus im having boy problems to so ya lol i want to cry but then again be strong lol anyways i loved it very good!!!

bluemoon_175- Fri 29 Dec 2006
I hope you really this about doing a sequel I know it'll be really fantastic to, and to keep up the good work.

Heather- Fri 29 Dec 2006
Hey
dude that ending sucks no offense or anything e the ficx isn't complete i'm assuming you have sumthing else going because ya know sesshomaru has to know about the kids and he can't end up with kagura YUCK!!!!

Lady Of The Night- Fri 29 Dec 2006
I Love It! I Love It! Brought Tears To My Eyes! Cant Wait For The Next Chapter Update Soon Otay ... Bye Bye!

Never-Here-4-Me- Fri 29 Dec 2006
Wow...that was an awesome chapter. Is this really the end?? Well yeah if its not then please update soon.

REDWOLF- Fri 29 Dec 2006
Oh my, R U really ending it here..sniff...snifff! This is so pitful. I can't help from crying! Well, I am not sure who made U so up set but know this, U R a wonderful writer and I just hope you continue. This is one of the best fics I have had the honest pleasure of reading!
Thank You,
REDWOLF

Bitter Sweet- Thu 28 Dec 2006
I can see what you're saying and i suppose I understand cause my life is a pain right now. Anyhoe I would hate for you to discontinue your story and if i was one of the reviewers that insulted you i am sorry that wasn't my intention. Take care and Blessed Be.

Kisnala- Thu 28 Dec 2006
Yukino a bit of advice for you, CHILL THE HELL OUT! if the story can be understood then it doesent matter, sure horrid grammar and spelling makes a story hard to read but this wonderfull authoress has done a beautiful job creating her story and in my ameture crtic oponion her grammar ans spelling isisnt even a millionith as bad as some stoies i have read, so get over yourself! aznangel, ur story is amazing, keep writing, and dont let a few flames from a complete idiot who doesent know the first thng about curtsey get you down, your story is one of the best plots ive seen for a while and i anciously look foreward to the next chapter. Be strong and iff you ever meet this yukino person online again, u have every right to virtu kick their ass!

Kisnala- Thu 28 Dec 2006
Yukino a bit of advice for you, CHILL THE HELL OUT! if the story can be understood then it doesent matter, sure horrid grammar and spelling makes a story hard to read but this wonderfull authoress has done a beautiful job creating her story and in my ameture crtic oponion her grammar ans spelling isisnt even a millionith as bad as some stoies i have read, so get over yourself! aznangel, ur story is amazing, keep writing, and dont let a few flames from a complete idiot who doesent know the first thng about curtsey get you down, your story is one of the best plots ive seen for a while and i anciously look foreward to the next chapter. Be strong and iff you ever meet this yukino person online again, u have every right to virtu kick their ass!

Kisnala- Thu 28 Dec 2006
Yukino a bit of advice for you, CHILL THE HELL OUT! if the story can be understood then it doesent matter, sure horrid grammar and spelling makes a story hard to read but this wonderfull authoress has done a beautiful job creating her story and in my ameture crtic oponion her grammar ans spelling isisnt even a millionith as bad as some stoies i have read, so get over yourself! aznangel, ur story is amazing, keep writing, and dont let a few flames from a complete idiot who doesent know the first thng about curtsey get you down, your story is one of the best plots ive seen for a while and i anciously look foreward to the next chapter. Be strong and iff you ever meet this yukino person online again, u have every right to virtu kick their ass!

Rosana- Wed 27 Dec 2006
Hey,
I was reading your story and it was indeed intersting.I hope everything works out for you. It seems you are having a rough time. I am not a member because I dont have the capacity to think of stories. I read your last chapter and I will pray that everything turns out all right. Pls dont give up on writing because you have a real talent. God Bless you. If you need someone to listen you can email me. Good Luck and take things one step at a time. Sometimes we try taking in too much and then we dont know how to get rid of anything. Again good luck!

Never-Here-4-Me- Wed 27 Dec 2006
I agree with you. If you do end the story then I won't blame you. That happened to me one time and I closed my story also. So yeah I hope everyong just stops with the flames. I love the story so far and it would be a shame if you stopped it. So yes if they stop wrighting flames then please update soon! (sorry about me rambling!)

Brandi- Wed 27 Dec 2006
im a pretty fair person...i can see when someone is in the wrong and when someone is just plain mean...i know u must be furious that someone would or could possibly tell you that u spelled something wrong or u have a few errors, hell, ur only human and i completely understand...but to cuss out a person who simply told u they disliked ur story and that u have too many spelling errors i do believe ur in the wrong.
i feel that if a person is brave enought to post their story online at a site like this then they should be brave enough to recieve a flame and deal with it...i mean im going to flat out tell u that there were quite a few spelling errors in ur story but its ok...i have been reading ff for long enough that i can just skim over them and get the general jist of the story...but some people are spelling nazi and thats ok too. i just think its a little crappy of u to be so close minded to someones criticism when u clearly asked for it when u posted this story, or any story for that matter.
im going to go out on a limb and recommed that u get a beta reader or someone that can give u a second opinon to chapters before u update them. im sure that would GREATLY improve any of ur spelling errors and it would make the readers happy...
i would hate to see ur story leave this site just because of something like a few spelling errors....i mean what fun is that, u cant make it this far and quit?! u have a good plot line going for you...but i encourage u to find urself a beta reader.
-brandi
p.s. i may be terrible with grammer but i could fix ur spelling errors for you if u would like...
p.p.s i insist u e-mail me if u find my comments offensive or unwelcome!!!!

gymweedl- Wed 27 Dec 2006
hey yukinoslut probably cant even do a story but hey i know exactly how you feel when it comes to family and all and yukino bitch if you read this shut the fuck up!!!!caus last time i checked this is her storey so all the shit that you said do us all a favor and shuv those up you fat ass!!!ok im done lol but if you want some more!!!!then bring it on!!!!!ok lol im done sorry tht pises me off tho anyways i love your story so please dont shut it down please she pobably wants you to do that dont let her do that to you screw her!!!shes a pussy but seriously i dont know you but i love you way to much becaus iv seen your talent she dont have that so dont worry about her and her lame shit move on and keep the story goin on man iv been dying to read the new chapters lol so kick her to the curd and keep on writing and if she hase more shit to say she can deal with me caus i got a demon that will send her runin lol ya im talking to you yukinoslut!!anyways remember meny people luv you and have your back and i give you my faith and love!!!oh and email me!!!

gouka chibi fujo- Wed 27 Dec 2006
please don't stop. I love this story already and need to know how it ends. i tend not to read imcomplete stories because some people don't finish them and then i get sad because i don't know how it end. but i read yours and like it. i think all of us authors has gotten flames. i don't like them too. so please don't stop writing i didn't

Moonlight Goddess- Wed 27 Dec 2006
LOL!!!

Sorrii but when i read ur A/N i was laughing soooooooooooooooooooo FUCKING hard!!! =P no offense, u just really got spunk. FUCK YUKINO. who the hell cares too much about the fucking grammer??
OOOOOOO before i forget, r u Japanese?? U mention ur uncle so just wondering.

But ani way, great FF so far. UPDATE SOON!!!!! ^_^

DeJanea M. Steward- Tue 26 Dec 2006
I would like to say that I am in love with your fanfiction. I luv it. I would also like to say please don't erase your fanfiction from this website. Ireallt like it and it wouldn't be fair to everyone else for all the other people who really admire your fanfiction because some asshole who can't even write a correct pargraph has nothing better to do than to criticize you about your fanfiction. Listen take froma person with experience I go to an all girl school with stupid bitches who have nothing better else to do but criticize someone else about something thats none of their business. Just because they do this does not mean I beat the shit out of them for no reason.(As long they don't try to put their hands on me or my family member were good). People are going to talk about you all your life whether its to your face or behind your back(I prefer to my face). You just have to deal with it the best way you can. I would also like to say that I am sorry about your family. I have family drama all the time. Most of the time I'm the one causing it. Just hang in there and fuck everyone with their damn opinion. You do you! Again please don't erase your fanfiction from this website ....please(puppy dog eyes). I hope you enjoy your holiday even with a little drama tossed in it.

Drayvin- Tue 26 Dec 2006
I like your story. And I know what it's like to get a flame that only disses with nothing helpful in it at all. I can't believe Sessh chose priggin' Kagura! *runs away sobbing*....*wanders back* He had better rectify this situation or help me kami-sama I will somehow travel to this alternate universe and castrate him.

Canis- Tue 26 Dec 2006
I enjoy your story very much. It is one of the ones that i like to look for. Screw that other person. We aren't pro-writers here. We are just trying to enjoy ourselves by writing and reading each others ideas. Its people like this that cause me to be too afraid to post any of my stories that fill the massive notebook I own. Good luck to you and keep writing. Don't forget that life can get better. Ciao

swtdrm01- Tue 26 Dec 2006
I'm sorry to hear about your family problems. I certainly understand the stress and sometimes we just have to let it out. In this case, you had every right to make your statement. Unfortunately, there will always be bad apples that mingle with the good ones. Ignore Yukino, your story is great and I don't care if there are typos or misused words because as far as I'm concerned if the message is clear, it matters not how the message was sent. You can write it backwards and if I understood it, then your job has been done. Not to mention that we are only human and we are definitely not perfect. My message to Yukino, you need to come down from whatever perfect world you have created in your mind and begin living within the reality that surrounds us. As far as I know, you are not and will never be above anybody and no one and I mean NO ONE has died and graciously bequeathed his or her throne to you. BTW - one good example of how imperfect you are is (MS.) is a customary title as a courtesy to both single and married women. People (yes living, breathing people, not imaginary) use it when it is not known if the woman is married, single, divorced, or widowed. You might want to look it up in the dictionary, if you do not believe. Next time you feel like putting in your two cents, please make sure you have the correct amount. Better yet, use those two cents to make it worthwhile and offer your intellectual gift to help this or any other author if the work is not up to par to your high standards.
Aznangel - I thank you for allowing us to read this beautiful story. It is an honor to read one of your creations. Please keep up your great work and I hope to be able to read the next chapter soon.

Shizen- Tue 26 Dec 2006
Hey there!

Well, I think that your story is wonderful. I can't wait for the next chapter to be up.
You had a good point in your author's note. This person seriously needs to get a good ass kicking. Maybe then they won't be so rude. Nothing wrong with helpful criticism you know, but thats just taking it a bit to far. Yeah there were some mistakes but I just figured you didn't notice it or something and even then, its kind of obvious what you were writing.

All in all, lovely story. Yukino is a major ASS.

zenfluence- Tue 26 Dec 2006
So, If you do ever find out "yukino:'s e-mail address send it to me. I want to beat some sense into that little shit. Its a fan-fiction site, not a publisher!

But I love your story, please dont stop it

~zen

tasha- Tue 26 Dec 2006
Well just letting you know that your story is great don't worry about what other people say about grammer and all that staff I understand its tuff and you can't get everything perfect just do your best which I assume you are doing now and your best is great I hopeeverything works out for you at home and for your family look forward to seeing the next chapter of the story but remember no pressure you and your family should come first no matter what good luck and have a good holiday
Tash

Valere- Tue 26 Dec 2006
You know its nice to know Yukino is so perfect she? has to make others miserable while the rest of the world strives to reach pefection its the challenge in getting there that makes it a worth the time.

Valere- Tue 26 Dec 2006
Its a great story and i can understand the family problems because something like that is happening with me. I hope it gets better soon and i hope you update soon as well.

Sesshy's Koi- Tue 26 Dec 2006
Screw Yukino or what ever their name is I think your story is great and I can't wait for you to update. I hope everything with your family turns out okay. F.Y.I. I should be updating my stories A Broken Soul and Blood Roses soon and I might be starting another fic sometime this week. But, I completely agree with you and would hate for you to shut down your story.

linjcon- Tue 26 Dec 2006
I sorry this happen to you. I think it's a really good story and can't wait to read more. Continue writing and don't let anyone stop you from doing what you enjoy. Blessed Holidays.

bluemoon_175- Tue 26 Dec 2006
Man I must say ~aznangel~ is right so what if people do mis a few words or not every one is perfect people is going to make mistakes. An if Yukino is so worred about spelling then why not write their own story, and quite cramming this story. I think ~aznangel~ has done a fatastic job on this story and I'm sure a lot of will say so to. So ~aznangel~ keep up the great work and I can't wait to read more so I hope you update as soon as you can. :^)

ScoobyPup01- Tue 26 Dec 2006
i don't know what everyone else is saying but so far, i like your fic, or rather......i love it.

Yukino- Mon 25 Dec 2006
In chapter 4:

1. Again with the mushi mushi thingy. I discussed this in my last review. Please refer to that.
2. Know the difference between these words: THEIR and THEY'RE. Use them accordingly.
3. Know the difference between these words: COMPLETION and COMPETITION.
4. Spell it as MA'AM not MAM.
5. You misspelled Ayame's name in this chapter.
6. Not TRAMA but TAMA.
7. Know the difference between FIGHT and RIGHT.
8. Know the difference between SENSE and SENSEI.
9. Know the difference between WARREN and WARN.
10 Know the difference between MADE and MAY.

Seriously, do get a beta reader so that you will improve. You have potential.

Yukino- Mon 25 Dec 2006
In chapter 3:
1. Kindly research these words: TELEKINESIS and TELEPATHY. Use these words accordingly in chapter 3.

Yukino- Mon 25 Dec 2006
In chapter 2:

1. Please know the difference between these two words. HERE and HEAR.
2. You keep on spelling it as WANDER. It should be WONDER. You might want to use a spell checker. MS Word has one but if your only typing from notepad then try copy pasting it first on an email. Then have the email client check for wrong spellings.
3. You don't say it as BUILD. Use BUILT instead.
4. Keep your Author's comments at the end of your chapters. Seeing them inside the context of the chapter is unsightly.
5. I think you may have misspelled the headmaster's name. I think it should be Inutaisho. Inu - dog. Taisho - great leader/general
6. On a final note. Kindly re-read your chapter so that you can fins some of your mistakes. After that, try reading the chapter out loud. This exercise is for you to know if the words you used for your sentences sounds right.

Yukino- Mon 25 Dec 2006
Hmm..you definitely need a beta. I'm seeing a lot of unrelated statements. There are lots of punctuation and spelling errors as well. If you get a good beta you will inprove in no time.

Again in chapter 1:
1. Use Ms. when the person is single. However, use Mrs when the person is married. You were refering to Mrs. Higurashi as a Ms.
2. Kindly research the Japanese words that you would be using. Mushi means insect. Moshi moshi a greeting used for telephone conversations.

Yukino- Mon 25 Dec 2006
In Chapter 1:

1. You didn't make Kagome take a shower. Remember Kagome likes to take lots of baths she always like to take a dip into hot springs. You could say that she could be a bathing freak as she likes to take a bath whenever there is an oppurtunity.
2. If you've seen pictures of Kagome from the manga, you would notice that she would have blue gray eyes. This is so that she could be differentiated from Kikyou who looks exactly like her.

Crystal Redemption- Sat 23 Dec 2006
omg plz update i wanna know wat happens....I cred....so sad i love ur story and i had been following it on fanfiction.net but then i saw it here and saw it was more updated so thnx and plz continue at ur leisure.

Lady Of 09- Sat 23 Dec 2006
YAY! U UPDATED AGAIN!!! I CANT WAIT TO SEE WUT HAPPENS NEXT MUAH!

sakura2790- Sat 23 Dec 2006
hey is just wanted to say luved ur story it was really good. looking forward to reading more of it.

KiAnE- Sat 23 Dec 2006
UPDATE SOOOOOOON DAMMIT!!! I THINK IM GOING TO DIE IF YOU DONT HURRY!! HOW COULD YOU LET SESSHY PIC THAT BYTCH?!? *crying* POOR KAGOME!!!

Never-Here-4-Me- Sat 23 Dec 2006
NOOOO!!!! I don't believe this!!! Don't go Kagome!!! Well,*sniff-sniff* please update soon! I can't wait for the next chapter! I am not a patient person! SO PLEASE HURRY!!!

DEIDRE SARCHAN- Fri 22 Dec 2006
OMG I LOVE THIS FIC U NEED 2 MAKE MORE OF IT I LOVE IT SOO MUCH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

DEIDRE SARCHAN- Fri 22 Dec 2006
OMG I LOVE THIS FIC U NEED 2 MAKE MORE OF IT I LOVE IT SOO MUCH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

DEIDRE- Fri 22 Dec 2006
OMG I LOVE THIS FIC U NEED 2 MAKE MORE OF IT I LOVE IT SOO MUCH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Raa- Fri 22 Dec 2006
LOVE IT!!! Please, update soon!

becky bystrak- Fri 22 Dec 2006
heyy great story luv it i hope sesshomaru and kagome get back together soon hope u add more chapters soon

tapanga- Fri 22 Dec 2006
omg i love this story! its awsome, so please update as soon as you can. I cant wait!!

Siruka- Fri 22 Dec 2006
Please update soon and please kill Kagura slow and painfully.

kagsesskyo- Fri 22 Dec 2006
It's been sooooo long since you updated! But I'm glad you did, thank you!!!! ^-^ And I can't wait for you to update the next chapter, so Kagura can get her ass kicked!!! XD

Lady Of 09- Fri 22 Dec 2006
Me Likey Me Likey Alot!

black moon inu- Fri 24 Nov 2006
all I can say is this is awsome. I haven't had so much fun reading a story like this one.

Megan Consoer- Wed 15 Nov 2006
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

Megan Consoer- Tue 07 Nov 2006
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

rae_gurl- Tue 10 Oct 2006
will you hurry up and make a new chap. becaus i have been waiting forever for if.

ashley- Mon 09 Oct 2006
I hope you write more of this story becuse you have to get to the good part. I really hope you finish this story.

helikesitheymikey!- Thu 31 Aug 2006
Okay I'm only on the 3rd chapter right now, but I wanted to point out before I forget that
"telekinesis" is levatating stuff and "telepathy" is reading/messing with people's minds.

FlyingDamnSquirel- Sun 16 Jul 2006
I don't think you need to edit anything. every story has errors; small, big, whatever- i'm just asking you to continue writing you story. it's really good and i'm shaking wondering what's going to happen next. just to let you know, you have people who really admire your work! don't forget about them!

sesshsmate101- Fri 14 Jul 2006
EWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!! He totaly ewww with you and like stained and ewwwwwwww!!! anyways can't wait till the fucking bitch gets what she deserves!! MAWAHAHAHAHA

sesshsmate101- Fri 14 Jul 2006
HA HA!! Goo Kagome! You make that teacher piss himself!! MWAHAHAHA

sesshsmate101- Fri 14 Jul 2006
aawww.....poor kagome....i feel so bad for her...if i wasnt so hyper id cry...

sesshsmate101- Fri 14 Jul 2006
WOAH!! That was totally unexpected! Who knew that a round of twenty questions would turn into someone fainting in pain?

sesshsmate101- Fri 14 Jul 2006
I liked that...kagz needed closuer (er..spelll check?) And so was KAgome's first love a bear youkai?

sesshsmate101- Fri 14 Jul 2006
Oh my god!! WOW! That was the reason..i neer would have guessed...and wait..... i wonder who her first love was...

sesshsmate101- Fri 14 Jul 2006
15 times!!! WOAH!! AND like that was some hot sex! heh heh.... it was kinda rushed though...but then again, i liked those!!!

sesshsmate101- Fri 14 Jul 2006
HA HA! YEAH! And i thought the plan was going to work...silly me...

sesshsmate101- Fri 14 Jul 2006
HAHAHAHAH!! OMFG!!!! lol!! That is so funny!!! HAHA! and the girls are just excepting left and right lmao!!

sesshsmate101- Fri 14 Jul 2006
WOAH! Kags was kinda slow there, ne? lol
but really..sessh really knos how to oush her buttons huh?

sesshsmate101- Fri 14 Jul 2006
lol!! I loved the info on all the girls... and I love how sneaky the guys are..he he!!

sesshsmate101- Fri 14 Jul 2006
WOW!!! Kagome's past is rockin! That is so kewl!! I can't wait to find out the guys' pasts!

sesshsmate101- Fri 14 Jul 2006
LOL!! I loved their reaction! I pictured all of them falling out of their chairs and fallin on their asses yelling "Oh My God!!" lmao!!

sesshsmate101- Fri 14 Jul 2006
YEAH!! I love it when Kagome is a demon of sorts.. call me a sucker, but for some reason I love those kind. And also.. that kiss was smokin'!

sesshsmate101- Fri 14 Jul 2006
LOL!! I love how each person is connected. Like Sessh and Kagz both do pc, while Kik and Inu do passwords.. its cool and kinda kawaii!

sesshsmate101- Fri 14 Jul 2006
Ooo I love the evil Kagome! She rocks to high heaven!

sesshsmate101- Fri 14 Jul 2006
one word... shit. I feel bad for them well not really cuz i'd love to share a room with anyone of them...well maybe not so much Miroku...
Mir: You wound me, Lady SM
SM:Cut the innocent act, Miroku. I'll just tell Sango
Mir: NO!!

sesshsmate101- Fri 14 Jul 2006
YAY! I like it...and Kikyo being a good guy (even though I hate her sometimes and tinks she needs to die) is a good idea..in fact in mine she is a good guy...slightly...i guess...heh heh

Tensaiga- Wed 12 Jul 2006
OMG i 3 3 3 THIS STORY. lol. Can't wait till you update.

FLUFFY-CHAN'S MATE- Tue 11 Jul 2006
I AM SO ENTRALLED WITH THIS FANFIC...BUT IT'S CONSTANTLY DISCONCERTING THAT IT HASN'T BEEN UPDATED IN MONTHS.. I READ THIS STORY MONTHS AGO...AND GUESS WHAT... NOTHING HAS CHANED... DONT GET ME WRONG IT'S JUST UPSETING TO THINK THAT IT WAS UPDATED...WHEN IT WAS SIMPLY RE-POSTED...IT'S GETTING RIDICULOUS..IF YOU'RE NOT GOING TO FINISH IT... THEN JUS STOP TORTURING UR FAITFULL READERS...I HOPE YOU CAN DO SOMETHING THAT WOULD BENEFIT BOTH PARTY'S...IN THE END THIS STORY IS A TEASE... IT GET'S YOU EXCITED FOR NOTHING...YOU'RE A GREAT WRITER STOP BEING A DISAPPOINTMENT TO ME AND EVRYBODY ELSE

Uknown- Tue 11 Jul 2006
Wow, that's pretty sad that even though you're an author, you can't htink of any other words to use in your summery other then "gay" to discribe how your fiction is malfunctioning. Please think of others next time, because myself and other skip right over those stories.

FlyingDamnSquirel- Tue 11 Jul 2006
i love your storie!!!!!! i'll be watching it for new updates!!! can't wait for it to be finished! >.

BECKY BYSTRAK- Thu 08 Jun 2006
HEYY I LOVE UR STORY
PLEASE DO CONTINUE WRITIN SOME MORE CHAPTERS WUT WILL HAPPEN TO KAGOME AND SESSHOMARU?

Megan Consoer- Tue 23 May 2006
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

karu moonlight shadow- Mon 15 May 2006
i loooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooove it UPDATE ASAP

unknown- Tue 09 May 2006
KEEP WRITING ITS A REALLY GOOD STORY

unknown- Tue 09 May 2006
KEEP WRITING ITS A REALLY GOOD STORY

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